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This poem focuses on BPD, Borderline Personality Disorder ~ and emotional turbulences associated with it. Inspired by the prompt " along with the thunder" sponsored by Edward Ibeh...

 

R a i n ~ a misted mirror coated in petrichor pain ~ fused with memories pirouetting through the veiled salt of the earth, caressing the Pina Colada dreams adrift in the icy-blue air, amidst clouds soaked in prismatic hues ~ arching like opalescent canopies, to hide the despair I’ve draped in dragonfly hues that no one knows but the moon and his merciful silver, forever stroking the silken surface of s i l e n c e ~ homed within my heart that aches… And along with the thunder ~ came confetti of scars, a piercing flash of metallic truth revealing midnight rays of how I’ve long been the storm ~ a murky sky of cracked constellations, a rush of roaring torrents, driving my thoughts to the honed borderline of tremors and torture ~ teetering on forsaken fragility. O dahlia dawn ~ I am the splitting tempest, the spectral outline of electrified lightning. I taste the bittersweet flavors of opaline stars ~ trembling in angst, as fleeting sparks of the buried past, too, feel the hurt beneath the pansies of paradise, where angels unfurl their wings, sprinkling tears of hope upon the battlefield of shattered dreams, lamenting the endless war that burns in the olive-green orchard of the grief-struck mind, where fairy-lights flicker neon hints of prejudice through broken twigs ~ a pitiful perception, amplifying the echoing embers floating above puddles of weathered lilies, stained with dust and powder, weaving a requiem for the f a l l e n jewels, walking through the trails of bruises and tilted tulips, bleeding poetry ~ beautified with polychromatic phrases and falcon ink that cuts through paper promises, leaving nothing but a restless reverie, breathing in the quivering warmth of quietude…

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Date: 5/27/2025 2:07:00 PM
IE, wondering if you're composing a series on various mental disorders. This seems to me to be painful like the previous poem on paranoid schizophrenia. I find it difficult to read these because I start to think I have these disorders. Fortunately, there's help available and the beauty of this writing is that your poetry could help someone recognize they should seek help. Of course, finding competent help is not so simple at all. Thank you for writing on this subject. It's thought provoking.
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Date: 5/26/2025 9:01:00 PM
Very poignant but a beautiful poem, Ink. As always. <3
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Date: 5/26/2025 5:06:00 AM
I remember you did one on this disorder previously. "How long I've been the storm... I am the splitting tempest". Says it all. Daniel is a psychologist too and has had much experience like you. I think he said recently he's retiring. The sad thing is there's no real cure for mental illness, as you know. Looking for healing for all in the future. Nice write and wishing you a painless week
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Date: 5/26/2025 6:24:00 AM
You deffo should post a pic of you with him some day. It would have been perfect with your tribute poem to him. Unless you're uncomfortable with it
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/26/2025 6:05:00 AM
My son has long hair too
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Date: 5/26/2025 6:04:00 AM
Haha wow you had nice hair ! Nice profile pic
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Tom Woody
Date: 5/26/2025 5:53:00 AM
Me at 21. It's my take on the hair contest ;)
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Date: 5/26/2025 5:33:00 AM
Thank you Tomsz, who is that in your profile pic? Appreciate always your kind support, truly. Sending you light
Date: 5/25/2025 7:16:00 PM
They said you were broken because the hues of your eyes could not be predicted, they claimed you fragile for feeling the fright of love lost in withering worlds, they believed you were damaged by your own defense against the touch of duplicitous ice, but you were never defeated by the dark drama, you've always been the wise wound warm...J.A.B.
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/26/2025 5:32:00 AM
Thank you very much, Justin
Date: 5/25/2025 9:46:00 AM
What an amazing write you have here. Great Picture... Life is not easy for many. "Good Luck" but you will not need it for this is a winner. Have a blessed day writing away..........
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/25/2025 12:22:00 PM
Thank you dear paula so kind of you!
Date: 5/25/2025 9:36:00 AM
Simply incredible! We both posted poems on the same topic and I find the difference when a gifted poet has dealt with the same theme. How your mind can always find such mind boggling metaphors- "along with the thunder ~ came confetti of scars, a piercing flash of metallic truth revealing midnight rays of how I’ve long been the storm ~ a murky sky of cracked constellations, a rush of roaring torrents," How powerful, poignant and soul piercing! I pray, such people suffering from BPD get instant relief that they can handle their grief in a way, it won't plunge them into depression. Kudos for this marvellous composition.
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Date: 5/25/2025 12:21:00 PM
Sweet valsa, i loves your poem! And you always make me feel like im good enough! So kind of you! Thank you for your empathetic response truly! Sending you light always
Date: 5/25/2025 8:16:00 AM
I know a few people who have BPD, mainly women but a few men also... It can't be easy for someone who has this mental health condition and you have portrayed that through your words here... As always you do it in your own unique metaphorical style - There are some wonderful poetic lines here like, "caressing the Pina Colada dreams adrift in the icy-blue air" and "a piercing flash of metallic truth revealing midnight rays" which are quite graphic and really create imagery - bol in the contest.
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/25/2025 12:20:00 PM
Thank you so much for reading and leaving an empathetic response on the theme of this poem. Appreciate your well wishes and its truly an honor. Sending you light always
Date: 5/25/2025 7:41:00 AM
What can one expect from a high ranking poet: incredible imagery and arguments thst resound. Anyway, can accept you have a personality disorder. Your poetry is sound.
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/25/2025 8:03:00 AM
Thank you so much for accepting all personality disorders lol. Appreciate your kind support always
Date: 5/25/2025 7:00:00 AM
- "fleeting sparks of the buried past" ... we are more than the sum of our thoughts ... a deep poem, Ink - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 5/25/2025 8:15:00 AM
Thank you so much dear anne lise, grateful for your support always
Date: 5/25/2025 6:35:00 AM
I cannot imagine a mind that's so embroiled in chaos, shattered dreams and angst that thunder roars inside of it. The turmoil must be life shattering and the sounds so bellowing as to make one tremble with fear and despair. You've exposed that dark realm with compassion, Ink.
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Date: 5/25/2025 6:48:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear linnersz, i appreciate your unwavering support truly . Sending you light always
Date: 5/25/2025 6:22:00 AM
I mean , only a strong soul can hold it together while battling with BPD…. Your poem made me understand it more . Thank you for sharing
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Date: 5/25/2025 6:52:00 AM
Thank you dahlin yes it seems so. Appreciate your understanding of it and comments
Date: 5/25/2025 6:18:00 AM
misted mirror coated in petrichor pain.. adrift in the icy-blue air, ooo the angst!! along with the thunder came confetti of scars, oooo the imagery … borderline of tremors and torture teetering on forsaken fragility.. yssss come through alliteration .. sprinkling tears of hope upon the battlefield of shattered dreams, oo I love that line .. pitiful perception, amplifying the echoing embers floating above puddles of weathered lilies, love soft intensities u paint papi!! through the trails of bruises and tilted tulips, bleeding poetry beautified with polychromatic phrases and falcon ink… oooooooo dayum !!! Look at u goooo!! Absolutely stunning write papi
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/25/2025 6:53:00 AM
Awn papi thank you always for your kind and generous comments ! Im grateful always
Date: 5/25/2025 6:15:00 AM
‘sprinkling tears of hope upon the battlefield of shattered dreams’…. So powerful. Your words touch my heart and soul so deeply. If only one could help the torments of BPD! Another brilliant masterpiece on the fragility of the mind. Fave for me.
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Date: 5/25/2025 6:54:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear robert; appreciate the comment and also fave: sending you light always

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