Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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All Her Dreams Turned To Dust

No one followed her as she ran away
fleeing from the altar on her wedding day

She’d been jilted by Jed her handsome groom
so locked herself away in an unused attic room

The bride’s father went after Jed with a gun
you should have seen the coward run!

The desperate search for Judy was in vain
She didn’t respond when they called her name

Folks assumed she didn’t want to hang around
Many years passed by and she was never found

The house was auctioned after her parent’s died
They were buried at the churchyard side by side

The new house owners were in for a terrible shock
When they ventured upstairs and unpicked the lock	

They found Judy’s skeletal body in her dress of lace
Cobwebs hung like curtains from her once lovely face

Jed’s dust covered photo lay in her hand
Judy never got to wear her wedding band

Dust Contest
Sponsored by Shadow Hamilton

03~22~17

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Kim Merryman July 30, 2021 at 9:40 AM Wow! What a story! Great write, Jan! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest! Blessings, Kim M

Christuraj Alex July 29, 2021 at 4:19 AM A beautifully created couplet. Congratulations on your win!

Joanna Daniel July 29, 2021 at 12:30 AM Whoa! A sad ending, really sad, well written story, Jan:) congratulations:)

Unseeking Seeker July 28, 2021 at 7:37 PM Outstanding narration, Jan. Deeply tragic. Congrats on your win

Maurice Yvonne April 20, 2017 at 8:38 PM Sends chills up my spine...literally! Excellent. A Fav! Jan Allison April 20, 2017 at 8:42 PM Thanks Armand I do like to surprise folks with a change in style and am really proud of the way this poem turned out:-)love and hugs as ever:-) jan xx

Jannie Breedt April 18, 2017 at 2:10 PM Hi Jan..it reminiscent of the song Delta Dawn. Its disturbingly good ..congratulations on this winner. Humdinger. Jan Allison April 19, 2017 at 2:55 AM Thanks Jannie I must google that song I don't think I'm familiar with it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie April 15, 2017 at 6:54 PM This is an impressive couplet Jan! The story is riveting with great detail and wonderfully crafted. Superb writing, has to be a fave 7+. A write to be proud of:) lynnxxx Jan Allison April 16, 2017 at 4:30 PM Thanks so much Lynn I do like to surprise with a more serious poem I never know where my muse will take me and I find that really exciting:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels April 2, 2017 at 5:44 AM That's simultaneously sad but disturbing; and thanks for the scary picture :( A well-deserved win, so congratulations on a great piece! Jan Allison April 15, 2017 at 7:04 PM Thanks John I was delighted with the win:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh March 30, 2017 at 10:08 AM Very well penned! Congrats, Jan! Jan Allison March 30, 2017 at 12:13 PM Thanks Sushma:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton March 29, 2017 at 9:53 AM Great storytelling Jan, congrats on a great win! Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 10:54 AM Thanks John I hope people can see there is more to me than just a humourist who writes poems about poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Roy Pett March 29, 2017 at 3:21 AM Come back to congratulate you on your well deserved win, Roy. :)) Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:46 AM Many thanks Roy I am so delighted as I thought I had gone out on a limb with the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann March 29, 2017 at 2:42 AM Congratulations. What a story. Unreal and yet believable. Many wishes, Kai Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:47 AM Thanks so much Kai:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts March 29, 2017 at 2:08 AM Great story Jan....Seren Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:48 AM Thanks so much Seren I was delighted to be on the list:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May March 28, 2017 at 11:37 PM Congrats on your win Jan Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:49 AM Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Jeremy Smith March 28, 2017 at 10:17 PM I really enjoyed this great job Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:49 AM Thanks so much Jeremy:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe March 28, 2017 at 9:36 PM I enjoyed your poem - what a great storytelling. Congrats on your win, Jan. Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:50 AM Thanks so much Agnes I didn't think I would get close as I thought my take on dust was probably not what Shadow was looking for but I was wrong:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper March 28, 2017 at 9:30 PM Love the imagery you have created congratulations on your win ~* Jan Allison March 29, 2017 at 5:50 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman March 28, 2017 at 8:35 PM Great imagery in this harrowing story; congratulations on a fine win Jan!~hugs~Che :)

Shadow Hamilton March 28, 2017 at 7:46 PM Harrowing account Jan love it congrats on 2nd place hugs Jan Allison March 28, 2017 at 7:50 PM I am absolutely delighted to place so well in the contest Shadow as I thought I was maybe too far off the dust theme:-) You have made my day thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso March 25, 2017 at 7:59 PM Jan this is amazing! Loved this! Did Jed survive? Or do I have write another poem to kill him? :) Jan Allison March 26, 2017 at 4:03 AM No daddy got him with the gun he was an awful clown and his betrayal was beyond a joke:-( hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett March 24, 2017 at 5:17 PM Exceptional piece of writing, how you told a life story in so few words amazing, Though the photo gave me a shock but complimented your couplet perfectly, good luck in contest, Roy. :)) Jan Allison March 24, 2017 at 6:25 PM aww thanks Roy I think I have thought too far out of the box for the contest but am so pleased with the comments I've had. I think I surprise people that I am not just a poop poetry writer:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux March 24, 2017 at 9:14 AM This is so erie and so good! Clap clap clap standing O! Jan Allison March 24, 2017 at 9:41 AM Thanks Richard :-) I am doubtful it will place as I think it is rather off topic, but I've had such lovely comments on it and I am pleased with the way the poem has been received:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. March 23, 2017 at 8:16 PM Hi Jan, This is such a well written dark write. I found it to be sad as well. It's a good entry for the contest theme. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 8:32 PM Thanks Alexis I doubt it will place as its rather off the dust theme but as long as I write and am creative I'm happy:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort March 23, 2017 at 4:57 PM So has ted been replaced by Jed? Interesting story Jan. A waste of a good life, I'm afraid. Reminds me of a Trump voter and what is going to happen to them all. Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 5:02 PM Oh I still write about Ted, thought I would give him a rest for this poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May March 23, 2017 at 9:22 AM A very sad tale Jan...but well expressed..GL in the contest Jan Allison March 23, 2017 at 9:40 AM Thanks Joseph:-) I doubt it will place as I think it is too out of the box for the dust theme:-) hugs Jan xx

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