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An Ancient Place

Quaint town, orange sky and spitting roosters, a trail of mosaic remembrances translates into lavender hints of folks’ spiraled notes: women balancing baskets of corn strewn on the hips, a siege of fluted weeds meshing with tropical winds along the lake... being there, just there among ruined cathedrals and flared umbrellas I cannot touch: I think there is never an after… for cruising along roads leading to papaya huts, the numbered days wrap my flesh with a repertoire of flora, sitting upon the magic of rapture; amiably watching a madrigal of a fiesta… the carriage of lifted chants rippling on anointed elements of earth and fire. Those blessed statues, these I cannot caress, not even the letters in the museum which tamed stars of centuries’ quest: it can be cold just watching without holding. My eyes swallow the moon beautiful with some kind of soulful whiteness; my own river of reverie tipsy. Misty. For Silent One's Contest Enter the Your best poem with metaphors

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Date: 8/11/2015 2:33:00 PM
Vividly lovely as only your pen can do them! Congratulations, Nette, on a top win! Pandita
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Date: 8/10/2015 6:25:00 PM
Terrific write! Keep it up.
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Date: 8/10/2015 6:25:00 PM
Nette, :-) Congratulations on your wonderful win! *SKAT*
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Date: 8/10/2015 3:14:00 PM
Awesome use of metaphors !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:25:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning poem nette! Masterful creative work!
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Date: 8/9/2015 5:13:00 PM
Your kind of poetry is MADE for metaphor. Congrats again, dearie!!
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Date: 8/9/2015 10:03:00 AM
Congrautulations on your win, a 7 Hugs Eve
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Date: 1/12/2012 12:56:00 PM
Pang postcard ang dating, nette! Pwede ba maki-piyesta?? definitely a barrage of feast of images yet again! Congrats on your win! grabe antok na ako-- tapusin ko lang chocolates in between ---hugs!
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Date: 1/12/2012 9:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Come to Your Senses" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/12/2012 8:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie's contest Nette.
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Date: 1/12/2012 5:43:00 AM
Congratulations nette well done. x
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Date: 1/12/2012 12:28:00 AM
Sounds like a special, big deal.....Hey, I don't think you need to explain about your punctuation and small caps...DO YOUR THING...Poetry is FREE!
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Date: 1/11/2012 9:47:00 PM
CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON A TOP TEN WIN FOR THIS EXOTIC POETRY .. SUCH FANTASTIC WORDS ..OH...
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Date: 1/11/2012 5:56:00 PM
Simply marvelous. I LOVE it, Nette. Congratulations.
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Date: 1/11/2012 3:58:00 PM
Most beautiful nette! A masterpiece indeed and congratulations on your winnings. Tipsy, misty...master of fine art!
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Date: 1/10/2012 8:25:00 PM
congrast nette! saw your win too in the soup, and this piece just affirm your mastery in this art. beautiful, specially love those last lines
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Date: 1/10/2012 8:20:00 PM
Hey soup result is out and you won!! Visit the blogs.A big Congrats!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 1/10/2012 8:13:00 PM
thanks, all.. a very sacred moment for me..:)
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Date: 1/10/2012 2:51:00 PM
Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winner to me..So descriptive that I can see the scene..Thanks for stopping by and reading about the slug eating the one spot of jelly on the cat's plate..Sara
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Date: 1/10/2012 2:31:00 PM
What a wonderful write full of color and imagery! I loved the flow of your poem and the tiny pieces of descriptions that I got to visualize and bask in! Such a fantastic write Nette! You outdid yourself with this one!! Awesome Work!!
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Date: 1/10/2012 9:48:00 AM
This is just mesmerizing Nette.I love your choice of words here.An excellent entry to Debi's contest.Best wishes.
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Date: 1/10/2012 9:35:00 AM
A riveting journey through time. I think that you should submit this poem to some History journals for publication! You gratuitously utilize colloquial and cultural tropes to present an enchanting picture of an exotic people.
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Date: 1/10/2012 9:09:00 AM
A beautiful array of words and images.. You wrote a work of art with musical colors and words .... Best wishes in the contest... luv and long hugs Michael
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Date: 1/10/2012 8:54:00 AM
Breathtaking !!! Lovely imagery !!!
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Date: 1/10/2012 8:46:00 AM
Nette you make me wish of myself a Time-Traveler. What a wonderful place this must be in ancient times and hopefully someday the stars will guide us all back to simpler, yet more meaningful and mystical times.
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