Adrift

Adrift,
With nothing to get me out of bed.
This rift,
Rocking around inside my head.

Lost,
In a sea of too much time.
Tossed,
With nothing to anchor my mind.

No work,
To which I can apply my hand.
Irked,
That I don’t have a place to land.

Drenched,
By the storm raging ‘round in me.
Wrenched,
Not knowing how long it will be.

Churned,
By the waves that are not yet done.
Learned,
Not being able to work is no fun.


This is my first attempt at writing a poem that rhymes. I usually write free verse.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 8/28/2009 10:19:00 AM
your first time, doing ryme! good job. :) Ell
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2009 2:47:00 PM
I think you nicely succeeded at rhyming. It doesn't look like it was too hard for you though. I think you could attempt more easily. Congratulations on your win.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/12/2009 12:34:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Matt's contest Krista.Rgds Brian
Login to Reply
Date: 8/11/2009 2:16:00 PM
Congratulations on placing in the contest! Wonderful rhyme. It gets easier the more you do it. ~Trudy~
Login to Reply
Date: 8/10/2009 11:32:00 PM
Krista congrats on placing in Matts contest, MJ
Login to Reply
Date: 8/3/2009 3:37:00 AM
Well, I think you did a great job at this write.I enjoyed it. Good job.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/2/2009 6:54:00 PM
hi Krista! your first rhyme....what you have been able to do by this form, is create a rhythmic flow to the understanding of this fine poem! in this case, it works its magic!! very well done! my new friend! and your comments were quite delightful! I must say, keep creating! jimbo
Login to Reply
Date: 8/2/2009 11:16:00 AM
A very enjoyable read you have written and shared with us today. Thank you Krista. You did a wonderful job. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Date: 8/1/2009 7:32:00 AM
I like the layout of this and the way the rhyme is not forced.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/1/2009 5:20:00 AM
Sad, but beautiful to read, thank you for sharing>>James
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter