L Milton Hankins Poet Sonnet

Almost Unfaithful

On a Thursday night late the band was playing
Bohemian Rhapsody, as I recall,
And she was whispering in my ear, saying,
“I need a man like you—so big and so tall.”
My wristwatch reminded it was time to go,
For I had some appointments in early morn
Thinking of my wife and children at home so,
Temptation to betray them left me forlorn.
I had not expected that a man of my age
Would attract the attentions of a club girl,
I certainly should have expressed more outrage
While giving the barstool an quick, angry twirl,
Instead of smiling and raising her fond hopes
At least the next time, I'll surely know the ropes.

written June 9, 2021

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Caren Krutsinger June 11, 2021 at 11:40 AM Get out of that bar! Run! I mean RUN! Bar girls are notoriously fast though. L Milton Hankins June 11, 2021 at 11:47 AM Caren, it's fiction! Believe me, I know how to handle myself in that kind of a situation. As a pastor, I once had a woman in the church call me to her house to fetch some medicine for her, and when I arrived, she met me stark naked!!! I moved on very quickly...and not on her!

Maurice Rigoler June 10, 2021 at 11:46 AM Probably your best sonnet to date, Milton. And though it's fictional it nevertheless describes a temptation many foolish men have fall victim to. The proverb says it best: Draw water from your own cistern – Solomon. Thanks for reading my "Youngman in the park" and commenting on it. / Maurice L Milton Hankins June 10, 2021 at 2:00 PM Thank you, Maurice. I find sonnets kind of difficult, so I use the form sparingly. Your kind compliment was very encouraging.

Juliet Ligon June 10, 2021 at 8:27 AM Sometimes we encounter temptations unexpectedly. I enjoyed your fluid storytelling and thought process of reactions. L Milton Hankins June 10, 2021 at 8:33 AM Thank you so much, Juliet. So thoughtful of you to comment on my poem.

Rama Balasubramanian June 10, 2021 at 6:50 AM A reflection of your wonderful character. Never yield to temptations, they bring ruin is what I strongly believe. Wonderful write friend. L Milton Hankins June 10, 2021 at 8:07 AM Pure fiction, Rama, but I did learn many years ago not to yield to temptation, "for yielding is sin." Thanks so much for your kind thoughts on my poem.

Regina Mcintosh June 10, 2021 at 3:26 AM Never say never but trust in the God of heaven who gives you a way out... temptation is everywhere, not always so blatant, but many times, hidden ... God bless you friend. Love, Gina L Milton Hankins June 10, 2021 at 8:07 AM Thanks so much for your warm and kind thoughts regarding my poem, which, by the way, is entirely fictional.

David Scott June 9, 2021 at 10:00 PM Temptasion like the last couple of lines l think you handled well and well penned description L Milton Hankins June 10, 2021 at 8:08 AM Thanks so much, David, for your thoughtful response to my poem, which is entirely fictional!

Evelyn Judy Buehler June 9, 2021 at 8:36 PM Your tale of temptation was written with wit and humor, Milton. Excellent writing! :) Evelyn