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Aintree Grand National Ladies Day

impudent wind flirts with snappy hats and long skirts bell rings champagne squirts Inspired by Lin Lane's rhymed haiku “meadow cloaked in white”. Alas, iambus turned out to be not pretty iambic)

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/19/2019 7:45:00 PM

You were very nicely inspired by LIne!

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/20/2019 6:16:00 AM

Yeah, Lin does inspire)

Lin Lane

Date: 12/14/2019 1:23:00 PM

What about something like this? quite stellar it flies/ deserting ebony skies/ supernova dies

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/14/2019 2:16:00 PM

I did it! See "lotus". Hoping, my ending, hm, is feminine enough. Gosh, all of it sounds awfully dubious)

Lin Lane
Date: 12/14/2019 1:59:00 PM

well, iambus is not my 'thang'. I'll leave those iambic things to those who are better honed at waxing stressed and unstressed syllables...like you. It was fun trying. At least I stuck with 5-7-5, and that's my feminine ending. ;-)

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/14/2019 1:42:00 PM

Wow, it's high as highs but where is iambus? Heh, iambus is not as simple as meets the eye) When it comes to haiku, there should be an unstressed syllable at the end, or, as non-syllabic poets say, a feminine ending)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/14/2019 12:41:00 PM

I always wear long skirts instead of pants. This poem is festive and could be great for New Year's with that last line Kurt. Mele Kalikimaka! : ! xxoo

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/14/2019 12:48:00 PM

Both wind and I are fond of long skirts. Merry Christmas both of you, Connie and skirts)

Lin Lane

Date: 12/14/2019 10:38:00 AM

You're not happy with the outcome? Perhaps it's the 3rd line that befuddles? Thank you for acknowledging your inspiration, Kurt.

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/14/2019 12:08:00 PM

Yeah, this iambus sucks. I'll try again later. Thanks for inspiration, Lin)