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Black Birds Congregating In the dead of night Stealthy midnight chatter outside my window pane No singing to my ears Just constant rain Thunder crackling The children have left Just the plots And leaves scurrying the wind swirling Upwards almost Telling me look up Refusing I tell myself It can't be just hallucinations The oval mirror where She would stand naked Brushing her long Blond Waist length hair Dripping wet her supple Body yearning calling me I wouldn't come wouldn't move just a Mirage a dream Nightmarish I'd say I remember her though Singing softly to me The children all five All girls all gone She lays in state on a Lily and rose Laden mattress sunken in Scented silk now Moldy and musty Cobweb silkscreens Adorne her I still try to talk She doesn't answer I'm alone Wasting away Skeletonized In this room So much gloom Your not here To share in My uneventful doom Lurking shadows Closets and halls Faceless lovers Pictures hang on walls Your not here Just your Soulless body You left me behind brokenhearted Alone so long ago Glock in hand And mind in Transient state Waiting staring At 12 dead roses Near the grey Antiquated Corner stone All alone...

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Date: 11/5/2017 7:23:00 AM
Oh wow!!!! Tony, this is an excellent write. Truly enjoyed. *S* Cynthia
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Tonytocaa Camacho
Date: 11/5/2017 8:23:00 PM
Hi Cynthia,long time much appreciate your support always tonytocaa peace be you
Date: 3/17/2016 11:09:00 PM
WOW, that was kind of a dark walk. Tonytocaa you paint an epic and empty place... Enjoyed. LINDA
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Date: 11/5/2017 8:25:00 PM
Thanks poetA,glad you enjoyed my verse..always tonytocaa
Date: 3/6/2016 12:16:00 PM
This brings to mind, poetry written hundreds of years ago when the world was more pure but in some ways more dangerous than even today..so dark, almost haunting with such soul. I am quite picky about what poetry I find to be "good".. This is Good.
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Date: 3/6/2016 3:50:00 PM
Thanks Susan ,for your kind words,tonytocaa
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Date: 3/6/2016 12:37:00 PM
Thanks Susan ,for your kind words,tonytocaa
Date: 3/3/2016 5:40:00 PM
The tone of you being all alone in this poem is sobering. Wonderfuliy written.
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Date: 3/4/2016 10:31:00 AM
Hi Jean ,you've touched my soul many thanks come back..tonytocaa
Date: 2/21/2016 6:01:00 PM
The imgery was breathtakingly beautiful, while the sadness was gripping. Definitely held my attention, such a well written piece.
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Date: 2/21/2016 6:53:00 PM
Dineen,thank you I just want to say that it's people like you that make a difference on this website for aspiring writers and poets to express themselves with your genuine commentary .. visit me again..TonyTocaa
Date: 2/16/2016 10:48:00 AM
Heartfelt sadness comes through. Excellent imagery and well-written.
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:24:00 AM
Oh my sweet Lee, thank you for your kind words much appreciated you can come back and visit anytime you want hugs Tony
Date: 2/16/2016 10:29:00 AM
Sad, powerful, the emotions well stated. Nice write.
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:22:00 AM
Thanks Anthony, sometimes I want to make them shorter sometimes longer nonetheless this is what came out lol never know peace my friend tonytocaa
Date: 2/16/2016 9:27:00 AM
Hi TC, it;s been a long time since I held a Glock, wouldn't like to hold one now if I were left alone. A sad but still great write. God Bless. D.
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:19:00 AM
Thanks Dave, for your insight the world is not always a great place thank God we're on the other side and we can share peace tocaa
Date: 2/15/2016 6:06:00 PM
Great write. Some stanzas would make it even greater...
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:16:00 AM
Thanks Chrissy I just never know what is going to come out of my mind,the world is ours tonytocaa
Date: 2/15/2016 5:55:00 PM
Wonderful
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:15:00 AM
Thanks Owen, I appreciate that tocaa
Date: 1/14/2016 9:42:00 PM
Tonytocaa, Awesome write, I really like this. Forever ** SKAT **
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Date: 1/15/2016 1:49:00 PM
Oh skat,don't go away far come back again and again,to be intrigue..thanks hugs to you always Tonytocaa
Date: 5/4/2015 11:47:00 AM
Amazing imagery so dark and sad - such intense feeling of isolation made me sad:-(:-( Hugs Jan xx 7 xx
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Date: 5/4/2015 12:32:00 PM
No worries - great to stir the emotions when you write makes you realise you have done a credible job - drop by my 2 limericks if you are ater some humour for the day lol:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/4/2015 12:18:00 PM
Hey jan,sorry about that,don't want to make you sad,just thinkin about all the things around the world makes,me sad..never know what My poetic mind will bring.from day to day lol..keep em on their toes..thanks always ;-))tonytocaa

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