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Always Gray

they say look, and the sun will come one day oh, but they did not say all they knew like vines that climb and choke the light the stars are darker than the night and the pain i've gained from losing you like the absent dawn will always be gray 8/17/23

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Bill Baker

Date: 12/19/2023 9:53:00 PM

I like the creative rhyme pattern, Michelle. The imagery of your feeling from your loss or eloquent, my friend. I enjoyed reading your poetry today. I want to wish you and those you love, a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year! Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

John Watt

Date: 9/20/2023 3:02:00 PM

Compact with impact. Achingly brilliant. I just sent a response to your soupmail. Take care, my friend ~ John

Gary Radice

Date: 9/14/2023 10:31:00 AM

What a very poignant but beautifully written poem with its clever symmetrical rhyme scheme (enveloped rhyme??). Kudos to you Michelle. Cheers - Gsry

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 8/29/2023 2:52:00 PM

Woah, hormones or what, this just knocked the wind out of me and my eyes be leaking. A fave, cuz am a glutton for punishment ;), Phenomenal ink. xomo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/30/2023 4:53:00 PM

I guess I am too, thanks so much Mo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/27/2023 6:06:00 PM

You have revealed so much about emotions in these few descriptive lines, Michelle. Janice

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/30/2023 4:53:00 PM

Thank you kindly Janice

Christina Bowring

Date: 8/26/2023 11:52:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem Michelle expressed so well.So much conveyed and felt in those few lines. The line, ‘ like vines that climb and choke the light’ is so powerful. A very poignant, touching poem which I am going to fave as, having lost and still grieving for my beloved father, I can, like so many, relate to. Poetry is to be felt, to touch the soul, not just heard and this one I felt immensely. Thank you Michelle.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/27/2023 3:36:00 PM

I am very honored this has such a deep meaning for you, and my condolences for your loss~

Susan Lawrence

Date: 8/26/2023 8:04:00 AM

So deep with loss which envelopes each word . I feel the pain you have described … the ache and the loneliness inside. Absent dawn says it all . Big hugs and belated congratulations on your win Michelle . Susan :)

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/27/2023 3:36:00 PM

I am very glad you like it, thank you kindly Susan

Jcb Brul

Date: 8/25/2023 2:13:00 PM

I love the “absent dawn” will always be gray’. Mesmerizing metaphor! congratulations.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/27/2023 3:35:00 PM

I appreciate your comment, thank you very much

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/23/2023 9:24:00 PM

Painful and poignant. Superbly penned, Michelle ~ warmest congratulations on your win

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/24/2023 8:22:00 PM

Thank you very much

Paige Hind

Date: 8/22/2023 2:05:00 PM

I'm feeling "the stars are darker than the night" - beautiul work; like your work always is!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/23/2023 8:25:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paige, appreciate it

David Fisher

Date: 8/20/2023 11:08:00 AM

Thank you for sharing this touching poem...and enjoyed the rhyming scheme that works so well.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/23/2023 8:25:00 PM

I'm glad you liked it, thank you David

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 8/18/2023 2:35:00 PM

This is so sad Michael. It brings my dear brother-in-law to my mind. My sister passed away in December, and the love of her life, married to her since he was seventeen, has been so devastated. All who knew and love her so much, are so heart broken, but for him, this poem is a comparative to his heart. Beautiful poem, loss is horrendous in the passing of the incredibly loved and beautiful. Your heart bespeaks the passing of a beautiful person.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/23/2023 8:25:00 PM

I am honored to know this touched you in such a personal way, thank you very much for your heartfelt comment~

Panagiota Romios

Date: 8/18/2023 9:31:00 AM

Ouch, Michelle! I feel the angst and agony of your write on loos. My fav line was a powerful one, “The stars are darker than the night.” Brighter days do come but ar the time of loss,it seems impossible…… Pangie

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/23/2023 8:23:00 PM

Sometimes it does seem impossible but I think you should try to have hope, thanks for commenting, Pangie~

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/18/2023 6:13:00 AM

It is often claimed that time possesses the remarkable ability to alleviate one's sorrows; however, the anguish stemming from the loss of a loved one is enduring and remains steadfastly present.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/18/2023 7:45:00 AM

Thank you very much, sotto

Valsa George

Date: 8/18/2023 4:32:00 AM

Losing someone dear will make our days grey and our nights darker. I feel the pain in your words !

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/18/2023 7:44:00 AM

I appreciate that, thank you Valsa

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/18/2023 12:26:00 AM

They say time is a great healer but the pain of losing someone never really goes away. Tom

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/18/2023 7:44:00 AM

So true, thanks for your comment, Tom

Sally Eslinger

Date: 8/17/2023 9:03:00 PM

A stunning, exquisitely touching poem. It seems we both rose to moving gray dawns! Goodness! But the gray birthed Poetry…hmmm…Mine a sketch, yours, this one IMHO a classic. I love this one. A fav! Hugs, sally

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/17/2023 9:34:00 PM

I am so flattered, you always inspire me both with your poetic talent and your generous encouragement (I did make a small edit to the title and the end line) but am so pleased you liked it~

Eve Roper

Date: 8/17/2023 8:53:00 PM

A loss of a beloved one is so hard and heavy. But it does slowly ease with time. Enjoyed the heartfelt poem.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/17/2023 9:32:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve