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Author's Notes: This particular write, entitled: "A Withered Rose" is a "Accentual Meter" type of poem. I originally wrote this poem on February 4, 2015. (I classified this poem in PoetrySoup under "Free Verse" since this type of accentual metered write is not normally listed under the PS classification pick-list.) This poem discusses a former love relationship that at one time was very romantic and passionate, but no longer is. It has become a relic of a person's love life past, i.e., a "Withered Rose Memory." (Gary Bateman -- April 30, 2015) (Accentual Meter)

Categories: allegory, image, inspiration, introspection, metaphor, self, and spiritual.

Accentual Meter Parameters (3 to 6 Syllables per verse)

Range: 5 x 3 = 15 (min) / 5 x 6 = 30 (max)

Total Syllables = 111 (Out of 156 Syllables maximum possible)

Total Words = 90

Total Verses = 28

("How Many Syllables Counter" was used for syllable confirmation for both automated and manual syllable counts and cross-check.)

A Withered Rose

Our love dear
is now but a
“Withered Rose.”

And I really
don’t know if
you care—I 
must suppose.

We once had a
most radiant love
full of wonder,
joy, beauty, passion.

And now it’s quite
hard to accept      
the reality
that all is ruined                       
and all is gone.

I sleep now dear
with utter despair
in a soulless torment 
that is unending
knowing our once
“Red-Rose Love”
is gone forever . . .

And in its place 
I have nothing
but an image of a
“Withered Rose Memory.” 

Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved
(April 30, 2015) (Accentual Meter)
                                                                                                                        
* This poem originally appeared in my new book 
with a release date of February 4, 2015

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Sharon Gulley

Date: 5/25/2015 3:25:00 PM

Another wonderful write and read as well. I enjoy your work Gary. I appreciate this one a lot and is one of my Favs. A 7 for me....Sharon G. :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 5/26/2015 4:07:00 AM

Thanks Again Sharon for the 7 + FAV!! Your are indeed most generous!! The "Accentual Meter" takes some discipline with the syllabication requirements and forces the poet to be succinct, but if one gets the word selection and imagery right -- Bingo!! -- the result can be quite telling. (John Drury's "Poetry Dictionary" is one of several available sources that clearly discusses and defines Accentual Meter writing. Poetry Soup doesn't get down far enough in the weeds to show examples of writes like this.) Try it out sometime!! I will continue to experiment with new forms when I can for my second book. Best Always, Gary

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 5/2/2015 10:00:00 PM

This is brilliant, Gary... a FAV <3 Love the accentual meter - it flows very smoothly throughout. "And I really don’t know if you care—I must suppose." Love that line!!! Love it all!! 7 as usual :) Always, Laura

Gary Bateman
Date: 5/3/2015 3:56:00 AM

Thanks Laura!! I'm very happy you liked this accentual meter write. I actually enjoy doing these types of writes very much. They can allow much versatility in approaching certain topics. Thanks too for the "7." Best Wishes . . . Gary

M. L. Kiser

Date: 5/1/2015 2:43:00 PM

Sad, but beautiful...truly wonderful to peruse.

Gary Bateman
Date: 5/1/2015 4:20:00 PM

ML, This one is a sad indeed, but the format was fun to put together. Best Wishes, Gary

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/1/2015 10:10:00 AM

Another great poem from your new book my friend. A7

Gary Bateman
Date: 5/1/2015 10:24:00 AM

Thanks Robert so much my very good friend. (I am planning next week to send to you (for your son) a paperback version of my book with my ink signature.) I will be able to get a decent paket rate with the German post to send it. I believe you told me that he likes my poetry. Anyway, a paperback will follow. Best!! Gary

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/1/2015 9:44:00 AM

The author uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. Nice flow of words attracting the reader with their simplicity of purpose, resulting in a pleasant sounding poem ending on a sorrowful note. Emile.

Gary Bateman
Date: 5/1/2015 10:27:00 AM

Hello Emile!! This author appreciates your read and comments here very much. I'm glad to be back now with everyone in Poetry Soup. I look forward to more of your great poetry!! Best Always, Gary

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/30/2015 2:38:00 PM

- This is deeply, speak louder than words - a poem that "stays in your thoughts" long after one has read it - Proficient and wonderful poem that touches my heart - thank my friend Gary - (T.R.) - (my haiku that I posted yesterday, is complete today :) - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 4/30/2015 6:25:00 PM

Thanks as always dear Anne-Lise for your thoughtful analysis of this particular accentual meter poem. (These do take some work to get the tension of the syllables aligned with the words of the verses to achieve the desired effect the author is looking.) I enjoy doing these writes, but the subject has to be right as well. I really enjoyed your Haiku from yesterday too. Have a great weekend. (Let me know when the books arrive.) Cheers Always, Gary

A Withered Rose

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