Constance La France Poet Tanka

A Wilted Rose

I took the bus mom,
h o l d i n g  a bright rose for you;
clutched  TIGHT in my hand . . . 
    I  b r u s h  brittle leaves away,
       and lay down my  w i l t e d  ROSE.

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June 21, 2017


Poetry/Tanka/A Wilted Rose
Copyright Protected, ID 06-991-443
All Rights Reserved, 2017, Constance La France


Written for the Premier contest, Tanka
sponsor, Laura Loo, Judged 08/2017

Second Place 


Submitted to the Standard contest, A Strand (1047)
sponsor, Brian Strand, Judged 01/08/2022

First Place

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Christuraj Alex January 10, 2022 at 12:42 AM Great story in four lines. Great work. Congratulations! Constance La France January 10, 2022 at 1:17 PM Christuraj, thanks for the compliment and congratulations ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Karen Croft January 8, 2022 at 8:09 PM Congrats! A beautiful picture. Constance La France January 9, 2022 at 12:12 PM Karen, thanks for the congrats and compliment~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Paula Goldsmith January 8, 2022 at 11:11 AM Congratulations on your win. You told a wonderful story in just 5 lines. "Beautiful" Have a blessed day............ Constance La France January 9, 2022 at 12:13 PM Paula, thanks for the congratulations and compliment ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Connie Marcum Wong January 8, 2022 at 10:52 AM Your emotive poem shines in the spotlight Constance. Congratulations on your first placement! New year blessings xxoo Constance La France January 9, 2022 at 12:14 PM Connie, thank you for the compliment on my poem and the for the congratulations, blessing ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Susan Ashley July 16, 2017 at 9:57 PM I enjoyed reading your poem and I enjoyed again and again. Thank you for this gem. 4B

Teddy Kimathi July 8, 2017 at 5:27 AM Very emotional... Congrats BW, for your well-deserved second placement in the contest!! :-)

Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 4:18 PM Congratulations on your deserved podium finish, Constance! How sad the feelings run...but how beautiful!! ~ Regards // paul

Faye Gibson July 1, 2017 at 12:22 PM Beautiful, Constance; your emphasizing of words and thoughts made this poem dynamic. Congratulations!

Jeremy Smith July 1, 2017 at 11:15 AM Nice win :)

Janice Canerdy July 1, 2017 at 8:53 AM This is lovely, Constance--CONGRATS on your win! Janice

Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 8:45 AM Beautifully penned Constance, so sad it brought a lump to my throat:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues July 1, 2017 at 8:22 AM So much feeling in this brief poem. Tells a story. Kim Rodrigues July 1, 2017 at 8:25 AM Congrats on your second place win!

Beautiful Scars July 1, 2017 at 7:33 AM So beautiful and soothing and sad, which you know I adore. Thank you...

White Wolf June 21, 2017 at 2:46 PM Oh, I love this, Constance! Nicely done indeed! GL

James Inman June 21, 2017 at 10:27 AM A beautiful write BW. I find it interesting that you chose to use the word "lay" in your last line as opposed to "lie." It keeps with your poems theme but I think the wilted rose you speak of is you. I also enjoyed the layout to help the reader understand your intent for how the poem should be read.