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A Woman’s Longing, by Suzette Richards – Image generated in the style of John William Waterhouse, 22/12/2024.


The design of the Archimedes’ Screw Verse

I am inviting you to name this newly invented poetic form in the comment section. Thanks 

NEW NAME: Phoenix sixain

  • It is a 6-line verse invented by Suzette Richards (2024).
  • Choose five consecutive lines from one of your older poems -- preferably verbatim.
  • Line 6: A word from each of these 5 lines, in sequence; therefore, a 5-word line.
  • Rhyme and metre are optional, and the syllable count per line is irrelevant.

[The 5-line verse is from my poem, Where do Birds Go when they Die? (2014)]


 

trailing her fingers through the crystal water momentarily leaving a disturbance soon to return to a calm mirror believing woman’s love to be brief driven mad by the longing and grief water momentarily return woman’s longing

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Date: 5/18/2025 8:40:00 AM
Breathtaking, every bit- you have to tell me if these paintings are yours! <3
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Suzette Richards
Date: 5/19/2025 10:44:00 AM
Image generated... Thanks for your commentary on my poetry, Paige. :)
Date: 1/28/2025 9:46:00 AM
The content of the poem :Realistically validated. Relation can be made. From a stirring memory created to the awakening back to reality. For self development:The example assists in understanding the type of poem. Thank you.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/28/2025 10:27:00 AM
It is a pleasure to welcome a new member poet from South Africa :)
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Date: 1/28/2025 10:25:00 AM
Thank you for reading. Your grasp of the content is an accurate synopsis.
Date: 1/16/2025 3:52:00 PM
Hmm, it's interesting enough. I did the 10 lines from 10 poems contest. I didn't make the cut, but I may try it this one, Suzette. I thought your example was steamy up until the last line, I just don't get it.
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Date: 1/18/2025 10:10:00 PM
:)
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Date: 1/18/2025 12:35:00 PM
It was Silent One's last contest. I shall
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/16/2025 10:37:00 PM
? I don't get what you don't get, Anaya. Did you read the recommended article? BTW I did not sponsor the 10 lines poetry contest and cannot comment on the results.
Date: 1/12/2025 9:18:00 AM
Love this example because it's on the lines of romance or valentine topic. Wonderful.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 1/12/2025 10:57:00 PM
It was Jacqualine's comment below that gave me the idea for the challenge. It is what I mean by 'a personal Valentine' - not the regular Valentines one find that are Hallmark ditties :) Thanks for the compliment.
Date: 12/27/2024 12:26:00 AM
This is so beautiful how youv written this and also the rhymes as well as the descriptive nature of your poem truly is fitting for the artwork too. Theres an evocative and soulfully moving touch about the way your lines flow using elements of nature to depict such deep emotions! Such a profound poem and your creation is creative: would love to oneday try dear Suzette! Youv done “showing” very well through your metaphors! Exquisite! Sending you light always, Pleasure reading this heartfelt gem
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Suzette Richards
Date: 12/27/2024 10:17:00 AM
Thanks, Ink, for your flattering critique.I think I will feature this form in the next challenge.
Date: 12/22/2024 7:14:00 AM
Excellent write! Unique and touching! Merry Christmas, Suzette!
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Date: 12/22/2024 8:16:00 AM
To you and yours as well, Kim :)
Date: 12/22/2024 3:47:00 AM
Love the concept and the poem, but think I'd blush profusely using the form name haha (I'm not sure whether that says good or bad things about me lol). Definitely love having the combo of giving an old poem a twist (ha! Blushing again!)
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Date: 12/22/2024 5:33:00 AM
Lol
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Suzette Richards
Date: 12/22/2024 5:30:00 AM
Blame the Science fb page for the name ... As school kids we had a ball with this name ... Hie hie hie The screw picks up the water (word) and deposits it higher up (6th line). Oh, dear. I think I must quit while I am ahead.
Date: 12/22/2024 12:56:00 AM
l absolutely love this. Its beautiful. Its full of visionary to me. Thank you for sharing this, l want to memorize it, it feels like a passionate poem to me, something l would whispher to my husband.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 12/22/2024 2:34:00 AM
Thank you for reading and your kind comments, Jacqueline

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