Jan Allison Poet Fibonacci

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Adieu My Darling

Your
death
hit me
very hard
I’d sat by your side
until the machine stopped bleeping.
Your chest remained still as you’d taken your final breath
I wept as I closed your eyes, kissing your icy cheek I whispered adieu my darling

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Writing Challenge January, 2019- Fibonacci - Poetry Contest

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1/1/19

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Stephen Pennell February 3, 2019 at 5:44 AM sad emotional pen jan

Anne-Lise Andresen January 13, 2019 at 8:19 AM - Congratulations on your great 1 place in the contest, Jan :) - Have a lovely Sunday :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Joseph May January 13, 2019 at 6:38 AM A very touching write Jan..Congrats on your win..

Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2019 at 4:45 PM What a heart-wrenching romantic and loving farewell Fibonacci, Jan, such an exquisite write, and a worthy winner - going into my favs. Blessings and congrats, my friend! :-) <3

Line Gauthier January 12, 2019 at 1:33 PM Back with congrats on your well crafted fibonacci, Jan.

Alexis Y. January 12, 2019 at 1:25 PM It's so good to see that you so well with this amazing write. Congratulations on your 1st place. It was well deserved:-)Alexis

Constance La France January 12, 2019 at 1:24 PM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing Fibonacci ~

Ann Gilmour January 12, 2019 at 12:22 PM Gosh such a poignant write Jan. Many congrats on your win. Kindest thoughts Ann xx

Carolyn Devonshire January 12, 2019 at 11:41 AM Oh, Jan, you've taken me back to the hospital room where my father died. It was just as you described in your heart-wrenching poem. Well done! Congratulations on your first-place win in Dear Heart's contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Alexis Y. January 5, 2019 at 5:14 PM WoW! Jan, As I read this my eyes filled up with tears. Watching a loved one take their last breath is something I never want to witness. Good title,form and content. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis Jan Allison January 5, 2019 at 5:16 PM aww thanks Alexis it really is a challenging form to write!:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf January 4, 2019 at 3:08 PM A real tear-jerker, Jan. Nice entry for the contest! :) gw Jan Allison January 4, 2019 at 5:27 PM Thanks so much Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen January 4, 2019 at 4:27 AM - Excellent, Jan - Love the last (difficult) line :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison January 4, 2019 at 4:33 AM Thanks Anne-Lise writing this poem was quite a challenge in so many ways:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong January 2, 2019 at 5:42 PM I am happy to know this is fictional Jan. I feel for those who have to say goodbye in this way. Your poem expresses that anguished love so well. I think Constance will really like this one! Best of luck in the contest. xxoo Jan Allison January 2, 2019 at 7:10 PM Thanks Connie, I know Constance likes sad so I do try to write serious poem to let folk know I am not just a humourist:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray January 2, 2019 at 5:03 PM Sad how many must bid farewell in Intensive Case units Jan. So glad in this case it wasn't you who had to. I hope this new years brings you much joy and laughter. Jan Allison January 2, 2019 at 5:19 PM Thanks so much Jean I'm thankful its a fiction poem for me, i prefer humour but know Constance likes sad. I've had a lot to smile about today and won't let anything get me down:-) hope you had a wonderful Christmas and new year and sending you my best wishes for 2019:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso January 2, 2019 at 3:49 AM beautiful, sad, now for the bridge Jan Allison January 2, 2019 at 3:56 AM I can't begin to imagine the sadness of losing someone like this, hope folks can see there is more to me than a poop poet lol:-) hugs Jan xx-

Andrew Fairchild January 1, 2019 at 10:28 PM Felt like the real thing! May you never have to go through that. Jan Allison January 2, 2019 at 3:41 AM I sincerely hope I never have to Andrew it must be so heartbreaking:-( hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier January 1, 2019 at 6:27 PM Wow awesome poem, Jan. Superbly done. Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 6:46 PM aww thanks Line, it was quite a challenge to get the final line to fit into the space i must have re-written it about 10 times before I could finally post it:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 1, 2019 at 6:08 PM Constance likes them sad, and I bet that is the best way to do this challenge for her. Glad to see this was just fiction, Jan. I would hate to see this happen to someone in front of me! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 6:12 PM Yes I wrote sad as i know Constance likes melancholy writes I much prefer silly poems which make people smile - too much sadness in many lives I've got people who come to read my poems on a regular basis because most of the time I make them smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish January 1, 2019 at 5:58 PM This is the type of poem that could make someone cry. I wrote a poem called "Paul's Gone" when my father died and read it at the funeral. I think my sister read some Wordsworth who was one of my father's favorite wordsmith. I like Coleridge a lot - especially Xanadu. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 6:01 PM I wrote a poem called the crying candle and read it at my father's funeral, several of the mourners asked me for a copy as they found it so moving:-) hugs Jan xx