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Aintree Grand National Ladies Day

impudent wind flirts 
with snappy hats and long skirts
bell rings champagne squirts


Inspired by Lin Lane's rhymed haiku “meadow cloaked in white”. Alas, iambus turned out to be not pretty iambic)

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/19/2019 7:45:00 PM You were very nicely inspired by LIne! Login to Reply Kurt Ravidas Date: 12/20/2019 6:16:00 AM Yeah, Lin does inspire)

Lin Lane Date: 12/14/2019 1:23:00 PM What about something like this? quite stellar it flies/ deserting ebony skies/ supernova dies Login to Reply Kurt Ravidas Date: 12/14/2019 2:16:00 PM I did it! See "lotus". Hoping, my ending, hm, is feminine enough. Gosh, all of it sounds awfully dubious) Lin Lane Date: 12/14/2019 1:59:00 PM well, iambus is not my 'thang'. I'll leave those iambic things to those who are better honed at waxing stressed and unstressed syllables...like you. It was fun trying. At least I stuck with 5-7-5, and that's my feminine ending. ;-) Kurt Ravidas Date: 12/14/2019 1:42:00 PM Wow, it's high as highs but where is iambus? Heh, iambus is not as simple as meets the eye) When it comes to haiku, there should be an unstressed syllable at the end, or, as non-syllabic poets say, a feminine ending)

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 12/14/2019 12:41:00 PM I always wear long skirts instead of pants. This poem is festive and could be great for New Year's with that last line Kurt. Mele Kalikimaka! : ! xxoo Login to Reply Kurt Ravidas Date: 12/14/2019 12:48:00 PM Both wind and I are fond of long skirts. Merry Christmas both of you, Connie and skirts)

Lin Lane Date: 12/14/2019 10:38:00 AM You're not happy with the outcome? Perhaps it's the 3rd line that befuddles? Thank you for acknowledging your inspiration, Kurt. Login to Reply Kurt Ravidas Date: 12/14/2019 12:08:00 PM Yeah, this iambus sucks. I'll try again later. Thanks for inspiration, Lin)