After a Nightmare

In the night of dreams
I lay suffering sleepless
My fears are at peak alert
Nightmares are present
I hate terrors that I find
Now I must mop the darkness

Russell Sivey

Entrant into Brian Strand's "ANY POEM FROM YOUR ANTHOLOGY" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 1/22/2012 8:50:00 PM
I read this one early... thank you Russell, for understanding.. it was a bit moving to write... I did and do love my real mother... Sometimes I get mad and sad cause she left me.. than i get madder because in 30 something years i never told her that i loved her... i treated her likemy friends.. but, you know what, the day she was on her death bed.. she let me know she knew i loved her... thank you..p.d.
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Date: 1/22/2012 1:02:00 PM
Well, reads like a terrible night..I hope just a work and not real life..I have some rough nights sometimes and they are not any fun..Thanks for the uplifting comments left on my work..Sara
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Date: 1/22/2012 12:31:00 PM
As one who has many nightmares, I can relate to the way you describe "fear are at peak alert." The only way I can mop away the darkness is to go outside and try to focus on other things. Excellent sedoka, Russell. I haven't been able to type well due to my illness and I'm sorry I haven't been able to read and comment more. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/22/2012 6:16:00 AM
a rush of poetic fever so well defined here, russell... you are in your element!.. winning huggs to you!
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Date: 1/21/2012 10:55:00 PM
I have had such nightmares. I understand the terror you write of in your poem.
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Date: 1/21/2012 10:26:00 PM
Dear Russell, kind of sad.. it's kind of hard to tell what i do after a nightmare...i'm a real scardy cat... .. thank you for sharing..forever & ever~pd
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Date: 1/21/2012 9:56:00 PM
Russell I am really loving that final line, 'Now I must mop the darkness' a wonderfully frightening yet inspiring ideal and imagery that creates. Certainly I find myself having these issues in the day as well, sometimes I cannot see the light through the darkness... but I shall keep the mop handy, thanks for sharing, great poetry!!
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Date: 1/21/2012 9:50:00 PM
wow I do luv every line Russell.. absorbing piece.. feeling every emotion .. visual and full of imagery .. good luck in the new contest.. so ,much said in a few great lines my friend.. luv..
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Date: 1/21/2012 7:47:00 PM
Russell-I hate to agree w/ everyone but the first thing I thought of was what a fantastic last line!!! It's brilliant!
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Date: 1/21/2012 6:30:00 PM
I've never spilled darkness all over the floor. That line was interesting. I see the three previous reviewers also found that line interesting. This is another good write Russell.
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Date: 1/21/2012 5:18:00 PM
wow, I LOVE that last line: mop the darkness. Outstanding.
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Date: 1/21/2012 5:10:00 PM
"Now I must mop the darkness" - Such an interesting line. Great poem!
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