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Along Dawn's Amber Shores

Dawn slowly awakened to supplant the moon Empty, the canopy where stars had been strewn In repose, Luna slept after wandering velvet skies and spider webs shimmered in the flight of sunrise Dew drops evaporated upon the fragrant tuberose as a playful breeze billowed my sheer nightclothes Seagulls swooped and scurried along amber shores A salty crew grappled with the sea on labored oars Muscles pulled in rhythmic chorus, as if in lyrical rote as surging waves rocked the hull of their fishing boat They surpassed each crest and triumphed over swells The sun's prisms painted the horizon in muted pastels Inspired by the milieu of ruffled swirls across the sea sunlight dappled over its surface in sequenced litany I sipped a second cup as thoughts were being seeded Poetry spawned inside of me; a birthing to be heeded For as driftwood hastens down rapids to a new frontier I needed to ledger my verses, ere they hie to disappear August 13, 2022 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 12 Contest Sponsored by Mark Toney

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/29/2022 9:51:00 AM

Lin, congratulations on your win! Your imagery is stunning, powerful and so vividly painted by by your words as you take us through your process of inspiration to culmination of crafting a poem. Truly inspiring! Blessings as you continue to inspire us!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/31/2022 5:54:00 AM

Thank you for such rewarding and encouraging remarks, Sam.

John Watt

Date: 8/27/2022 6:01:00 PM

Awesome crafting of a dawn vignette, Lin. Such a delight to read your imagery-saturated verse with your deft handling of each element of the morning scene. Every line is a gem, but my favorite is "The sun's prisms painted the horizon in muted pastels". So glad this contest is giving some new life to older treasures. Congrats on the win, this is going to my faves. Wishing you continued success ~ John

Lin Lane
Date: 8/31/2022 5:54:00 AM

Forgive my tardiness in replying, John. I never know what to enter, but somehow, I've lucked out so far. Thank you for your always gracious comments.

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/27/2022 5:49:00 PM

Dear Lin, your golden pen continues to catch the light of success! Exceptional rhymes shine in the magnificence of your imagery. The thoughts that were "seeded" bloomed in sensual captivating beauty, dear poetess. I especially adore the last two lines for a grand finale! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lin Lane
Date: 8/31/2022 5:52:00 AM

I'm sorry to be responding so late, but life has been a bit busy. Thank you, as always, Susan, for your kindest of compliments.

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/26/2022 11:20:00 PM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me behold the scene vividly, and virtually becoming an active observant... through your awesome poetic expression. God bless you.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2022 10:55:00 AM

Nice to know you saw yourself in the scene I painted with words. Thank you.

Mark Toney

Date: 8/26/2022 8:38:00 AM

Lin, yours is another winning poem that finds the poet sipping a second cup (coffee or tea?) in the early morning. I applaud your skilled use of metaphors, personification, and similes. "Dawn slowly awakened ... Luna slept after wandering." "I sipped a second cup as thoughts were being seeded Poetry spawned inside of me; a birthing to be heeded." Congratulations on your second-place podium finish on Mile 12 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 13 has already started!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2022 10:55:00 AM

I'm not much of a coffee drinker, but completely love the tranquility of early mornings. Thank you for the placement, Mark.

Constance La France

Date: 8/26/2022 7:54:00 AM

Lin, beautiful rhyming poem and congratulations on your win in the contest ~

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2022 10:53:00 AM

Thank you for your sweet comments, Constance.

Lu Loo

Date: 1/11/2020 3:08:00 PM

perfect rhythm and rhyme sweet Lin, you still amaze me. be blessed, x:-)-luloo

Lin Lane
Date: 8/13/2022 5:05:00 PM

What a wonderful comment, luloo. I was always grateful for your kind remarks.

John Hamilton

Date: 12/18/2019 5:30:00 PM

This is magnificent Lin, such a delight to read you again, believe me you were missed. This is a special write!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/18/2019 5:42:00 PM

Being missed is the greatest accolade you offer me. I thank you most humbly, John. I have to admit it feels good to be here again, sans the drama.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 12/17/2019 5:30:00 AM

Just exquisite imagery, Lin, and such beautifully phrased lines ... all the layers and melancholy that I adore in good poetry - this is good poetry! I was surprised to see so many new poems, but very pleasantly so! I still have little time for commenting of late, but I will check in more. Blessings. <3

Lin Lane
Date: 12/18/2019 5:41:00 PM

lol, Greg. Sounds like my Gypsy has inspired you. Dance!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/18/2019 3:08:00 AM

Oh, let her prance and twirl - for she sparks the dancer in me - and the wayfaring lad! ;-) <3

Lin Lane
Date: 12/17/2019 4:41:00 PM

My wild gypsy muse has been carousing about and came home filled with thoughts that she whispered in my ear. Thank you for the many nods you've given this one.

John Gondolf

Date: 12/16/2019 8:53:00 AM

This poem flows so smoothly and paints such a beautiful image of a seashore sunrise, Lin. I really enjoyed reading this. John

Lin Lane
Date: 12/16/2019 9:26:00 AM

Your comments are very gratifying, John. I've always been enthralled by seascapes. Thank you for liking this one.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/15/2019 1:21:00 AM

Hello Lin, I'm glad to find this dawn on the crest of swells and waves that rise. And too the tale of the withered moon, not withstanding this shimmering poem's surprise. -Richard

Lin Lane
Date: 12/16/2019 9:24:00 AM

Thanks so very much for the kind review, Richard. I sincerely appreciate your visit.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/14/2019 10:02:00 AM

A brilliant write Lin with superb imagery. Nice that you are back. Enjoy the weekend. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/14/2019 11:06:00 AM

Thank you so kindly for another visit, Tom.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 12/13/2019 8:39:00 PM

Wow, a gorgeous poem Lin, love the rich and vibrant imagery!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 10:05:00 PM

So many thanks for your visit and comments, Tania.

Ts Poetry

Date: 12/13/2019 3:02:00 PM

Somehow by the shore sunrises are a little more spectacular.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 3:32:00 PM

Yes, Tim. I think so, too. Somehow the sea and sky meet on the horizon in full depth and breadth of each other and seem to blend as one. Thanks for the read and visit.

Robert Lindley

Date: 12/13/2019 1:53:00 PM

As Connie said, straight into my favs ... What an inspiring and truly magnificently wrought new creation!! Third stanza alone is a most wondrous deeply conceived exquisite creation.. I would fav this were I to never ever fav another poem in my life.. Bravo!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 3:30:00 PM

I think the 3rd was somehow pulled together with the least editing. Sometimes it works that way, and then again, sometimes I just have to walk away and return thinking, "What was I thinking?" Your last sentence is truly a treasure to me. Thank you ever so much.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/13/2019 12:11:00 PM

Oh my Lin....this gorgeous poem is going straight into my Faves! This is truly inspired! I love it! xxoo Mele Kalikimaka!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 3:28:00 PM

What a wonderful first reaction to this write, Connie. I have ever grateful for your many grand remarks as well as faving it.