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Abandon

Agonized by gloomy sky in rainbow archway you’ll find me Blown by desert wind, in mirage with despondent you I’ll be Ambling alone in beach you’ll see me in golden sand’s glow Network of my pearly lattice the waves will make to show Drifting in the river of despair, the anchorage out of view On murmuring ripples you’ll hear my heart’s music anew Never in these dire states of your life I’ll ever abandon you. _______________ February 23, 2023 Word, Form Chosen : Abandon, Acrostic Contest : A Forms And Words Challenge Sponsored by : Sotto Poet

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 3/4/2023 7:20:00 AM

Oh so very sweet Submial. A shining win! Congratulations! :)

Subimal Sinha-Roy
Date: 3/4/2023 9:03:00 PM

Thank you, Linda for your sweet comment.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/3/2023 8:26:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A lovely write/story. Have a wonderful day............

Subimal Sinha-Roy
Date: 3/4/2023 9:03:00 PM

Thank you,Paula.

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/2/2023 10:17:00 AM

Sublimal, outstanding work, and many compliments on your win in my Writing Challenge - A Words and Forms. Blessings.

Subimal Sinha-Roy
Date: 3/3/2023 1:37:00 AM

Thank you for the placement and for your encouraging comments.

John Arthur

Date: 2/23/2023 5:09:00 AM

Love your descriptive work within the confines of your chosen word, though the second line is a bit confusing though, 'Blown by desert wind with desolate you in mirage I'll be'- Perhaps rather, 'Blown by desert winds, desolate, within a mirage I'll be' or, 'Blown by desert winds, desolating you in a mirage I'll be' or maybe I'm looking too much into your word choice, lol, But otherwise very well written

Subimal Sinha-Roy
Date: 3/3/2023 1:35:00 AM

Thank you, John for your visit and for your constructive comments. The second line bothered me quite a lot. Your suggestion is very well taken. I have replaced 'desolate' and rearranged the words. I really appreciate your interest in the poem. Thanks, once again.