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No one followed her as she ran away fleeing from the altar on her wedding day She’d been jilted by Jed her handsome groom so locked herself away in an unused attic room The bride’s father went after Jed with a gun you should have seen the coward run! The desperate search for Judy was in vain She didn’t respond when they called her name Folks assumed she didn’t want to hang around Many years passed by and she was never found The house was auctioned after her parent’s died They were buried at the churchyard side by side The new house owners were in for a terrible shock When they ventured upstairs and unpicked the lock They found Judy’s skeletal body in her dress of lace Cobwebs hung like curtains from her once lovely face Jed’s dust covered photo lay in her hand Judy never got to wear her wedding band Dust Contest Sponsored by Shadow Hamilton 03~22~17

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Date: 4/20/2017 8:38:00 PM
Sends chills up my spine...literally! Excellent. A Fav!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/20/2017 8:42:00 PM
Thanks Armand I do like to surprise folks with a change in style and am really proud of the way this poem turned out:-)love and hugs as ever:-) jan xx
Date: 4/18/2017 2:10:00 PM
Hi Jan..it reminiscent of the song Delta Dawn. Its disturbingly good ..congratulations on this winner. Humdinger.
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Date: 4/19/2017 2:55:00 AM
Thanks Jannie I must google that song I don't think I'm familiar with it:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/15/2017 6:54:00 PM
This is an impressive couplet Jan! The story is riveting with great detail and wonderfully crafted. Superb writing, has to be a fave 7+. A write to be proud of:) lynnxxx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/16/2017 4:30:00 PM
Thanks so much Lynn I do like to surprise with a more serious poem I never know where my muse will take me and I find that really exciting:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/2/2017 5:44:00 AM
That's simultaneously sad but disturbing; and thanks for the scary picture :( A well-deserved win, so congratulations on a great piece!
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Date: 4/15/2017 7:04:00 PM
Thanks John I was delighted with the win:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/30/2017 10:08:00 AM
Very well penned! Congrats, Jan!
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Date: 3/30/2017 12:13:00 PM
Thanks Sushma:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/29/2017 9:53:00 AM
Great storytelling Jan, congrats on a great win!
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Date: 3/29/2017 10:54:00 AM
Thanks John I hope people can see there is more to me than just a humourist who writes poems about poop lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 3/29/2017 3:21:00 AM
Come back to congratulate you on your well deserved win, Roy. :))
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:46:00 AM
Many thanks Roy I am so delighted as I thought I had gone out on a limb with the theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/29/2017 3:13:00 AM
Congrats Jan. Another winning poem.
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:47:00 AM
Thanks so much Ray:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/29/2017 2:42:00 AM
Congratulations. What a story. Unreal and yet believable. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:47:00 AM
Thanks so much Kai:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/29/2017 2:08:00 AM
Great story Jan....Seren
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:48:00 AM
Thanks so much Seren I was delighted to be on the list:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/28/2017 11:37:00 PM
Congrats on your win Jan
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:49:00 AM
Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/28/2017 10:17:00 PM
I really enjoyed this great job
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:49:00 AM
Thanks so much Jeremy:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/28/2017 9:36:00 PM
I enjoyed your poem - what a great storytelling. Congrats on your win, Jan.
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:50:00 AM
Thanks so much Agnes I didn't think I would get close as I thought my take on dust was probably not what Shadow was looking for but I was wrong:-) :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/28/2017 9:30:00 PM
Love the imagery you have created congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:50:00 AM
Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/28/2017 8:35:00 PM
Great imagery in this harrowing story; congratulations on a fine win Jan!~hugs~Che :)
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Date: 3/28/2017 7:46:00 PM
Harrowing account Jan love it congrats on 2nd place hugs
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Date: 3/28/2017 7:50:00 PM
I am absolutely delighted to place so well in the contest Shadow as I thought I was maybe too far off the dust theme:-) You have made my day thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/25/2017 7:59:00 PM
Jan this is amazing! Loved this! Did Jed survive? Or do I have write another poem to kill him? :)
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Date: 3/26/2017 4:03:00 AM
No daddy got him with the gun he was an awful clown and his betrayal was beyond a joke:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/24/2017 5:17:00 PM
Exceptional piece of writing, how you told a life story in so few words amazing, Though the photo gave me a shock but complimented your couplet perfectly, good luck in contest, Roy. :))
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Date: 3/24/2017 6:25:00 PM
aww thanks Roy I think I have thought too far out of the box for the contest but am so pleased with the comments I've had. I think I surprise people that I am not just a poop poetry writer:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/24/2017 9:14:00 AM
This is so erie and so good! Clap clap clap standing O!
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Date: 3/24/2017 9:41:00 AM
Thanks Richard :-) I am doubtful it will place as I think it is rather off topic, but I've had such lovely comments on it and I am pleased with the way the poem has been received:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 8:16:00 PM
Hi Jan, This is such a well written dark write. I found it to be sad as well. It's a good entry for the contest theme. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis
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Date: 3/23/2017 8:32:00 PM
Thanks Alexis I doubt it will place as its rather off the dust theme but as long as I write and am creative I'm happy:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 4:57:00 PM
So has ted been replaced by Jed? Interesting story Jan. A waste of a good life, I'm afraid. Reminds me of a Trump voter and what is going to happen to them all.
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Date: 3/23/2017 5:02:00 PM
Oh I still write about Ted, thought I would give him a rest for this poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 4:52:00 PM
Ah, very Miss Havisham. I have Great Expectations that this will do well in the contest, it's very good Jan.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/23/2017 5:00:00 PM
Yes I guess it is rather like that story Ray:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 9:22:00 AM
A very sad tale Jan...but well expressed..GL in the contest
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/23/2017 9:40:00 AM
Thanks Joseph:-) I doubt it will place as I think it is too out of the box for the dust theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 8:39:00 AM
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:14:00 AM
Thanks David:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 3/23/2017 4:02:00 AM
Hi Jan , a great example of relating the experience in a poetic manner - yet comprehend the full story - great write
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/23/2017 4:13:00 AM
Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx
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