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Allure of the Moon - Haiku

allure of the moon pales - luster lost to the c a n d l e l i g h t in your eyes Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 *not for a contest but inspired by the “Let’s Get Creative With Haiku” poetry contest sponsored by Constance La France. Thank you, Constance, for the wonderful inspiration.*

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Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 9/20/2023 9:15:00 PM

Very lovey Haiku! So romantic too! Have a great day dear Susan ~AA

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/20/2023 9:19:00 PM

Dear Abdullah, your gracious visit and beautiful comments are received with joy. Thank you for your wonderful kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne

Date: 10/15/2022 6:26:00 AM

Superbly written, Susan. Your pen often captures the heartfelt essence of human connectedness, and this fine Haiku is no exception to that high standard. Best wishes always, Brian

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2022 7:20:00 AM

Dear Brian, the expressive sensitivity of your thoughts touch me deeply. Thank you for sharing your beautiful eloquence with me. I am honored that you thought so highly of my poem. Your kindness is truly appreciated, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Warlov

Date: 3/7/2022 11:32:00 AM

" . . . a shame-face'd moon wanes" ~ Irresistible

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/10/2022 5:48:00 PM

Dear Robert, thank you for your wonderful visit and lovely comments. Your kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Maximilian G. Wolf

Date: 10/28/2021 3:09:00 AM

Nice and deep. ~Max

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/28/2021 6:24:00 AM

Your gracious visit and wonderful comment is appreciated. Thank you, Maximilian. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Iris E. S-Lewis

Date: 4/29/2021 7:23:00 PM

Wow! this is as deep as those pools you plunged yourself into.

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/6/2021 9:30:00 AM

The beauty of your comment touches me deeply, Iris Elizabeth. Your shining presence is inspiring, my friend. Please accept my apologies for my late reply, life has been very busy lately. Warmest wishes, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 4/17/2021 7:36:00 AM

Beautiful, Susan! Love the creative arrangement! Warm wishes ~ Mala

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/17/2021 11:30:00 AM

Dear Mala, I am embraced by the delight of your visit and the rich warmth of your beautiful comments. Thank you, my sweet lady, I relish your lovely presence. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/13/2021 5:05:00 PM

How romantic. The candlelight of the eyes is such a poignant image. A warmth ... but also delicate. Doesn’t take much to blow it out. With or without the creative layout, the words are swell.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/13/2021 5:15:00 PM

Dear Timothy, it's wonderful to see you. I relish your awesome comments.. I love the truth and beauty of what you said about the vulnerability of candlelight eyes - you truly have a tender poet's heart, my inspiring friend. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 4/5/2021 2:01:00 PM

Love the shape and that your broke free of 5/7/5 restraint

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/6/2021 5:12:00 AM

Dear D.W., I relish your your uplifting comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed the format and the 'lack of restraint' of my haiku.. That's exactly what I was going for! :)) Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/28/2021 5:34:00 AM

You are quite right, although the moon has been romanticized for ever, it is the candlelight, which with its strong flame wins over the moon, fire, luster and love brings about passion. Awesome Haiku my friend. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/1/2021 6:09:00 PM

My dearest Jennifer, I see that our sister muses are in complete agreement that candlelight tops moonlight! :) It is always such a lovely pleasure whenever your bright spirit appears on my poem's page. Thank you for brightening my day, I cherish your thoughts and our friendship, sweet lady. Warmest wishes, love and hugs sent to you from across the sea.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/26/2021 2:54:00 PM

What a wonderful haiku, Susan. I really like how it flows beautifully without resorting to the conventional 'jarring' twist at the end. Peace and Serenity, Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/26/2021 6:36:00 PM

Ah, my dear friend, Gershon, your lovely comments are wonderful to receive. I agree that sometimes a ku can have a softer landing. Thank you for noticing my attempt at using a little more subtlety rather than a 'jarring twist' lol! You are so very appreciated, peace poet. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 3/25/2021 2:15:00 PM

This is beautiful. I love it... so gentle and simply breathtaking, filled with a vulnerable hope and a whisper of kindness... a musical flow to it. so so beautiful. You surely did get creative even though it's not for the contest. God bless you, love, Gina

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/26/2021 8:07:00 AM

Dear Gina, I am so very touched by your lovely comments. Your beautiful response to my poem elevates my heart to new heights - so inspiring are your words. Thank you, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/21/2021 9:13:00 PM

'Candlelight in your eyes' - this line alone makes me FAVE this! So evocative and romantic, makes me long for a full moon and candlesticks ~

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/22/2021 10:25:00 AM

Ah, you are ever the beautiful romantic, my sweet friend. Thank you for your enchanting comments and for the wonderful honor of your fave. Both are truly appreciated, as is your cherished friendship. Warmest wishes, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Quoth Theraven

Date: 3/21/2021 8:56:00 AM

Susan, One of my favorite lights emanates from your haiku. -Richard

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/22/2021 10:10:00 AM

Ah, your romantic side shines, Richard. Candlelight is most beautiful when in the sparkle of the eyes. Thank you for your beautiful comments, they are cherished. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin

Date: 3/21/2021 3:27:00 AM

A lovely enchanting poem Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/22/2021 10:06:00 AM

Thank you, Tania. Your gracious visit and delightful comment is a joy to receive. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/20/2021 3:44:00 PM

wonderful!

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 4:04:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jan Allison

Date: 3/20/2021 2:18:00 PM

what a shame you didnt submit this gem to the contest but I'm so glad you were inspired to write it Susan:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 4:17:00 PM

Thank you for the uplifting feeling of your comments, Jan. I was actually inspired to write a non-traditional haiku after reading yours; "Flying South" (which I loved). The contest was already closed and I think Constance had specified "no humanity" just Nature, but since mine wasn't for the contest I thought I would mix a little human nature with Mother Nature after all. Your gracious visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/20/2021 1:07:00 PM

Very creative Susan, love the hint of romance in your verse. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 4:11:00 PM

Dear Tom, I think I'm still under the romantic influence of my recent collab with Robert :) Thank you for your lovely comments. Our weekend is going wonderfully and I hope the same for yours as well, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/20/2021 12:19:00 PM

A beautiful lunar glow to this fine Hiaku my dear friend. Most definitely a very creative and image laden romantic new poem! A fav- one that gifts romantic inspiration to me if I can just find the time to compose today. God bless..

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 4:08:00 PM

My dear friend, thank you for the kind embrace of your lovely comments and for the high honor of your fav. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my haiku, Robert. Indeed, I know that frustration being inspired and not having the time to realize the inspiration with pen to paper. Warmest wishes always, dear poet.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/20/2021 12:01:00 PM

Hello Susan, oh this is lovely. Enjoy your day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/21/2021 6:20:00 AM

Hello Susan, yes i will enjoy my bright sunny day. The sun is out today. Enjoy your day my friend. Hugs.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 3:54:00 PM

Dear Darlene, it’s such a pleasure to see you! Thank you for your gracious comments. I’m so pleased you enjoyed my haiku. Enjoy your day as well, my friend, and warmest wishes to you.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/20/2021 11:34:00 AM

Beautiful. So nice, Susan :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2021 11:48:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi, for being the first to leave such lovely comments. Your uplifting presence is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan