A Walk In the Park

The sweat of the leaves cooled my palms,
When I plucked a red flower from the parks garden.
I placed it in velvet hair lifting from a soft breeze,
as we sat upon a hard metal bench.
A kiss, to join in comfort as two hands grasped tightly.

As people unnoticed passed by, our hands parted,
Releasing briefly to caress a tear away, on a glowing face.
Where eyes were filled by movement from an unborn child.


contest Sense of Touch
Frederic Parker
8/29/15

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 9/8/2015 9:10:00 AM
Frederic, Congrats on your sense of touch win. **SKAT**
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Date: 9/7/2015 9:08:00 PM
glad to see this one again. Congrats!
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Date: 9/6/2015 7:53:00 PM
Fabulous write, Frederic, congratulations on your win a 7! Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/6/2015 12:24:00 PM
such clear, descriptive grasp of the theme on touch, frederick!... thanks for joining my contest and here's a huge congrats from me!
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Date: 9/6/2015 7:56:00 AM
Wonderful Frederic! Unexpected ending that has graced its beauty, congrats on big win!
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Date: 9/2/2015 12:44:00 AM
oh wow, I think the ending is stunning! She wanted a wow ending and also, the whole piece is terrific, Frederic. I hope mine is ok not being a "walk" I had mine all transpire on the park bench. Love what you did here with yours.
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Date: 9/1/2015 12:26:00 AM
Wow, this is excellent, Frederic! Uses the sense of touch, imagery, and the wonderful twist of the "Movement from an unborn child". I would be shocked if this did not come out on top for the contest! Good luck and a 7 from me :)
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