A Tunnel Called Dusk

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I was reading the manga Dorohedoro at the time and was inspired by the designs of Q Hayashida, speicifcally her devils. And how they would look guiding a parade of floating souls and silhouettes into purgatory contrasted against a beautiful twilit sky. Would it be haunting? Probably, but also very pretty. Written in 2022.

fascinated by the things hovering in the punishing sky. both the wicked and winged, or the bare and featureless. pulled along in a conveyor belt parade, a silent march in the stratosphere. floating forward to the place called Limbo. jagged horns pop the clouds like balloons, withering skin grazes the twilight. the softest sky being cut into ribbons as if it was a present that was meant to be ripped open all along. those foggy phantoms following along. reaping the seeds they sowed when they were more than souls. what a wonderful gift it must be to hover over this hollow place.

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/17/2024 5:56:00 PM

Fascinating poem, Andrew. So many extraordinary images give us readers what to picture and think about. Thank you, Gershon

B. Andrew Kelly
Date: 1/17/2024 8:07:00 PM

thank you very much for the kind words Gershon!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 1/15/2024 4:51:00 PM

Andrew, your poem is a captivating journey through the atmospheric wonders of Limbo. The vivid imagery of wicked and winged entities, the twilight being cut like a present, and foggy phantoms creates a surreal and enchanting landscape. Your words draw the reader into the mysterious allure of this hollow place, making the experience both fascinating and evocative. - Blessings, Daniel

B. Andrew Kelly
Date: 1/16/2024 1:43:00 PM

thank you very much for your kind words, i am glad you enjoyed this poem. i hope you have a wonderful day - Andrew