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Aging Parents, surreal dreams

In the attic of your heart, they dwell, Like forgotten relics in a spell, Their whispers soft, a distant stream, In the labyrinth of your surreal dream. Within this dream, your parents aged and wise, Are pillars standing 'midst the shifting sands, Their faces etched with tales of starlit skies, Their eyes, two lanterns held in weathered hands. Yet as you reach to grasp their fading light, They slip away like whispers in the breeze, Their voices lost amidst the fading night, Leaving you adrift upon the seas. Their love, a garden overgrown, With weeds of neglect, left to roam, While you chase mirages in the moonbeam, Oblivious to their cries in your surreal dream. Yet beneath the surface, a tempest stirs, A longing to break free from selfish spurs, To embrace the truth in the moon's gleam, And awaken from this surreal dream.

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Date: 4/28/2024 4:19:00 PM
Thank you for your support of the contest Jay. My dad is 84 so I can relate
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Date: 4/27/2024 12:15:00 PM
I think you did this topic very well. You deserve a win. By the way, mine was talking about the first and only time I did marijuana. Not a nightmare just very surreal feelings!
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Date: 4/25/2024 8:50:00 PM
When we think of our parents, a medley of feelings of love, longing, regret and sadness come crowding to our mind. We wonder if we cared enough for them while alive though we loved and admired them. With such thoughts, as we sleep we get surreal dreams. "Within this dream, your parents aged and wise, Are pillars standing 'midst the shifting sands, Their faces etched with tales of starlit skies, Their eyes, two lanterns held in weathered hands." Lovely lines.
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Date: 4/25/2024 5:16:00 PM
a poignant poem and a memorable take on the 'surreal' contest. I felt a sense of nostalgia and a yearning within your metaphorical words/phrases. I especially liked these lines:Their love, a garden overgrown, With weeds of neglect, left to roam, While you chase mirages in the moonbeam, Oblivious to their cries in your surreal dream Reminds me of the dreams of regret I had in not always being there for my parents in the declining and waning years. Truly magnificent and so human you are!
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Date: 4/25/2024 4:56:00 PM
A beautiful poem Jay. I often have a dream that I realize its been months since I visited my parents and I feel so guilty. I wake up midst planning a visit, only to realize they died over twenty five years ago and I always visited them 3 times a week, but those dreams seem so real. I love your poem.
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Date: 4/25/2024 4:10:00 PM
Impressive use of metaphors, Jay. Your descriptions were beautifully crafted, evoking a sense of nostalgia and warmth.
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Date: 4/25/2024 12:24:00 PM
Wonderfully metaphoric, Jay. I enjoyed your descriptions--dwelling in fond memories.
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Date: 4/25/2024 12:21:00 PM
A lovely write. It is hard to be a parent. Even harder to be an aging parent. Have a blessed day writing away................
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Date: 4/25/2024 11:45:00 AM
I loved the imagery in your surreal dream, Jay. Beautifully written! :)
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