Aches Of A Violin

.-G-. .-R-. .-O-. .-O-. .-V-. .-E-. .-S-. pierce my ears, caressing notes to rake tears on such moonlit aches, strings groan through passages on breaths as scrapes of violin lurch; veiled weeping dives low like fine spear falling on my riddled head, as if to crack reeds just there, enthralled by heaves of waved air swelling along melodies tragic in liquid gothic drones, my old innocence plucked raw beyond deep allegro of time; tunes' long drags hard to bear peeling my burnt flesh slow the fine bow screeches, I cry on slain notes
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Devnath  Avatar
August 2, 2012 at 9:57 AM
Nice description of a bow. Congrats on your win, sorry for late. Loved always,bl
Brown Avatar
August 1, 2012 at 6:05 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Craig's "Concrete/Shape" contest Nette. Love, Carol
Song Avatar
July 30, 2012 at 10:48 AM
Poetic music! Every line is laced with sound and emotion!
Song Avatar
July 30, 2012 at 10:42 AM
First let me fab this grandiose instrument!
A   Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 10:30 PM
NETTE. CONGRATULATIONS... WITH YOUR AWESOME WIN..XOXOXOX~PD
Merryman Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 5:39 PM
Very creative idea, Nette! Congrats on your well-deserved win! Love, Kim
Guzzi Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 3:32 PM
wonderful shape nette and you are so sympatico with sound! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 2:23 PM
Congrats, Nette, with this imaginative shape and write! Excellent!! Love and Blessings, Rhonda
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 1:11 PM
Congratulations nette great shape what a whizz you are xx
Kendrick Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 1:04 PM
Knew it would be a winner...Congrats..Sara
Muzzey Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 12:44 PM
Congratulations Nette, on your win with this wonderful and creative write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
Williams Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 12:13 PM
Nette, congrats on your very musical win..David
Neels Avatar
July 25, 2012 at 11:44 AM
Nette, I absolutely love this. You make it look so easy.. All the best for the contest!! Hope your week's been not too hectic ;-) *hugs* Wilma
Burch Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 11:40 PM
Brilliant!!!! :) love ya, deb
A   Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 8:09 PM
wow...Nette,,, now this picture kicks ~ butt... and you know it... good luck in the contest...xox~pd
Sivey Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 3:34 PM
I sing song from your glorious write, and the shape creates a way for this tune to be produced! This is a wonderfully grafted write working with musical notes from scores of pleasurable finds by your gracious hands! You sure can produce the greatest of songs my good friend! You will do well in the contest, I haven't seen such an awesome shape as this! Great Work!!
Poet Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 12:44 PM
So you forgot to enter it in the contest...isn't so?
Horsman Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 10:34 AM
wow nette this is so good, truly a poem of distinction, so unique, it jumps off the page at one, when reading. harry
Andresen Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 10:24 AM
You made my day special Nette, thank you!!! Lovely poem with music....love that violin, unique. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)
Anish Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 10:23 AM
What a clever "shape" poem! Good going! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Kendrick Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:40 AM
Great work ...Very creative with high hopes of being in the top of the winners' circle..Thanks for stopping by....Good to know that you were on stage at age 17...Sara
Austin Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:28 AM
Sounds like Ravel's Tzigane. Passionate with varied, deep meaning. This is what I get, nette. Love, daver
Hunter Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:26 AM
Oh, Nette! This may be the best concrete poem I've ever seen! You are an artist in so many ways...favorite list!!
Sweetheart Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:22 AM
this is terrific Nette luv.. wish I was artistically inclined to enter this contest but a, not.. best wishes as u made this one a note worthy contender for a top spot .. craig will be as impressed as I .. am doing pretty good now.. both head and hand seem to be much better after some gruelling tests yesterday.. oh.. my pets have been my blessing .. how r u?
Poet Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:03 AM
Check if you have entered it in the contest.No.of entries is 25 from today morning till now!
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