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All Her Dreams Turned To Dust

No one followed her as she ran away
fleeing from the altar on her wedding day

She’d been jilted by Jed her handsome groom
so locked herself away in an unused attic room

The bride’s father went after Jed with a gun
you should have seen the coward run!

The desperate search for Judy was in vain
She didn’t respond when they called her name

Folks assumed she didn’t want to hang around
Many years passed by and she was never found

The house was auctioned after her parent’s died
They were buried at the churchyard side by side

The new house owners were in for a terrible shock
When they ventured upstairs and unpicked the lock	

They found Judy’s skeletal body in her dress of lace
Cobwebs hung like curtains from her once lovely face

Jed’s dust covered photo lay in her hand
Judy never got to wear her wedding band

Dust Contest
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Kim Merryman Date: 7/30/2021 9:40:00 AM Wow! What a story! Great write, Jan! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest! Blessings, Kim M Login to Reply

Christuraj Alex Date: 7/29/2021 4:19:00 AM A beautifully created couplet. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/29/2021 12:30:00 AM Whoa! A sad ending, really sad, well written story, Jan:) congratulations:) Login to Reply

Unseeking Seeker Date: 7/28/2021 7:37:00 PM Outstanding narration, Jan. Deeply tragic. Congrats on your win Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/20/2017 8:38:00 PM Sends chills up my spine...literally! Excellent. A Fav! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/20/2017 8:42:00 PM Thanks Armand I do like to surprise folks with a change in style and am really proud of the way this poem turned out:-)love and hugs as ever:-) jan xx

Jannie Breedt Date: 4/18/2017 2:10:00 PM Hi Jan..it reminiscent of the song Delta Dawn. Its disturbingly good ..congratulations on this winner. Humdinger. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/19/2017 2:55:00 AM Thanks Jannie I must google that song I don't think I'm familiar with it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie Date: 4/15/2017 6:54:00 PM This is an impressive couplet Jan! The story is riveting with great detail and wonderfully crafted. Superb writing, has to be a fave 7+. A write to be proud of:) lynnxxx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/16/2017 4:30:00 PM Thanks so much Lynn I do like to surprise with a more serious poem I never know where my muse will take me and I find that really exciting:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels Date: 4/2/2017 5:44:00 AM That's simultaneously sad but disturbing; and thanks for the scary picture :( A well-deserved win, so congratulations on a great piece! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/15/2017 7:04:00 PM Thanks John I was delighted with the win:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh Date: 3/30/2017 10:08:00 AM Very well penned! Congrats, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/30/2017 12:13:00 PM Thanks Sushma:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton Date: 3/29/2017 9:53:00 AM Great storytelling Jan, congrats on a great win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 10:54:00 AM Thanks John I hope people can see there is more to me than just a humourist who writes poems about poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Roy Pett Date: 3/29/2017 3:21:00 AM Come back to congratulate you on your well deserved win, Roy. :)) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:46:00 AM Many thanks Roy I am so delighted as I thought I had gone out on a limb with the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 3/29/2017 2:42:00 AM Congratulations. What a story. Unreal and yet believable. Many wishes, Kai Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:47:00 AM Thanks so much Kai:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts Date: 3/29/2017 2:08:00 AM Great story Jan....Seren Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:48:00 AM Thanks so much Seren I was delighted to be on the list:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 3/28/2017 11:37:00 PM Congrats on your win Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:49:00 AM Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Jeremy Smith Date: 3/28/2017 10:17:00 PM I really enjoyed this great job Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:49:00 AM Thanks so much Jeremy:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe Date: 3/28/2017 9:36:00 PM I enjoyed your poem - what a great storytelling. Congrats on your win, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:50:00 AM Thanks so much Agnes I didn't think I would get close as I thought my take on dust was probably not what Shadow was looking for but I was wrong:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 3/28/2017 9:30:00 PM Love the imagery you have created congratulations on your win ~* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/29/2017 5:50:00 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/28/2017 8:35:00 PM Great imagery in this harrowing story; congratulations on a fine win Jan!~hugs~Che :) Login to Reply

Shadow Hamilton Date: 3/28/2017 7:46:00 PM Harrowing account Jan love it congrats on 2nd place hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/28/2017 7:50:00 PM I am absolutely delighted to place so well in the contest Shadow as I thought I was maybe too far off the dust theme:-) You have made my day thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 3/25/2017 7:59:00 PM Jan this is amazing! Loved this! Did Jed survive? Or do I have write another poem to kill him? :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/26/2017 4:03:00 AM No daddy got him with the gun he was an awful clown and his betrayal was beyond a joke:-( hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett Date: 3/24/2017 5:17:00 PM Exceptional piece of writing, how you told a life story in so few words amazing, Though the photo gave me a shock but complimented your couplet perfectly, good luck in contest, Roy. :)) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2017 6:25:00 PM aww thanks Roy I think I have thought too far out of the box for the contest but am so pleased with the comments I've had. I think I surprise people that I am not just a poop poetry writer:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/24/2017 9:14:00 AM This is so erie and so good! Clap clap clap standing O! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2017 9:41:00 AM Thanks Richard :-) I am doubtful it will place as I think it is rather off topic, but I've had such lovely comments on it and I am pleased with the way the poem has been received:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 3/23/2017 8:16:00 PM Hi Jan, This is such a well written dark write. I found it to be sad as well. It's a good entry for the contest theme. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/23/2017 8:32:00 PM Thanks Alexis I doubt it will place as its rather off the dust theme but as long as I write and am creative I'm happy:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort Date: 3/23/2017 4:57:00 PM So has ted been replaced by Jed? Interesting story Jan. A waste of a good life, I'm afraid. Reminds me of a Trump voter and what is going to happen to them all. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/23/2017 5:02:00 PM Oh I still write about Ted, thought I would give him a rest for this poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 3/23/2017 9:22:00 AM A very sad tale Jan...but well expressed..GL in the contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/23/2017 9:40:00 AM Thanks Joseph:-) I doubt it will place as I think it is too out of the box for the dust theme:-) hugs Jan xx

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