Kurt Ravidas Poet Haiku

Aintree Grand National Ladies Day

impudent wind flirts 
with snappy hats and long skirts
bell rings champagne squirts


Inspired by Lin Lane's rhymed haiku “meadow cloaked in white”. Alas, iambus turned out to be not pretty iambic)

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Andrea Dietrich December 19, 2019 at 7:45 PM You were very nicely inspired by LIne! Kurt Ravidas December 20, 2019 at 6:16 AM Yeah, Lin does inspire)

Lin Lane December 14, 2019 at 1:23 PM What about something like this? quite stellar it flies/ deserting ebony skies/ supernova dies Kurt Ravidas December 14, 2019 at 2:16 PM I did it! See "lotus". Hoping, my ending, hm, is feminine enough. Gosh, all of it sounds awfully dubious) Lin Lane December 14, 2019 at 1:59 PM well, iambus is not my 'thang'. I'll leave those iambic things to those who are better honed at waxing stressed and unstressed syllables...like you. It was fun trying. At least I stuck with 5-7-5, and that's my feminine ending. ;-) Kurt Ravidas December 14, 2019 at 1:42 PM Wow, it's high as highs but where is iambus? Heh, iambus is not as simple as meets the eye) When it comes to haiku, there should be an unstressed syllable at the end, or, as non-syllabic poets say, a feminine ending)

Connie Marcum Wong December 14, 2019 at 12:41 PM I always wear long skirts instead of pants. This poem is festive and could be great for New Year's with that last line Kurt. Mele Kalikimaka! : ! xxoo Kurt Ravidas December 14, 2019 at 12:48 PM Both wind and I are fond of long skirts. Merry Christmas both of you, Connie and skirts)

Lin Lane December 14, 2019 at 10:38 AM You're not happy with the outcome? Perhaps it's the 3rd line that befuddles? Thank you for acknowledging your inspiration, Kurt. Kurt Ravidas December 14, 2019 at 12:08 PM Yeah, this iambus sucks. I'll try again later. Thanks for inspiration, Lin)