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November- 15- 2024
Addiction Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Kai Michael Neumann
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Re entered for Rob Carmack's Drugs Poetry Contest
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Premiere Contest WinnerAddiction

In this arid plain of perennial drought, as I stand transfixed with vexations rising in my spirit and sadness lying mute as a stone, I discern, I am alone with none to hold my hand or share the burden that weighs me down. Trudging through rugged paths with my mournful shadow, tottering along, the past sneers at me, breaking open bottled up memories- of years spent in unbridled passion, the smell of cigarettes, ganja and beer wine and women, bet and gambling, and the thrill of having won and lost I used narcotic drugs many and they kept gnawing into my psyche! Once I walked with stilted gait with friends and fans, amid laughter and haste eager to please and to praise Inebriated and effervescent were we Fancied money could buy all we yearned and turn this Earth-a virtual Paradise But how swift was the twist of fate! With no condiments, life suddenly turned bland. The gorgeous castles I once built, burnt down to cinders like dry leaves blown by the wind, Friends, I thought never would desert, flitted away one by one! With dejection and despair warping me down a rabid dog I strayed. Grew irritable and vicious, fled away from bond and bondage spitting the saliva of my angst,I barked… barked at everyone; “Where did vanish all the fabulous dreams Whither gone life’s ritzy splendors? But the wildfire burnt itself down, now a passive stillness has settled in. In this inert hush, as I grope,through murky corridors with the sound of my footsteps falling like a thud, a single query breaks out from within ‘Where shall I hide unseen from this horrid loneliness staring me in the eyes?’
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Ashley Avatar
September 28, 2025 at 11:51 AM
Dearest Valsa, I'm so happy to return to this exquisite poem and extend my heartiest congratulations for your success in Rob's contest. The depth and breadth of your heartfelt verse grows ever more compelling and impactful with every read. Such sorrow, such heartbreak, brought to life by the power of your poignant poetic pen. I bow to your emotive and evocative finesse. May your golden pen ever spill gold! Warmest wishes, my talented poet friend.. ~Susan
Godwin Avatar
September 23, 2025 at 11:36 AM
I've read the top three and this is my favorite, not only can I understand every word, YOU UNDERSTAND the 'man's' mindset and spilled same with your pen. A great job! It isn't hard to imagine this scenario with a rock star, I'm guessing that's where you went. Wonderful poem. Congratulations.
Volumes Avatar
September 23, 2025 at 5:50 AM
An amazing masterpiece Valsa. I am in awe of your talent.
Sharma Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 9:57 PM
Well done on your winning streak. A heartfelt depiction of addiction.
Carmack Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 3:24 PM
Congrats and thanks for entering this fine thing.
George Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 9:04 PM
Hi Rob, Thank you so much for the contest and the placement given.
Ashley Avatar
December 1, 2024 at 6:15 PM
Dearest Valsa, poetess extraordinaire, your potent diction and poetic execution leaves me breathless with appreciation for your skillful creation of rich, soulful, vivid imagery and metaphors. You have captured the heart and soul of an addict with an aching, compassionate introspection. I especially enjoyed images like "sadness lying mute as a stone" and "a rabid dog I strayed" and your play with internal rhymes "how 'swift' was the 'twist' of fate" and word pairings "bond and bondage". Every verse is exquisite! Your question in the last three lines is truly profound and an impactful, soulful finale. A big Fav! Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Kai's contest. It’s a honor to share the podium with you. Your artistry spills the brim with your poetic gift. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Jones Avatar
November 28, 2024 at 1:24 AM
Congratulations on your top win!
Davey Avatar
November 27, 2024 at 11:12 AM
The rise and fall of the addict, it happens in so many peoples lives. Your writing style and vocabulary are unmatched than you for the poetic journey you just took us all on, the emotion was felt as if we were him, congrats on your win well deserved
Narain Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 11:47 AM
Nice poem on tragic addiction. A sure winner in the contest.
One Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 10:12 AM
Dear Valsa, you show the impact on a person emotions through addiction, very well... Your tone is reflective and sorrowful, layered with bitterness and introspection. The mood shifts from vibrant reminiscence to deep loneliness, creating a powerful emotional journey that resonates with readers. It explores the repercussions of a hedonistic lifestyle, showing how fleeting pleasures can lead to long-term emptiness. Best of luck in the contest..
Riabi Dziri Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 9:57 AM
My dear Valsa, how powerfully you have rendered the world of addiction and the torture and the illusion of the addict! You have shown in your expressive words the decay of humanity in the addict! How dark is that world! How degrading! If only the whole world would read and listen! You have profoundly portrayed the psychological and emotional state of the addict and the huge harm addiction can cause! A work of immense beauty and awareness! Worthy to be highly rated and valued! God bless you.
Cunningham Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 7:11 AM
It's a tragic illness that many succumb to and can't break from it. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Buhagiar Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 2:26 AM
Dear Valsa, a hard subject to write on. This world is littered with people with addictions, often to the detriment of others. A fine, well constructed poem. Best for a win.
Andresen Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 1:43 AM
- "spirit and sadness lying mute as a stone" a powerful line, Valsa - Emotions excellently described - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
Rolland Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 11:52 PM
waw, you wrote the perfect language about loneliness and fantasy, this is an enlightening poem, a giant metaphor about life, thanks poet Valsa
Tor Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 9:55 PM
Wow Valsa you have captured this terrible choice people make and can not sometimes control. You have cleverly shared examples of this degenerate state of evil desire with dire consequences. Well done Valsa and a wonderful entry for the Contest. Best wishes, and good blessings to you for sharing this truth of yours...
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