A Weighty Problem

The little thrill as the wave’s ripple in
Making the hairs stand up, on the surface of my skin.
The kiss of the sun with its warm breath so light
As it soothes my skin with warmth and delight.
The sand rolls around where my hands touch it soft.
The water rolls back and forth carrying pebbles aloft.
Setting shells down with rolling grains of sand 
Making minute rivers run from the fingers of my hand.
The blue of the sky so pale and so pretty
On the horizon I can see the outline of the city.
Birds bob on by walking in the sand,
Not caring that I’m there lying on their land.
Curiously watching me, little eyes darting here and there
Watching for what, I don’t know or care.
A tiny emerald green beetle scuttles on past 
Taking no notice of me, but from the birds, rushes on fast.
The sun is setting; it’s time to go back
The tide has come in but it needs to get back
The coastguard come out and asks so polite
Please can you move, the tide needs to leave tonight.
You have laid there so long, blocking the way
Can you please go back - so the water can flow away?
The ships need to sail and the trawlers come in
But you are blocking the way as you are not that thin.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 3/17/2013 9:33:00 PM
My Dear Mandy, YOU grasp the readers attention on a must read basis then hit them in the funny Bone I Bow to YOUR Masterful Talent Into my Favs Superb PEN I LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Brother...Harry
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Date: 10/13/2012 2:55:00 PM
i think there will still be poems to read of yours , that as yet i have not seen, starting with this one, and true to form, it is a wonderful example, of Mandy Tams writing abilities,, it is an awesome poem, and yes the humour on the last line, is there too...
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Date: 2/3/2012 11:02:00 AM
hahahaha. THis is priceless, Mandy, THIS clinches it. I am making you one of my FAVE poets and this my first fave poem of yours!!
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 2/4/2012 2:36:00 AM
Thankyou and I feel very honoured by that xx
Date: 1/30/2012 3:58:00 PM
Great poem, Mandy :) Thank you for your sweet comment on my poetry, you are really good- i hope to read more <3 Love, J.
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 1/31/2012 1:12:00 AM
Thank you J, I appreciate it x
Date: 1/30/2012 11:09:00 AM
What a witty ending, Mandy! I loved the descriptions of the beah and never expected the coast guard to throw her out of the water so ships could come in. Awesome! Welcome back. Love, Carolyn
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 1/31/2012 1:14:00 AM
Thanks Carolyn I read once that a good poem as a twist at the end so I try to make mine fun x
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