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Allegory of Falling In Love

Poetry notebook in my jittery hand, I vacillate
   what if she finds it dull… obtuse…
   beneath her... culturally insensitive?
What if she laughs at its pathos,
   groans at its length, 
   smirks at its earnestness?
As I begin to falter, I ask myself 
   (denying all the aching echoes of indifference)
   how much could it possibly hurt if she doesn't like it?
   Could I ever forgive myself if I chicken out?
As my internal arguments fire torpedoes at each other,
   she begins to walk away.

Incensed at my cowardice, I detect a gravitational pull
   impelled by the bonfire of urgency
   lit by a lightning bolt of past meltdowns
I take a step of infinite unknowingness, and clear my throat 
   "Hi, I'm in your writing class…
   might I ask for a brief moment of your time?"
   ...silence.
She glances at my poem, then stares into my eyes -
   stretched between two souls is an imaginary tightrope
   leveling her balancing pole, she slowly smiles… 
"I thought you'd never ask"


written 15 Mar 2022
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022


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Date: 8/26/2023 11:04:00 AM
If I were her I'd tell you; There's a difference between loving a woman with a dictionary and loving one with flowers. Pages get burned but flowers are learned.I only made it half way through this one.
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Date: 4/23/2022 11:21:00 AM
oh wow!!! I decided to look a bit more and I found this gem. I really love the romantic ending on this.
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John Watt
Date: 4/25/2022 10:46:00 AM
Thank you, dear friend. Your willingness to read and comment on all of my poems is amazing and endearing. I'm glad you liked this... a wow from Andrea is worth more than a potd to me!
Date: 3/31/2022 12:15:00 PM
One small step for man one giant leap for John! This poem is so cute and depicts so perfectly how a teenager feels and wants to act, but sometimes especially the boys, don't want to be shunned or embarrassed. Well, who can resist your poems my friend. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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John Watt
Date: 3/31/2022 12:23:00 PM
Thank you for your uplifting visit and lovely comment, my dear friend! I struggled for a long time to share anything I had created with anybody, out of an irrational fear of rejection... thankfully I have overcome that phobia and enjoy the two-way give and take of reading, writing, and leaving comments. You are a blessing! Hugs ~ John
Date: 3/16/2022 1:37:00 PM
i love this, john! beautifully written with the perfect ending...
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John Watt
Date: 3/20/2022 4:16:00 PM
aw, thank you ilene!
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