Ah, To Be a Deer

Oh, the incessant noise, the jibber jabber,
civilization’s cure for loneliness,
the panacea for boredom.
If only, if only, “You’ve got male.”
would be an answer.
Ah, but no…

Tweet on, “Oh ship of state…”
this Union, this rudderless human joining…

Oh, to be a deer in the wood 
the silent wood, the sea of green, the eye of calm
to hear naught but the patter of rain.
And, taste only the dewy mist 
on the tip of pedal pink tongue.

To not have soiled the soul, flesh eater, destroyer 
To be Un-manned…
To run and leap, doe-eyed, over fallen log…instead of fallen foe.
To rise a-dawning in the mist of a four-legged dream.
To be mounted by a loyal buck
and birth a quivering fawn.

Surely, all the monkey mind has to offer 
can not compare to the innocence of the doe.
Shut the roaring static, kill the jabber walkie
resurrect me silent, furred and free
amongst the fiddleheads and moss 
of the wildwood.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 9/15/2011 9:55:00 PM
deb, I remember this one. If the judge likes cutesy poetry, the other one would have done better. If he knows a really good poem when he sees it, a mature one like this, then this will do well. I just don't know what kind of judge he is. But he has many entries to choose from and I already know I will not win with him becuase I have seen so many tremendous animal poems posted for his contest!!
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Date: 8/25/2011 2:03:00 AM
wow, this is great stuff Debs. Loved some of those play on words you did in it. But I sure would not want to be a deer. For sure, somebody would shoot me in the butt.
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Date: 8/23/2011 5:54:00 PM
Is there anything more breathtaking than a deer, a doe, beautifully written, Debbie and I want to thank you so very much for my win in your contest, with SIWAK, I almost did not enter it, as I thought it was not what you were looking for, but others encouraged me to, and look what happened. I had just tons of fun writing it for you and I am very honored and proud~~
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Date: 8/23/2011 3:44:00 PM
Ahhh..this makes me think of this weekend.My husband and I went to our mountain cabin on Saturday,and as we were heading up the driveway,we saw a doe looking rather startled..as if we were intruding"HER" place, and had no business bringing civilization and all it's rude behavior to such a serene spot. We almost felt bad to see her run off, and wonder how often she visits when we aren't around?..before I go..I must say thank you so much...you are too kind to me, and my writes. I am very grateful!
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Date: 8/23/2011 12:05:00 AM
Mesmerizing!!Yes to be a deer....to lie in the lush green grass... take the smell of wet soil....to have those innocent eyes...
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Date: 8/22/2011 9:36:00 PM
love deers and this poem thank you for your comments on my win. It's all in God's time the way things are. excellent write God bless
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Date: 8/22/2011 9:23:00 PM
I lovely Lady would indeed want to be a buck, terrific write...with love....old Jack
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Date: 8/22/2011 9:16:00 PM
Lovely write lovely Lady Debbie, yes the joy of nature, we are certainly a rudderless ship of fools, well said.
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Date: 8/22/2011 9:12:00 PM
i'd go pounce and bounce and wiggle my tail innocently and joyously... but if i did... who'd pay the bills? Ahhhhh.... life... what a whatta. Nice write, Debbie.. muchas gracias and namaste. ~N
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