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Adrift

Adrift, With nothing to get me out of bed. This rift, Rocking around inside my head. Lost, In a sea of too much time. Tossed, With nothing to anchor my mind. No work, To which I can apply my hand. Irked, That I don’t have a place to land. Drenched, By the storm raging ‘round in me. Wrenched, Not knowing how long it will be. Churned, By the waves that are not yet done. Learned, Not being able to work is no fun. This is my first attempt at writing a poem that rhymes. I usually write free verse.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 8/28/2009 10:19:00 AM
your first time, doing ryme! good job. :) Ell
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Date: 8/13/2009 2:47:00 PM
I think you nicely succeeded at rhyming. It doesn't look like it was too hard for you though. I think you could attempt more easily. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/12/2009 12:34:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Matt's contest Krista.Rgds Brian
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Date: 8/11/2009 2:16:00 PM
Congratulations on placing in the contest! Wonderful rhyme. It gets easier the more you do it. ~Trudy~
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Date: 8/10/2009 11:32:00 PM
Krista congrats on placing in Matts contest, MJ
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Date: 8/3/2009 3:37:00 AM
Well, I think you did a great job at this write.I enjoyed it. Good job.
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Date: 8/2/2009 6:54:00 PM
hi Krista! your first rhyme....what you have been able to do by this form, is create a rhythmic flow to the understanding of this fine poem! in this case, it works its magic!! very well done! my new friend! and your comments were quite delightful! I must say, keep creating! jimbo
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Date: 8/2/2009 11:16:00 AM
A very enjoyable read you have written and shared with us today. Thank you Krista. You did a wonderful job. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/1/2009 7:32:00 AM
I like the layout of this and the way the rhyme is not forced.
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Date: 8/1/2009 5:20:00 AM
Sad, but beautiful to read, thank you for sharing>>James
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