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Across the Room

Across the room, harsh moonlight flares like a blister inside your eyes… those gazes piercing into my forbidden secrets and inadequacies, numb — holding me captive among lackluster stars that prowl on ashes of confession, an untold reparation wrought by pride: Candles burn while I lean motionless In glum of evening, this evening when truth Finds us questioning ardor’s devotion -- Until my voice lilts to stir a moment of grace , of mercy : I peer into those eyes quietly, slowly knowing moonlight still flares across the room. Brian Strand's Ultimate February 2019 Contest

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Date: 3/1/2019 11:59:00 AM
Bravo, nette. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/1/2019 8:16:00 AM
You sure know how to set a mood Nette. :)
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Date: 2/13/2019 1:58:00 AM
beautiful poem Nette...
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Date: 2/12/2019 10:22:00 PM
As always, Nette, words perfectly chosen and weighted; excellent write.
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Date: 2/12/2019 9:15:00 AM
Overwhelmed by the startling mood and setting of your poem!
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Date: 2/12/2019 1:47:00 AM
- An impressive writing, Nette - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/11/2019 3:38:00 PM
Excellent poem, Nette. Very impressive style and content..well written, as always.
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:57:00 PM
The atmosphere thick with intent, wondrous write Nette. Good luck in the contest, xomo
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:35:00 PM
Repetitions spot on nette, well.written Tom
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:07:00 PM
Nette, you used "across the room" in a powerful and perfectly frugal way, not pounding it into our heads, but teasing us with the suggestion. This is a brilliant entry for the contest and a fave for me. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:00:00 PM
You dazzle in elegant word mysteries that can excitedly lead one down many paths.. your meaning at the end of just one, but which? Such a treat, Nette!
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Date: 2/11/2019 1:56:00 PM
You captured a moment in time and expressed well...
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