Afghanistan

ideals to inspire soldiers
    when 9/11 spewing black clouds meant a 
                                         complicated revenge
defeat terrorists, take out bin Laden
remake a country in democratic vestments
golden good intentions that lose their way in 
                        an undertow of violence
the bones of wartime, bullets of combat carnage

Taliban insurgents hide and seek in Pakistan 
militants wait to impose their laws
as a regime falls, unhinged by corruption
unwilling to fire a shot
swift capitulation like jaws snapping shut

US departure, flawed
      dangles like severed wires
refugees stampede 
     flee the bondage of remaining
evacuation - a spreading blood stain, chaotic

Afghanistan intervention, no sound preconditions
                       for success
in an end game that had no ending?
just more of the same?
achievements of 20 years
        seep through outstretched hands
        like heated wars
               storms of desert sand
that fixate on what cannot be changed



Poem composed September 5/21
For Afghanistan Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Deo Avatar
January 2, 2022 at 12:41 PM
comprehensive list of political mistakes (hubris). shalom shalom Brian
Sambourne Avatar
January 2, 2022 at 3:59 PM
My appreciation for your drop by + comment Anil. I hope the year ahead is a good one for you. Sincerely, Brian
Hankins Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 12:20 PM
Congratulations on your win, Brian. When I first read your poem, I thought it was particularly well-written, and it certainly merited a high place in this contest!
Sambourne Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 12:51 PM
Hi Milton. Your initial comment certainly encouraged me to leave the piece as is. You were the right voice at the right time. With much appreciation, Brian
Radhakrishna Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 4:54 AM
Very true and totally agree! well done!! congrats on your win!
Sambourne Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 6:10 AM
Thank you Krish, for your supportive comments. Best wishes, Brian
Alex Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 4:09 AM
Real understanding of the crisis. Detailed writing. Congratulations!
Sambourne Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 6:11 AM
Greetings Christuraj, I appreciate your congratulatory note. Hope that you are well + writing. Cheers Brian
Wells Avatar
September 20, 2021 at 2:04 AM
I really like this poem, especially the closing line. I think you capture very well what most Americans feel about the endless war. Take Care!
Sambourne Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 6:14 AM
Hello Thomas, Kind of you to comment on my overview of Afghanistan. I wish Afghanistan could find internal peace, safety + respect for all. Take care. Brian
Kendrick Avatar
September 18, 2021 at 2:51 AM
I think you have a good understanding of the situation so I am glad that I chose this one to read today. We have no idea what the outcome will be but I don't think it will be a good one. Thanks for your visit to my page. I appreciate the time spent there. I am getting better but it is still one day I feel like it is over then the next day I feel like it is back again. Sara
Sambourne Avatar
September 18, 2021 at 7:46 AM
Thanks very much, Sara, for your read of my submission. May your recovery be thorough, which each day a covid residue ending. Brian
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September 13, 2021 at 6:44 AM
So true Brian, I believe Pakistan is to Afghanistan what China is to nth Korea, they hold the strings that control these puppets, I think in the end the US done all it could, these withdrawals are always chaotic and upsetting for the friendlies, wonderful honest poem cheers David
Sambourne Avatar
September 13, 2021 at 8:27 AM
Greetings David, Most appreciative of your supportive comment. An exceptionally difficult subject to tackle in 27 lines. Best wishes, Brian
Cunningham Avatar
September 8, 2021 at 4:43 PM
Behind that dark curtain that is the Taliban I have a sneaky feeling that Pakistan helped them a lot behind the scenes although they deny it. Well written and Informative piece Brian. Tom
Sambourne Avatar
September 8, 2021 at 4:53 PM
Hi Tom, You're quite right. The Taliban received ample cover + support from Pakistan. (A lifeline really). Thank you for your stop by + affirmative note. Be well. Brian
Callus Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 6:58 AM
You ably summerize the Afghanistan situation, Brian. Politics is a complicated game in which strategies and end results are not quite what we wish for. ~ Best regards // paul
Sambourne Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 7:04 AM
Greetings Paul, I appreciate your stop by + comment on my poem. The topic is complex in its tragic turmoil. Best wishes, Brian
Hankins Avatar
September 5, 2021 at 9:06 PM
Marvelous review of the recent situation in Afghanistan. Nicely done, Brian. Best wishes in the contest.
Hankins Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 10:14 AM
Thanks, Brian. I thought it was quite well-written.
Sambourne Avatar
September 5, 2021 at 9:31 PM
Thanks very much Milton. I may revise the poem as it was given short shrift in composition. Your note is most thoughtful, however. Hope that you are well. Cheers, Brian
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