Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

Along Dawn's Amber Shores

Dawn slowly awakened to supplant the moon
Empty, the canopy where stars had been strewn
   In repose, Luna slept after wandering velvet skies
   and spider webs shimmered in the flight of sunrise
      Dew drops evaporated upon the fragrant tuberose
      as a playful breeze billowed my sheer nightclothes

Seagulls swooped and scurried along amber shores
A salty crew grappled with the sea on labored oars
   Muscles pulled in rhythmic chorus, as if in lyrical rote
   as surging waves rocked the hull of their fishing boat
      They surpassed each crest and triumphed over swells
      The sun's prisms painted the horizon in muted pastels

Inspired by the milieu of ruffled swirls across the sea
sunlight dappled over its surface in sequenced litany
   I sipped a second cup as thoughts were being seeded
   Poetry spawned inside of me; a birthing to be heeded
      For as driftwood hastens down rapids to a new frontier
      I needed to ledger my verses, ere they hie to disappear



August 13, 2022
  2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 12 Contest
    Sponsored by Mark Toney

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Sam Kauffman August 29, 2022 at 9:51 AM Lin, congratulations on your win! Your imagery is stunning, powerful and so vividly painted by by your words as you take us through your process of inspiration to culmination of crafting a poem. Truly inspiring! Blessings as you continue to inspire us! Lin Lane August 31, 2022 at 5:54 AM Thank you for such rewarding and encouraging remarks, Sam.

John Watt August 27, 2022 at 6:01 PM Awesome crafting of a dawn vignette, Lin. Such a delight to read your imagery-saturated verse with your deft handling of each element of the morning scene. Every line is a gem, but my favorite is "The sun's prisms painted the horizon in muted pastels". So glad this contest is giving some new life to older treasures. Congrats on the win, this is going to my faves. Wishing you continued success ~ John Lin Lane August 31, 2022 at 5:54 AM Forgive my tardiness in replying, John. I never know what to enter, but somehow, I've lucked out so far. Thank you for your always gracious comments.

Susan Ashley August 27, 2022 at 5:49 PM Dear Lin, your golden pen continues to catch the light of success! Exceptional rhymes shine in the magnificence of your imagery. The thoughts that were "seeded" bloomed in sensual captivating beauty, dear poetess. I especially adore the last two lines for a grand finale! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Lin Lane August 31, 2022 at 5:52 AM I'm sorry to be responding so late, but life has been a bit busy. Thank you, as always, Susan, for your kindest of compliments.

Beata Agustin August 26, 2022 at 11:20 PM Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me behold the scene vividly, and virtually becoming an active observant... through your awesome poetic expression. God bless you. Lin Lane August 27, 2022 at 10:55 AM Nice to know you saw yourself in the scene I painted with words. Thank you.

Mark Toney August 26, 2022 at 8:38 AM Lin, yours is another winning poem that finds the poet sipping a second cup (coffee or tea?) in the early morning. I applaud your skilled use of metaphors, personification, and similes. "Dawn slowly awakened ... Luna slept after wandering." "I sipped a second cup as thoughts were being seeded Poetry spawned inside of me; a birthing to be heeded." Congratulations on your second-place podium finish on Mile 12 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 13 has already started! Lin Lane August 27, 2022 at 10:55 AM I'm not much of a coffee drinker, but completely love the tranquility of early mornings. Thank you for the placement, Mark.

Constance La France August 26, 2022 at 7:54 AM Lin, beautiful rhyming poem and congratulations on your win in the contest ~ Lin Lane August 27, 2022 at 10:53 AM Thank you for your sweet comments, Constance.

Beautiful Scars January 11, 2020 at 3:08 PM perfect rhythm and rhyme sweet Lin, you still amaze me. be blessed, x:-)-luloo Lin Lane August 13, 2022 at 5:05 PM What a wonderful comment, luloo. I was always grateful for your kind remarks.

John Hamilton December 18, 2019 at 5:30 PM This is magnificent Lin, such a delight to read you again, believe me you were missed. This is a special write! Lin Lane December 18, 2019 at 5:42 PM Being missed is the greatest accolade you offer me. I thank you most humbly, John. I have to admit it feels good to be here again, sans the drama.

Gregory Richard Barden December 17, 2019 at 5:30 AM Just exquisite imagery, Lin, and such beautifully phrased lines ... all the layers and melancholy that I adore in good poetry - this is good poetry! I was surprised to see so many new poems, but very pleasantly so! I still have little time for commenting of late, but I will check in more. Blessings. <3 Lin Lane December 18, 2019 at 5:41 PM lol, Greg. Sounds like my Gypsy has inspired you. Dance! Gregory Richard Barden December 18, 2019 at 3:08 AM Oh, let her prance and twirl - for she sparks the dancer in me - and the wayfaring lad! ;-) <3 Lin Lane December 17, 2019 at 4:41 PM My wild gypsy muse has been carousing about and came home filled with thoughts that she whispered in my ear. Thank you for the many nods you've given this one.

John Gondolf December 16, 2019 at 8:53 AM This poem flows so smoothly and paints such a beautiful image of a seashore sunrise, Lin. I really enjoyed reading this. John Lin Lane December 16, 2019 at 9:26 AM Your comments are very gratifying, John. I've always been enthralled by seascapes. Thank you for liking this one.

Quoth Theraven December 15, 2019 at 1:21 AM Hello Lin, I'm glad to find this dawn on the crest of swells and waves that rise. And too the tale of the withered moon, not withstanding this shimmering poem's surprise. -Richard Lin Lane December 16, 2019 at 9:24 AM Thanks so very much for the kind review, Richard. I sincerely appreciate your visit.

Tom Cunningham December 14, 2019 at 10:02 AM A brilliant write Lin with superb imagery. Nice that you are back. Enjoy the weekend. Tom Lin Lane December 14, 2019 at 11:06 AM Thank you so kindly for another visit, Tom.

Tania Kitchin December 13, 2019 at 8:39 PM Wow, a gorgeous poem Lin, love the rich and vibrant imagery! Lin Lane December 13, 2019 at 10:05 PM So many thanks for your visit and comments, Tania.

Ts Poetry December 13, 2019 at 3:02 PM Somehow by the shore sunrises are a little more spectacular. Lin Lane December 13, 2019 at 3:32 PM Yes, Tim. I think so, too. Somehow the sea and sky meet on the horizon in full depth and breadth of each other and seem to blend as one. Thanks for the read and visit.

Robert Lindley December 13, 2019 at 1:53 PM As Connie said, straight into my favs ... What an inspiring and truly magnificently wrought new creation!! Third stanza alone is a most wondrous deeply conceived exquisite creation.. I would fav this were I to never ever fav another poem in my life.. Bravo! Lin Lane December 13, 2019 at 3:30 PM I think the 3rd was somehow pulled together with the least editing. Sometimes it works that way, and then again, sometimes I just have to walk away and return thinking, "What was I thinking?" Your last sentence is truly a treasure to me. Thank you ever so much.

Connie Marcum Wong December 13, 2019 at 12:11 PM Oh my Lin....this gorgeous poem is going straight into my Faves! This is truly inspired! I love it! xxoo Mele Kalikimaka! Lin Lane December 13, 2019 at 3:28 PM What a wonderful first reaction to this write, Connie. I have ever grateful for your many grand remarks as well as faving it.