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inspired and written for dilly dallys rough contest, raw and unpolished.. just a simple scribble 

abandoned lover

sleep feels like an abandoned lover;
  heart weeps like a wilted flower..
wings of the sun, soaked with sapphire dust,
   rise and sparkle; like sea salt in the air,
twilight cascades upon my skin~
   wearing your perfumed memories,
I long to see your silken silhouette, 
swirling behind the thick veil of shimmering silence, 
but I do not know the lyrics,
to sing these thoughts in spellbinding melodies,
    so like always, I sit and scribble,
your name in rosy refrains and messy metaphors,
    too vague for those almond eyes..

perhaps, citrine stars would transcribe these emotions,
for I’ve long been writing in seclusion, 
   of the lotus moon in your midnight skies, 
   of the constellations of butterflies…

  Yet, I am the unvoiced verse, 
    nestled within the waltzing lines 
of timeless nostalgia~woven from flawless feathers… 
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Dietrich Avatar
November 2, 2024 at 12:48 AM
Here is another. I have over 21 favorites in the short time I have known you!
George Avatar
July 13, 2024 at 2:40 PM
Now I know why sleep torments and tortures me. So sad it was abandoned. Maybe I can rumble around the emotions. Talk heart to ears and she might listen. Great work done here Dear Ink. "Yet, I am the unvoiced verse, nestled within the waltzing lines." Profound. Congratulations on your well-deserved win Dear Ink.
Dietrich Avatar
July 11, 2024 at 9:13 AM
I love when you write this way, a little shorter and to me, it smoothly flows to the awesome conclusion of timeless nostalgia. A fave, and congrats on your win.
George Avatar
July 10, 2024 at 6:54 AM
Hearty Congratulations on your well deserved great win.
Wraith Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 6:21 PM
Congrats on the WIN my dear INK!! Such a lovely piece. Well done
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 11:23 PM
Thank you so much
Anaya Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 1:59 PM
"I sit and scribble, your name in rosy refrains and messy metaphors" how true and nothing less than filled with emotions and imagery! The most stunning line Empress, "sleep feels like an abandoned lover;" doesn't it? Truly amazing. Congratulations on your top win! xhugs ~Anaya
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 11:23 PM
Thank you sweet anaya, sleep does seem unavailable lately: appreciate your poetic presence and support always truly
Wraith Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 9:23 AM
Nothing “simple” about this scribble. What a beautifully crafted thought here!! “ perhaps, citrine stars would transcribe these emotions, for I’ve long been writing in seclusion, of the lotus moon in your midnight skies, of the constellations of butterflies…” Absolutely love this. Your voice is lost in the silence of solitude, yet your words echo profoundly in the chambers of this dark heart!!
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 9:43 AM
Thank you for your kind and generous feedback: grateful always for your enthusiastic support
George Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 12:18 AM
If this is just a scribble, I must think that your very thoughts are poetic that need no editing. I don't think I can ever write a poem of this sort even if I sit in seclusion and try for several hours or edit it over and over again. When sleep deserts one, it is so annoying. You can only woo your lover who has deserted you and hope he will soon come to pacify your anguished heart. A beautiful poem of longing and love. Please know even your scribble goes into my FAVE.
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 9:45 AM
Haha theres so much i want to change in this sweet valsa. I dont like using “ the” too much but i did here and just few things i would preter changing! You are so sweet and kind im grateful always for your soul warming support
Parker Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 4:48 PM
a simple scribble seems like it was a long lonely night of reflections that can stop any semblance of sleep...your word usage is impeccable as always
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:18 AM
Thank you dear frederick it means alot coming from you
Bell Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 2:32 PM
Just a simple scribble, like an abandoned lover. I'm thinking this nostalgic scribble might be onto a winner.
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:21 AM
Ah i hope so, just was inspired dear paul. Thank you so much for being supportive grateful always
One Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 1:46 PM
This is an unedited scribble? You mean this is normal writing and this is how your converse? You must have a poetic tongue even when talking full of metaphors.. So is sleep your lover that has abandoned you and now that narcissist insomnia has come to stay? I can feel the angst of longing in your words hoping your lover returns and then you can sleep and have sweet dreams... at the end of the day all we want is peace.. right? Best of luck in the contest..
Empress Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 2:40 PM
Nothing about me is normal, not my writing and not my existence hah! Thanks dear it is an unedited scribble one inspired by the opening lines that kept coming to me at 3 am, ah its again 3 am! and these are overly used words in my poems nothing innovative done here. So yes simple and raw just my ink spilling whatever youv gathered and said there in comment too. You got it right and peace is my middle name :)
Hind Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 9:51 AM
Beautiful writing, Ink- loved the opening line; it's hard to sleep with such thoughts in your head... hugs and light <3
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:21 AM
Awwn you are so kind thank you sweet paige! Grateful for your support
Onpaper Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 6:21 AM
sleep feels like an abandoned lover… mmm that opening line papi… soaked with sapphire dust, I love that line!!! FreKing dreamy n soooo enchanting!! sing these thoughts in spellbinding melodies, so like always, I sit and scribble,mmmm ur scribbles r always sooo magnificently magnetic… the lotus moon in your midnight skies, of the constellations of butterflies…damn !!! Ur short scribbles r pure magic
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:22 AM
Ah papi easier for u to read short scribbles haha
Chircop Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 4:46 AM
Oh my God..How many beautiful verses..Your poetry is like a vivid painting ..I love that lotus moon in a midnight sky.Fantastic poem.A favourite
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:24 AM
You are such a beautiful soul. I hope to see you around more often, we need such presence here. Sending you light and thank you
Rhymes Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 3:15 AM
This is pretty good for a simple scribble … I could relate to it
Empress Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 10:24 AM
Awwn thank you dahlin
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