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A Wilting Flower

Quietly I sit and observe the profile of her expressionless young face. She looks so peaceful and serene, a flower in the full bloom of life. Her hair flows softly around her in its auburn beauty. Now I see her eyes flutter open, and observe how thick her long lashes are; how they pleasantly frame her light green eyes. Her flawless skin has a translucent quality to it, so silky and smooth. crimson rose in bloom seared petals bleed heavy tears down a stem of thorns A near drowning victim, she is getting restless, her breathing becomes labored. I hurry over and adjust the oxygen cannula in her nose and take her vital signs. Then I stroke her arm to comfort her as I raise the head of her bed and adjust her pillows. She seems to settle down with a heavy sigh. Are those tears around the corners of her blank, staring eyes? Tiny beads of sweat lightly dampen her forehead I prepare a cool, wet towel and place it over her brows. What a beautiful flower she is, how brief her bloom. Now her flower has been plucked too soon. She is wilting, her petals are fainting, falling... weeping flower bends colors weaken, fade away falling so softly October 28, 2020

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Date: 12/10/2020 12:28:00 PM
Yours is a beautiful offering, Laura, but so sad, touching. All lives are important, but when it concerns young ones it becomes more heartbreaking. Regards // paul
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Laura Leiser
Date: 12/10/2020 5:16:00 PM
Thank you for commenting, Paul. It is sad to see a young life suffer in this way...
Date: 12/8/2020 10:56:00 AM
Sad one. Enjoyed reading this very emotive and descriptive work. Sara
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Laura Leiser
Date: 12/8/2020 12:31:00 PM
Thank you, Sara. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It is sad, as it is based on in reality..
Date: 12/3/2020 12:24:00 PM
WoW! Laura, You have penned such a sad write that pulls at the heartstrings. It was hard to read. A young life laying their withering away. Excellent job- Alexis
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Laura Leiser
Date: 12/3/2020 1:03:00 PM
Thank you, Alexis. This really happened, too. I was a nurse for many years and took care of patients like her at times..it is heartbreaking, indeed...
Date: 11/22/2020 4:53:00 PM
Sighing...reminds me of this beautiful five year old laying in pink satin.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/22/2020 5:56:00 PM
It’s a sad thing to witness, isn’t it? Thanks for commenting, Kim. :)
Date: 11/15/2020 9:42:00 PM
Laura, You have a wonderful gift in this telling poem. Thank you for sharing it. -Richard
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/16/2020 7:42:00 AM
Thank you for your kind compliment, Richard. I truly appreciate it! :)
Date: 11/11/2020 1:05:00 AM
Beautifully observed, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/11/2020 6:32:00 PM
Thank you, Beth. :)
Date: 10/29/2020 2:39:00 PM
Such lovely penning Laura, though very sad and heart wrenching but brings home the importance of those in the medical profession as you no doubt was. Have a blessed day, Gordon
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Laura Leiser
Date: 10/29/2020 3:35:00 PM
Thanks so much for commenting, Gordon. I really appreciate you stopping by! :)
Date: 10/29/2020 8:59:00 AM
You really know how to do a great haibun.. The two haiku are brilliant and full of imagery... I like the analogy you have used here, one that many can relate to...
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Laura Leiser
Date: 10/29/2020 10:00:00 AM
It’s a common metaphor, but I couldn’t think of any other thing to represent this young girl’s life. First time trying the haibun form...so glad you liked it, Silent. :)
Date: 10/29/2020 4:54:00 AM
This is beautifully done... so sad and filled with sorrow which beckons to the heart of the reader. Such a fleeting glimpse into your amazing spirit. God bless you dear friend
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Laura Leiser
Date: 10/29/2020 7:54:00 AM
Thank you for the high compliment and comments, Regina. This scene and others are events the public eye rarely sees...it can be so heart wrenching to deal with...
Date: 10/28/2020 7:12:00 PM
Oh, Laura, your poignant pen spills sadness with such sensitive beauty. Your exceptional haiku add tender poetic imagery to an expressive and heartbreaking piece. Gorgeous and affecting poetry, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 10/28/2020 7:44:00 PM
While reading this emotive piece, I was wondering if you were a nurse.. your kindness and compassion radiates through your pen, my friend. A tragedy for this young girl for sure.. she was fortunate to have you with her at the end..
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Laura Leiser
Date: 10/28/2020 7:37:00 PM
I’m so glad you liked this, Susan! It is based on a true event from my years in nursing...I’ll never forget this innocent young girl injured in a tragic accident. It was sobering and heartbreaking.