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Amidst The Darkened Veils

'Neath umbra skies I seek a mirrored moment the breeze a capricious charmer blows serpentine sways to life a ballet of many dancers raspy edged in gentle silver-green dulling in the ever dimming light their symphony of soft cymbals’ siss luring my thoughts to ramble a willowy maze mesmerizing my mental landscape at sunset whispers lulling my linger moon-shimmer lends its voice to chanting chimes in magenta magic dropping notes afloat on aging August’s currents like a sprinkling of stardust upon a cradlesong hymns of Venus vespers soothing me my silhouette glides a twilight shadow an astral body with a vitality all its own as the unwed wind ushers my air brushed footsteps to where wild whimsy wafts my sighs free from fetters a fading breath liberated to dusk vibrations in violet call my name I have found the echo to my essence a spirit aswirl in whirling charcoal veils - I seize a sylph’s escape and amidst the darkened veils... we dance Susan Ashley August 24, 2019 ~ First Place ~ Contest: N-A Rerun 3 Sponsor: John Hamilton ~ Poem Of The Week ~ Week of September 1, 2019

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Date: 10/5/2019 11:19:00 AM
Love your use of color, movement, and appreciation in this. It left me dancing!! Lonna
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Susan Ashley
Date: 10/10/2019 1:46:00 PM
Thank you, dear Lonna, for your beautiful comments. Your lovely thoughts and kind visit are ever appreciated, dear poetess. I hope to catch up with your wondrous poetry soon, as I've been unable to be here much lately. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/27/2019 10:38:00 PM
This is a wow Susan! Congratulations on it being honored with First Place! : ) xxoo
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Date: 9/29/2019 6:09:00 PM
Your 'wow' and your heartwarming congrats are both truly appreciated, as is your return visit Connie. Thank you for your sharing your kindness with me, dear poetess. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/27/2019 6:30:00 PM
It’s great to see this one at the top. Congrats!
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Date: 9/27/2019 8:01:00 PM
Richard, your return visit and heartwarming congrats are a joy to receive. Thank you for your gracious comment. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/27/2019 12:30:00 PM
Loved the symbolism and sensual quality of this one Susan! Lonna
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Date: 9/27/2019 8:03:00 PM
I relish your beautiful comment and your lovely visit, Lonna. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem and your wonderful presence is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/26/2019 7:22:00 PM
I thought I recall this beauty, hard to believe it got poem of the week and received an N/A, congrats on a top win!
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Date: 9/26/2019 9:55:00 PM
John, thank you for your lovely comments and kind congrats. I truly appreciate the honor of my placement in your contest and the chance to share the podium with such talented poets/poetesses. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/15/2019 6:57:00 PM
this absolutely deserved a poem of the week. Wow, Sterling writing from you, Susan. BIG congrats for the honor you received.
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Date: 9/17/2019 11:21:00 AM
Andrea, I relish your uplifting comments and your heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated and I thank you for your kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/15/2019 3:43:00 AM
Wow Susan, I'm lost for words!! This is poetry at its very best; the topic, choice of words, phrasing, alliteration, movement, colours, imagery, all join in to deliver another masterpiece which is certainly going to my favs. ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend // paul
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Date: 9/17/2019 11:20:00 AM
It is always such a gift and a joy to receive your beautiful comments, Paul, and when you tell me that you are lost for words - well, that just multiplies my joy many many more times. Thank you for your thoughtful and inspiring comments and for the honor of your fav. Your presence here enhances my poetic experience greatly, my dear friend, and for that I am always so appreciative. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/9/2019 7:13:00 PM
Great expressionism. Well written.
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:17:00 PM
Thank you for your beautiful comments, Edmund. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/9/2019 3:27:00 PM
Lovely poem!
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:18:00 PM
Thank you for your lovely comment, Smita. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~ Susan
Date: 9/7/2019 5:38:00 AM
Such wonderful words. So many images. I really enjoyed this.
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:20:00 PM
Peter, thank you for gracing my poem with your esteemed presence and beautiful comments. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/6/2019 11:52:00 AM
A brilliant choice for POTW... congrats.
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:21:00 PM
Thank you, Silent One, for your return visit and heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/5/2019 1:17:00 PM
Wonderful write Susan, congrats on POTW, top honors for this well phrased delightful poesy!
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:23:00 PM
Thank you, John, for your wonderful visit and heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/4/2019 1:30:00 PM
Hello Susan, I like the last two verses of these poem. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:41:00 PM
Hello Darlene, I’m so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your wonderful comments and heartwarming visit, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/4/2019 5:15:00 AM
Congrats Susan...POTW... Best of best my friend....
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:42:00 PM
Thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming congrats, mon ami. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/3/2019 9:59:00 AM
Just gorgeous, Susan. Well done indeed. Congrats on POTW
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:44:00 PM
Thank you, Dale, for gracing my poem with your wonderful presence and lovely comments. Your kind congrats are truly appreciated as well. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/3/2019 4:23:00 AM
This poem had me mesmerized from start to finish. Another beautiful example of your exquisite writing my friend. Congrats on a well deserved POTW. John
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Date: 9/13/2019 6:47:00 PM
I’m elated to know my poem had the ability to mesmerize you, John, as your beautiful poetry has certainly mesmerized me as well. Thank you for your gracious comments and kind congrats, my friend. You are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/2/2019 6:34:00 PM
While reading your words, chills form and then so tenderly- they linger upon moments of me. Within your poetry, you create a beautiful mood and I am lost in the melody. I am in awe. Congratulations Susan, on Poem of the Week. :) Brandy
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:29:00 PM
Brandy, I always relish your visits and your treasured thoughts that are so beautifully expressed. Thank you for gracing my poem with your lovely presence and for your kindhearted congrats. Please accept my apologies for my late reply as life has been a whirlwind lately without much time to be here. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/2/2019 12:24:00 PM
Susan Susan Susan. I knew I was wrong about this poem. I gave it read after read after read but it would NOT give itself up to me. It screeched at me (waftily) as I walked away and left it in round 2. I said “well you’ve had your chance.” It stuck its tongue out and said “Whatever. Don’t need you anyway.” Which has proved correct. I’m thinking of asking it out to dinner to apologise. (Plus it really might give itself up to me after that!) Congratulations on POTW x
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Susan Ashley
Date: 9/14/2019 4:41:00 PM
Nina, Nina, Nina! :) Without your wonderful contest to inspire my imagination, this poem might have never been written, so my muse thanks you for your always wonderful contest prompts and your excellent judging. To place in your contest is always a high honor for the deserving poets here. But, my poem wouldn't decline that tasty invitation to dinner you have so generously extended.. in fact, it's slipping into a cocktail dress now for a traipse out on the town with you.. (I'm sure you'll both be on the same page after a few drinks.. lol!) Thank you for your awesome comments and kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/2/2019 5:34:00 AM
Talk about setting the bar high indeed, its no wonder to see this beauty being honored with POTW. Susan my dearest friend you did it again. Congratulations....Maria Hugs
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:46:00 PM
Maria, my sweet, wonderful and beautifully artistic friend, thank you so much for sending my spirits soaring with your lovely comments and kindhearted congrats. Please accept my apologies for my late reply to your treasured comments, life has been a whirlwind lately and haven't left me much time to be here unfortunately. I will catch up with your poetic gems very soon, my dear poetic sister. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/2/2019 4:49:00 AM
Beautiful Susan, congratulations on POTW!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 7:35:00 PM
Thank you, Tania, for your lovely comments and kind congrats, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/2/2019 1:50:00 AM
You always set the bar high Susan, another brilliant verse from your pen, Well deserved congratulations on POTW honours. Tom
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:48:00 PM
I relish your uplifting comments, Tom, and your heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated and I thank you for your kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/1/2019 10:55:00 PM
:o) bro bro
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Date: 9/13/2019 7:37:00 PM
Your precious presence is always uplifting and so wonderfully appreciated, my dear bro bro. Love and hugs, the saner of your two sissies ~Illum <3
Date: 9/1/2019 8:34:00 PM
I am not surprised to see this poem given the honor of poem of the week...back to wish you a congrats!~ :) hugs
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:54:00 PM
Your return visit is a joy to receive, Sandra. Thank you for taking the time to extend your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/1/2019 8:31:00 PM
Congrats on POTW, an excellent choice.
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Date: 9/13/2019 7:38:00 PM
Thank you, Richard, for your lovely comments and heartwarming congrats. I treasure both. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/1/2019 2:34:00 PM
Congratulations on having this gorgeous poem deservedly honored with POTW Susan! It is a poem you can be very proud of. "vibrations in violet call my name" reminds me of the violet flame. Bravo! Encore! xxoo
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Date: 9/14/2019 5:02:00 PM
Thank you, Connie, for gracing my poem with your wonderful presence and lovely comments. You always see the spirituality in the imagination of my work and I so appreciate your open mind, heart and soul. Your kind congrats are truly appreciated as well. Warmest wishes always my dear friend.. ~Susan
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