after the storm

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you managed to get blown away ~ I tried too but couldn’t even sway says the depressed tree to its fallen sibling ~ still life’s brighter today By David Kavanagh

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Lin Lane

Date: 8/22/2024 10:32:00 AM

Living in the paths of many hurricanes, I've witnessed MANY such dire endings to beautiful trees... ancient oaks who didn't deserve to be split, splintered, and broken. Monoku is still your forte' David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/22/2024 10:46:00 AM

I seem to have stumbled upon a little niche on the monoku form Lin, just a natural progression methinks, I bet you have witnessed every category of hurricane on the chart, living next to the warm waters of the gulf, poor trees have no choice but to stand their ground, the trees in my Monoku here are only used for perspective, I think depression with a little ironic hope, is the bigger picture, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/22/2024 10:19:00 AM

Looking on the bright side, a good supply of winter fuel. Remember when I was in Athlone a few years ago and Storm Ophelia hit the west of Ireland, it took down a big tree near where we were staying. The next morning it was gone, they must have sawn through the night lol. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/22/2024 10:32:00 AM

I remember it well Tom, was a nasty one, at least it was forecast, not like the beast that hit uk years ago knocking down a million trees, and the forecasters got it all wrong, (Michael Fish) was hung out to dry lol! Cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 8/22/2024 7:40:00 AM

Soz, I'm in a respond in rhyme mood: The power of perspective/ Of life and death and such/ Really plays with the emotions/ When we feel too little or two much/ Broken, frozen or numb held in place/ Today's undeniably cataclysmic/ Even for those who save face. I enjoyed your thought provoking poem

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/22/2024 8:41:00 AM

Chantings and incantations I normally steer clear of, I’m not ready for a tonsure just yet! although I do have a little confession reading your (Rest my head) post earlier, possibly got me thinking about trees, and I bounced this monoku off it, a domino effect must be rippling through the soup today!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/22/2024 8:26:00 AM

Of course! It just felt easier to comment almost in reflection. You're lucky I didn't throw myself into a monastic chant - think the rhythm is out for that though haha :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/22/2024 8:10:00 AM

Ah yes the irony of being able to see more light in the shadow of the fallen! love your response in rhyme comment Dilly, did my little Monoku really inspire those words, I hope so? thanks so much, high praise, cheers David