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A Wilted Rose

I took the bus mom,
h o l d i n g  a bright rose for you;
clutched  TIGHT in my hand . . . 
    I  b r u s h  brittle leaves away,
       and lay down my  w i l t e d  ROSE.

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June 21, 2017


Poetry/Tanka/A Wilted Rose
Copyright Protected, ID 06-991-443
All Rights Reserved, 2017, Constance La France


Written for the Premier contest, Tanka
sponsor, Laura Loo, Judged 08/2017

Second Place 


Submitted to the Standard contest, A Strand (1047)
sponsor, Brian Strand, Judged 01/08/2022

First Place

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Christuraj Alex Date: 1/10/2022 12:42:00 AM Great story in four lines. Great work. Congratulations! Login to Reply Constance La France Date: 1/10/2022 1:17:00 PM Christuraj, thanks for the compliment and congratulations ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Karen Croft Date: 1/8/2022 8:09:00 PM Congrats! A beautiful picture. Login to Reply Constance La France Date: 1/9/2022 12:12:00 PM Karen, thanks for the congrats and compliment~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Paula Goldsmith Date: 1/8/2022 11:11:00 AM Congratulations on your win. You told a wonderful story in just 5 lines. "Beautiful" Have a blessed day............ Login to Reply Constance La France Date: 1/9/2022 12:13:00 PM Paula, thanks for the congratulations and compliment ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/8/2022 10:52:00 AM Your emotive poem shines in the spotlight Constance. Congratulations on your first placement! New year blessings xxoo Login to Reply Constance La France Date: 1/9/2022 12:14:00 PM Connie, thank you for the compliment on my poem and the for the congratulations, blessing ~ friendship and poetry _Constance

Susan Ashley Date: 7/16/2017 9:57:00 PM I enjoyed reading your poem and I enjoyed again and again. Thank you for this gem. 4B Login to Reply

Teddy Kimathi Date: 7/8/2017 5:27:00 AM Very emotional... Congrats BW, for your well-deserved second placement in the contest!! :-) Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 7/1/2017 4:18:00 PM Congratulations on your deserved podium finish, Constance! How sad the feelings run...but how beautiful!! ~ Regards // paul Login to Reply

Faye Gibson Date: 7/1/2017 12:22:00 PM Beautiful, Constance; your emphasizing of words and thoughts made this poem dynamic. Congratulations! Login to Reply

Jeremy Smith Date: 7/1/2017 11:15:00 AM Nice win :) Login to Reply

Janice Canerdy Date: 7/1/2017 8:53:00 AM This is lovely, Constance--CONGRATS on your win! Janice Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 7/1/2017 8:45:00 AM Beautifully penned Constance, so sad it brought a lump to my throat:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 7/1/2017 8:22:00 AM So much feeling in this brief poem. Tells a story. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 7/1/2017 8:25:00 AM Congrats on your second place win!

Beautiful Scars Date: 7/1/2017 7:33:00 AM So beautiful and soothing and sad, which you know I adore. Thank you... Login to Reply

White Wolf Date: 6/21/2017 2:46:00 PM Oh, I love this, Constance! Nicely done indeed! GL Login to Reply

James Inman Date: 6/21/2017 10:27:00 AM A beautiful write BW. I find it interesting that you chose to use the word "lay" in your last line as opposed to "lie." It keeps with your poems theme but I think the wilted rose you speak of is you. I also enjoyed the layout to help the reader understand your intent for how the poem should be read. Login to Reply