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10.59pm June 16, 2024

After The Party, I Woke Up On A Tropical Island


After the party, I woke up on a tropical island
My vision wasn’t so clear and so my mind
I’ve heard a new music, I couldn’t understand
All I knew, everything was no longer aligned.

With tattered clothes and scratches on my body
I screamed and shook the man next to me
Still sleeping holding two empty bottles of whisky
I cried, “Honey, wake up! Where are we?”

I remembered, we’ve partied all night
A batch farewell to welcome our new flight
We ate, danced and sang karaoke on the beach
Then sailed, with free boat, one partner each.

While sailing, we sang the owl and the pussycat,
When a storm came, we lost our track
Our boat capsized…a wreckage… then what?
In that foreign tropical island came our best luck!

A tribe came singing and dancing around us,
They thought we were gifts from their gods
They offered us foods, fruits, garlands, plus
Bars of gold, precious stones… I was so glad!


We were kept in the heart of a forest, a paradise
I was like a queen, a leader gowned in white
They were too kind, loving and extremely nice
Gave us grandiose wedding, what a great delight!

But we’ve missed our loved ones, family and home
We bid goodbye, not happy with treasures alone
They built us beautiful raft and we sailed soon
That night when the sea was calmed by the full moon.
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Gasun Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 6:42 AM
Contest Judged: 7/30/2024 8:27:00 AM Sponsored by: Anoucheka Gangabissoon Place 1 (up to 5 multi-w)
Croft Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 7:48 PM
Congratulations, beautifully done
Gasun Avatar
August 10, 2024 at 6:34 AM
Thank you so much for reading my poem, your uplifting comment and congratulatory greetings my dear poet friend Karen. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Alex Avatar
July 30, 2024 at 6:49 PM
A word to word minute illustration. Beautiful writing. Congratulations!
Gasun Avatar
August 10, 2024 at 6:33 AM
Thank you so much for reading my poem and your congratulatory greetings my dear poet friend Christuraj. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
July 30, 2024 at 11:21 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a great island write/story. Wish I was on your island with you. Sounds great with foods, fruits, Bars of gold & precious stones. Hugs...  Have a very fun day writing away...........
Gasun Avatar
August 10, 2024 at 6:32 AM
I will be very happy that you will be with me my dearest poet friend Paula. Thank you so much for reading my poem, your uplifting comment and congratulatory greetings. May God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Kendrick Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 11:49 AM
Creative one for the contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your work with us. Sara K
Gasun Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 7:18 PM
Thank you so much for reading my poem and your uplifting words my dear poet friend Sara. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
George Avatar
July 16, 2024 at 8:16 PM
What a thrilling story of adventure, rescue and feeling of bliss. Len, your imagination has lifted you to a land of fantasy. Though you got everything you could possibly have, you missed your land and your dear ones. So you didn't detain your stay there. Fantastic story. All the Best dear friend.
Gasun Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 7:10 PM
Thank you so much belatedly for reading my poem, your uplifting words and best wishes my dear poet friend Valsa. My best wishes to you always too. God bless you always. Hugs
Onclaud Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 1:42 PM
Great storyteller you are, len...I love the plot twist in the end! How are you? Thanks for the warm welcome! Till soon :)
Gasun Avatar
June 23, 2024 at 12:51 AM
Thank you dear poet friend. Thanks a lot for reading my poem. With God's help I'm fine; although always busy especially for preparing exams. Just taking a break for a while through poetry. Thank you so much again. God bless you always. Hugs
Anaya Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 12:05 PM
Len, this was suspenseful and delightful. What I most enjoyed was the message of " not happy with treasures alone" great entry!
Gasun Avatar
June 23, 2024 at 12:49 AM
Thank you so much for reading my poem my dear poet friend Anaya. I'm glad you like or enjoye one of the messages. God bless you always and your writings. I'm so grateful and I appreciate your uplifting words. Hugs
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