Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

Alas, I Was Tricked By a Heartless Mirage

Hues I desired, soon abandoned my sky
As flashing thunder ignited fiery clouds
Dissipating orange glow evening sought
Turning wild winds into advancing storm

Having promised you a galaxy of stars
I stepped boldly to go where they are
But there was no moon to guide my path
As I waddled in floods pitch-blank dark

Birds had detoured to shelter and hide
Seeing ocean's ride in enormous tides
Scattering on earth a despicable plight
As upon a hill I saw a glimmer of light

Courage I found in wondrous thoughts
Knowing this was to be my only chance
Bracing the storm to go where you are
Waiting inside the tall red lighthouse

But when I made it there you were gone
Alas, I was tricked by a heartless mirage

June 11, 2018

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Valsa George March 2, 2022 at 8:22 AM Braving the storm and adverse weather, you ventured out to join your love. Though the situation was never congenial, you had hope to guide your footsteps. But the result was heartbreaking. You were duped by a mirage ! In life, this happens often ! Imagination with a jolting pointer to reality. As ever so beautiful Vijay!

Angela Crabtree January 22, 2021 at 2:28 PM Powerful and descriptive, Vijay. The ending got me. Hope you have a great night :)

Deb Radke October 30, 2018 at 1:47 PM Another poem filled with imagery and pain. This draws you ever forward and hits you at the end. Wonderful writing. Deb Vijay Pandit October 30, 2018 at 3:43 PM Thank you Deb..so glad you took the time to read and post your thoughts.

Vladislav Raven October 29, 2018 at 10:22 AM Hi Vijay, an excellent write my friend. Your words paint such wondrous imagery as they flow down the page of emotions song. Your talent shines again my friend. Lost in your words I find my peace. have a wonderful Monday. your friend always....Mike. A Fave. Vijay Pandit October 30, 2018 at 3:44 PM Thank you Mike ..I appreciate that you took the time to read and post your thoughts.

Gary Bateman July 6, 2018 at 9:25 AM Hello Vijay, Very well-done my friend!! Passionately written with wondrous imagery. The ending couplet is perfect. A definite pleasure to read!! Best Always, Gary Vijay Pandit October 30, 2018 at 3:45 PM Thank you Gary..appreciate your visit and comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri June 19, 2018 at 4:37 AM I wow your powerful adept to pen the intertwining state of human soul with that of nature.. A well portrayed imagery crafted by a masterful ink, soaring imagination and a generous heart of a poet! A great joy to read your beauties dear Vijay. Definitely a FAV. Thank you for sharing your gems! Keep shining and stay blessed. Vijay Pandit June 19, 2018 at 6:43 AM Thank you Besma..appreciate the detailed feedback..so kind, you are!

James Swartz June 17, 2018 at 7:47 AM Great imagery Vijay. Nice touch at the end. Those darn mirages get me every time too. Vijay Pandit June 19, 2018 at 6:41 AM Thank you James.

Harry Horsman June 14, 2018 at 4:25 PM Awesome poetry, love the twist at the end. Vijay Pandit June 19, 2018 at 6:41 AM Thank you Harry.

Eve Roper June 13, 2018 at 9:15 PM Fabulous imagery.. Vijay, Vijay Pandit June 14, 2018 at 6:54 AM Thank you Eve.

Silent One June 13, 2018 at 11:26 AM You expressed this so well.. Great flow as always in your poem... Vijay Pandit June 14, 2018 at 6:53 AM Thank you Silent One.

Anne-Lise Andresen June 13, 2018 at 3:55 AM - Beautifully described ... a touching reading, Vijay - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit June 13, 2018 at 7:28 AM Always happy to read your kind words..many thanks Anne-Lise.

Demetrios Trifiatis June 13, 2018 at 3:17 AM Stormy verses, thunderous language, lightning conclusion! What a poem my friend, Vijay! Vijay Pandit June 13, 2018 at 7:28 AM Thank my friend, Demetrios--always happy to read your kind feedback.

Ravi Sathasivam June 13, 2018 at 2:40 AM Excellent. A great imagery and lovely flow of the poem. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Vijay Pandit June 13, 2018 at 7:27 AM Thank you Ravi...appreciate the kind words.

Andrea Dietrich June 12, 2018 at 5:30 PM a very nice one, Vijay. I like the descriptive way you tell your story here. Vijay Pandit June 13, 2018 at 7:27 AM Thank you Andrea. Appreciate the kind feedback.

Pandita Sietesantos June 12, 2018 at 3:43 PM You are a master of the beautiful and the romantic! You have the awesome gift of drawing me in with your mastery of imagery and emotions! Hugs. Pandita Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 4:38 PM Always happy to read your supportive comments..many thanks Pandita for your kind feedback.

Nette Onclaud June 12, 2018 at 2:52 PM vijay, nice to see you back with this fascinating and languid piece... greeat offering!..huggs Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 4:37 PM Nice to be back..enjoyed reading your comments nette..many thanks.

Charlie Smith June 12, 2018 at 12:29 PM A vivid mirage painted here Vijay, well done indeed... Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 4:36 PM Thank you Charlie for your kind feedback.

Mike Gentile June 12, 2018 at 8:56 AM But the quest for love will live on. Your romantic expression is always first rate, Vijay and lovely to read!!!! Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 4:35 PM Many thanks Mike..always appreciate your visit and kind words.

Maria Williams June 12, 2018 at 6:07 AM What a wonderful build up, and then the heartless mirage let down. An emotive poem Vijay, saying it like only you can, well expressed my friend....Maria hugs Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:38 AM Always happy to read your comments Maria..appreciate the kind feedback.

Supraja Kannan June 12, 2018 at 4:49 AM This is so lovely. Great imagery and flow. I loved it totally. You are a genius. Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:37 AM You are so kind..many thanks Supraja.

Lyric Man June 11, 2018 at 11:13 PM Creative genius at work! Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:36 AM Thank you Chance..you are so kind.

Janice Canerdy June 11, 2018 at 8:49 PM Vijay, you are VERY talented at creating vivid imagery! Janice Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:36 AM Many Many thanks for such delightful feedback Janice.

Robertina B. June 11, 2018 at 6:32 PM "I really enjoyed your free verse, Vijay.. Magnificent creativity!! Blessings to you.. Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:35 AM Thank you Robertina..appreciate the kind feedback.

Joseph May June 11, 2018 at 6:18 PM A sentinel amid the waves..Very nicely penned Vijay Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:35 AM Thank you Joseph..appreciate the kind words.

Heidi Sands June 11, 2018 at 6:05 PM Wow, this is great Vijay. I like the lighthouse. The mirage, a sad illusion. Well done :) Vijay Pandit June 12, 2018 at 6:35 AM Thank you Heidi..appreciate the kind feedback.

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