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An Acute Ache

"Can you feel the soul of an abandoned house; can you hear the whispering? " Quote by _Constance La France Your ancestors had built me, brick by brick, with devotion, I withstood the sun and shower and earthquake commotion; Your birth in me, like a little doll, gave me immense pride, How I cherished your creeping, crawling, and dandy horse ride...! Your sleeping, rising, walking, running, singing, and dancing, In your reading, writing, drawing, and painting advancing; In Your eating and drinking, dressing up and making-up, I have taken pleasure in your bird-like nimble, quick sup...! Your first school, first satchel, and first fancy materials, Your graduation, first job, wedding, and such serials, Each event of your life, O child mine, I'd been witnessing, Never at any of your steps, you found me grimacing...! You have grown, now, physically and psychically, much, In health, wealth, learning, and love you now lack nothing as such; For the sake of your dream palace, you have abandoned me, As though a ghost, my very face you do not want to see...! I am not, yet, frightened of my loneliness and neglect, Though day by day, I am by winds and storms and tempest wrecked; I just want to feel your presence within for short instants, Lest an acute ache eats me up and ends my existence...!!! 27 May 2023 Writing Challenge - C Quotes - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Rhymes Checked At: Rhyme Zone Syllables Checked At: How Many Syllables

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Date: 6/15/2023 2:43:00 AM
Belated congratulations on your writing c challenge. I can hear the bones of that house crying out in despair.
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Date: 6/7/2023 4:58:00 PM
That's what we do ~ we grow up and one day we leave. It's sad to see a house that's no longer wanted. Your poem tells the story. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 6/6/2023 5:23:00 AM
- Touching and beautifully written, Alex - Congratulations on your win -
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Date: 6/6/2023 4:10:00 AM
Congratulations on this winner in Constance's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara
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Date: 6/5/2023 3:04:00 AM
Hi Chris, this is perhaps the best I have read in this series. You have made a beautiful personification. After all the care taken by the home building to nurture us when it is deserted mercilessly, it still longs for our company and stays without raising any complaint unto its last. Great poem. Well deserved first place. Into my FAVE
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Date: 6/4/2023 3:11:00 PM
Dear Christuraj, Congratulations on your top win in the contest. Enjoyed your, a very touching poem, but also felt sad imagining an abandoned house which has witnessed every step of your childhood and young life - feels true! You are so good in using rhyme in your poems - I wish I were! Thank you for presenting another stunning poem. To my faves. BW ~ Mala
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Date: 6/4/2023 1:07:00 PM
Hi Chris, You penned a good poem with your chosen quote. Congrats on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a great day;-) Alexis
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Date: 6/4/2023 6:55:00 AM
The entire poem is very beautifully written. The last two lines are, indeed, very touching. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/4/2023 1:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win in the Contest ....Christuraj.
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Date: 6/3/2023 8:53:00 PM
Christuraj, this is so beautiful. Congratulations on your topmost win. A well written poem.
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 6/4/2023 1:47:00 AM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Date: 6/3/2023 6:53:00 PM
Christuraj, thank you so much for sharing your wonderful poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations and well done !
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 6/3/2023 8:36:00 PM
Thank your very for the opportunity you have given to me. May God Bless You!

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