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Amidst the Darkened Veils

'Neath umbra skies I seek a mirrored moment the breeze a capricious charmer blows serpentine sways to life a ballet of tall switchgrass dancers sweeping edges raspy green dulling in the ever dimming light their brassy symphony a soft cymbals’ siss lure my thoughts to ramble a willowy maze mesmerizing my mental landscape at sunset whispers lulling my linger moon-shimmer lends its voice to chanting chimes in magenta magic dropping notes afloat on aging August’s currents like a sprinkling of stardust upon a cradlesong hymns of Venus vespers soothing me my silhouette glides a twilight shadow an astral body with a vitality all its own as the unwed wind ushers my air brushed footsteps to where wild whimsy wafts my sighs free from fetters a fading breath liberated to dusk vibrations in violet call my name I have found the echo to my essence a spirit aswirl in a whirl of charcoal veils - I seize a sylph’s escape and amidst the darkened veils.. we dance Susan Ashley August 24, 2019 ~ Fifth Place ~ Premiere Contest: A Brain Strand Choice No 1185 Sponsor: Brian Strand ~ Third Place ~ Premiere Contest: 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 8 Sponsor: Mark Toney ~ First Place ~ Contest: N/A Rerun 3 Sponsor: John Hamilton ~ Poem Of The Week ~ Week of September 1, 2019

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/15/2023 6:44:00 AM

Back with congratulations. SK

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/15/2023 7:48:00 AM

Thank you, Sara. Your return visit as well as your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/13/2023 12:46:00 PM

Very expressive and creative winning work in Brian's contest. Congratulations on your name being there. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by my page with congratulations. Sara

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/13/2023 8:44:00 PM

Dear Sara, I relish your gracious visit and lovely thoughts. Your kind congrats are appreciated. Thank you for your heartwarming words and you're welcome for my visit to your page. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Beata Agustin

Date: 2/13/2023 7:28:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent through your muse expressed along your awesome poetic style... God bless you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/13/2023 8:42:00 PM

Dear Beata, your beautiful comments and kind congrats are uplifting and appreciated. Thank you for your heartwarming visit, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/31/2022 9:44:00 AM

Dear Rhyme Time Friend, I am totally enchanted in the mystical magic of your lines and beautiful, original images - "vibrations in violet," "charcoal veils," "magenta music!" Your magnificent gift shines in every flowing line like silk veils! Congratulations on your win! Sending you blessings on dancing wings of loveliness dear poetry sis!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/1/2022 3:56:00 PM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, I am totally enchanted with your wonderful visit and inspiring comments. Your beautiful thoughts humble and touch my heart deeply. Thank you, my sweet poetry sis, for your uplifting presence and heartwarming congrats. Your shining friendship is embraced always, as is your exquisite poetry! Warmest wishes sent afloat August currents.. ~Susan

John Watt

Date: 7/24/2022 2:37:00 PM

Dear Susan, I am gently being lulled to a tranquil sleep as this mental landscape perambulates into a dusky dreamland of moonbeam magic. I am an eternal student of your enchanting phraseology: favorites here include "hymns of Venus vespers", "a spirit aswirl in a whirl", and "where wild whimsy wafts", among so many others. What a talent you possess, your originality dazzles; I exult in your continued marathon pace - keep those shoelaces tied! PoBro

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2022 7:42:00 AM

My dear PoBro, I marvel at how naturally poetic you are! I just love the use of the word "perambulates" - such a beautiful word.. as are all your precious words expressing your thoughts through the wonder of your genuine heart and soulful spirit. And, don't think I haven't noticed the alliteration sprinkled like enchanting stardust amongst the beauty of your comments "dusky dreamland" and "moonbeam magic"... the magic of your message lifts me in elation to touch the sky -- now that's some potent magic, my inspiring friend. Thank you, John, for your wonderful friendship and poetic kinship. You are ever appreciated. Keep your shoelaces tied too! Anybody's race, many more miles to go!:)) Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~your PS-PS

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/20/2022 11:42:00 PM

Oh Susan, I love this poem so much. I remember this beauty. If I haven’t already Faved it I will now. This is poetry at its best! Congratulations on your podium win. I would have trouble choosing the trophy amount the top three. All are so well written and unique. Blessings xxoo

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/27/2022 7:47:00 AM

Dearest Connie, I relish your return visit and cherish your beautiful thoughts. Indeed, the podium is filled with the amazing works of such gifted poets, I would have trouble choosing placements for poems as well.. how do you pick just one for the top spot? It fills me with gratitude to have your lovely spirit cast its golden glow upon both my heart and my poem. Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Valsa George

Date: 7/20/2022 9:48:00 PM

Wow.... this is a melage of striking images and movements ! It is not the moon that 'chants chimes in magenta magic', but you, Susan! I feel the "spirit aswirl in a whirl of charcoal veils "- As we read on we also get transported to a world of no fetters and dance with you as 'unbodied joy'! Congratulations, dear Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/27/2022 7:38:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, I am enchanted by the beauty and depth of your comments. That you were transported by my words into the elating spirit of my poem fills me with appreciation for the expanse of your grand poet's heart and soul. Thank you, my lovely friend and gifted poetess, for sharing in the emotions and in the swirling dance of 'unbodied joy' with me. I am ever grateful. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/20/2022 8:11:00 PM

"a capricious charmer", "serpentine sways " - with such and alike flowery figures of speech, the entire poem is very beautiful. Congratulations!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/23/2022 7:11:00 AM

Dear Christuraj, your gracious comments and heartwarming congrats are received with gratitude. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jeff Kyser

Date: 7/20/2022 6:22:00 PM

This is terrific, thanks for sharing it

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/23/2022 7:08:00 AM

Thank you for both your visit and lovely comment, Jeff. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Mark Toney

Date: 7/20/2022 5:41:00 PM

Susan, a poem of mystery and even romance, with exquisite phrases, such as “I seek a mirrored moment … whispers lulling my linger … where wild whimsy wafts my sighs … vibrations in violet call my name!” The last phrase significant since we all know that violet light has the highest energy, frequency and vibration. Enough energy so you can dance! Congratulations on your podium finish on mile 8 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 9 has already started!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/23/2022 7:06:00 AM

Dear Mark, thank you for the distinction of my placement in your wonderful contest and for your heartwarming congrats. I relish your beautiful thoughts. It is an honor to be listed among the talented poets on your list. Congrats to all and your contest sponsorship is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 10/5/2019 11:19:00 AM

Love your use of color, movement, and appreciation in this. It left me dancing!! Lonna

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/10/2019 1:46:00 PM

Thank you, dear Lonna, for your beautiful comments. Your lovely thoughts and kind visit are ever appreciated, dear poetess. I hope to catch up with your wondrous poetry soon, as I've been unable to be here much lately. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/27/2019 10:38:00 PM

This is a wow Susan! Congratulations on it being honored with First Place! : ) xxoo

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/29/2019 6:09:00 PM

Your 'wow' and your heartwarming congrats are both truly appreciated, as is your return visit Connie. Thank you for your sharing your kindness with me, dear poetess. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/27/2019 6:30:00 PM

It’s great to see this one at the top. Congrats!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/27/2019 8:01:00 PM

Richard, your return visit and heartwarming congrats are a joy to receive. Thank you for your gracious comment. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 9/27/2019 12:30:00 PM

Loved the symbolism and sensual quality of this one Susan! Lonna

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/27/2019 8:03:00 PM

I relish your beautiful comment and your lovely visit, Lonna. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem and your wonderful presence is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 9/26/2019 7:22:00 PM

I thought I recall this beauty, hard to believe it got poem of the week and received an N/A, congrats on a top win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/26/2019 9:55:00 PM

John, thank you for your lovely comments and kind congrats. I truly appreciate the honor of my placement in your contest and the chance to share the podium with such talented poets/poetesses. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2019 6:57:00 PM

this absolutely deserved a poem of the week. Wow, Sterling writing from you, Susan. BIG congrats for the honor you received.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/17/2019 11:21:00 AM

Andrea, I relish your uplifting comments and your heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated and I thank you for your kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 9/15/2019 3:43:00 AM

Wow Susan, I'm lost for words!! This is poetry at its very best; the topic, choice of words, phrasing, alliteration, movement, colours, imagery, all join in to deliver another masterpiece which is certainly going to my favs. ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/17/2019 11:20:00 AM

It is always such a gift and a joy to receive your beautiful comments, Paul, and when you tell me that you are lost for words - well, that just multiplies my joy many many more times. Thank you for your thoughtful and inspiring comments and for the honor of your fav. Your presence here enhances my poetic experience greatly, my dear friend, and for that I am always so appreciative. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Edmund Strempfl

Date: 9/9/2019 7:13:00 PM

Great expressionism. Well written.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:17:00 PM

Thank you for your beautiful comments, Edmund. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 9/9/2019 3:27:00 PM

Lovely poem!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:18:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely comment, Smita. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~ Susan

Peter Rees

Date: 9/7/2019 5:38:00 AM

Such wonderful words. So many images. I really enjoyed this.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:20:00 PM

Peter, thank you for gracing my poem with your esteemed presence and beautiful comments. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 9/6/2019 11:52:00 AM

A brilliant choice for POTW... congrats.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:21:00 PM

Thank you, Silent One, for your return visit and heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 9/5/2019 1:17:00 PM

Wonderful write Susan, congrats on POTW, top honors for this well phrased delightful poesy!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:23:00 PM

Thank you, John, for your wonderful visit and heartwarming congrats, both are truly appreciated my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/4/2019 1:30:00 PM

Hello Susan, I like the last two verses of these poem. Have a nice day my friend.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:41:00 PM

Hello Darlene, I’m so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your wonderful comments and heartwarming visit, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 9/4/2019 5:15:00 AM

Congrats Susan...POTW... Best of best my friend....

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:42:00 PM

Thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming congrats, mon ami. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 9/3/2019 9:59:00 AM

Just gorgeous, Susan. Well done indeed. Congrats on POTW

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/13/2019 6:44:00 PM

Thank you, Dale, for gracing my poem with your wonderful presence and lovely comments. Your kind congrats are truly appreciated as well. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan