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A Wilted Rose

I took the bus mom, h o l d i n g a bright rose for you; clutched TIGHT in my hand . . . I b r u s h brittle leaves away, and lay down my w i l t e d ROSE. __________________ June 21, 2017 Poetry/Tanka/A Wilted Rose Copyright Protected, ID 06-991-443 All Rights Reserved, 2017, Constance La France Written for the Premier contest, Tanka sponsor, Laura Loo, Judged 08/2017 Second Place Submitted to the Standard contest, A Strand (1047) sponsor, Brian Strand, Judged 01/08/2022 First Place

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 1/10/2022 12:42:00 AM

Great story in four lines. Great work. Congratulations!

Constance La France
Date: 1/10/2022 1:17:00 PM

Christuraj, thanks for the compliment and congratulations ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Karen Croft

Date: 1/8/2022 8:09:00 PM

Congrats! A beautiful picture.

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2022 12:12:00 PM

Karen, thanks for the congrats and compliment~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/8/2022 11:11:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. You told a wonderful story in just 5 lines. "Beautiful" Have a blessed day............

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2022 12:13:00 PM

Paula, thanks for the congratulations and compliment ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/8/2022 10:52:00 AM

Your emotive poem shines in the spotlight Constance. Congratulations on your first placement! New year blessings xxoo

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2022 12:14:00 PM

Connie, thank you for the compliment on my poem and the for the congratulations, blessing ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/16/2017 9:57:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your poem and I enjoyed again and again. Thank you for this gem. 4B

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/8/2017 5:27:00 AM

Very emotional... Congrats BW, for your well-deserved second placement in the contest!! :-)

Paul Callus

Date: 7/1/2017 4:18:00 PM

Congratulations on your deserved podium finish, Constance! How sad the feelings run...but how beautiful!! ~ Regards // paul

Faye Gibson

Date: 7/1/2017 12:22:00 PM

Beautiful, Constance; your emphasizing of words and thoughts made this poem dynamic. Congratulations!

Jeremy Smith

Date: 7/1/2017 11:15:00 AM

Nice win :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/1/2017 8:53:00 AM

This is lovely, Constance--CONGRATS on your win! Janice

Jan Allison

Date: 7/1/2017 8:45:00 AM

Beautifully penned Constance, so sad it brought a lump to my throat:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/1/2017 8:22:00 AM

So much feeling in this brief poem. Tells a story.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/1/2017 8:25:00 AM

Congrats on your second place win!

Lu Loo

Date: 7/1/2017 7:33:00 AM

So beautiful and soothing and sad, which you know I adore. Thank you...

White Wolf

Date: 6/21/2017 2:46:00 PM

Oh, I love this, Constance! Nicely done indeed! GL

James Inman

Date: 6/21/2017 10:27:00 AM

A beautiful write BW. I find it interesting that you chose to use the word "lay" in your last line as opposed to "lie." It keeps with your poems theme but I think the wilted rose you speak of is you. I also enjoyed the layout to help the reader understand your intent for how the poem should be read.