A Triolet Tryst- a Collab With Paul Callus

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The sun slides down the crimson sky.
I watch the shadows on her face.
The sea is calm, the seagulls cry.
The sun slides down the crimson sky.
My hand is resting on her thigh
Below the silk and braided lace.
The sun slides down the crimson sky.
I watch the shadows on her face.
 
The evening star comes out to see
My love who tempts with warm caress.
The moon is chiding, "Let them be".  
The evening star comes out to see
The hands that bind eternity;
They stray beneath my flowing dress.
The evening star comes out to see
My love who tempts with warm caress.
 
There is no rush, the night is long.
We know that time is on our side.
An understanding to prolong.
There is no rush, the night is long.
Controlling feelings that are strong;
We know that they won’t be denied.
There is no rush, the night is long.
We know that time is on our side.

The tide of passion ebbs and flows
Like ocean swell, and then recedes.   
His ardour for fulfilment grows.
The tide of passion ebbs and flows.
For full release my body pleads.
He sends me high; he makes me glow. 
The tide of passion ebbs and flows
Like ocean swell, and then recedes.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 12/31/2015 3:26:00 PM
Wow wow wow absolutely wonderful. Such romantic flowing poetry to melt the heart!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/31/2015 3:28:00 PM
You're so kind, Arthur. Thanks for reading my works with Paul. I'm so touched. Happy New Year....
Date: 8/2/2015 7:38:00 AM
Lovely and passionate. Well constructed, too!
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Date: 6/11/2015 8:39:00 PM
You all had me watching shadows and riding waves . . . awesome, the Gentleman and the Lady! 7 of course
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Date: 6/5/2015 7:43:00 PM
This is excellent piece, you two work well together, it's a 7
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Date: 6/4/2015 9:43:00 AM
Freedom! You deserve it after all your hard work. So good to see you using your own name again, it puts a smile on my face.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/4/2015 10:56:00 PM
Thanks, Richard. Yes, in the end....I am who I am. Thanks for the visit. The defense went well. I've blogged about it. Hugs
Date: 6/4/2015 9:26:00 AM
A beautiful sensual collaboration, you two made it look so easy Eileen, really enjoyed this beauty today.. :)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/4/2015 10:57:00 PM
Thanks, Wilma. Sweet of you. Paul gave me some pointers. First time with the form. I do like it thought. I'll be round to see you. Hugs dear!!! :)
Date: 6/4/2015 5:11:00 AM
Eileen and Paul, triolet is one among my favorite forms of poetry but I am having a hard time doing it.. =') but I tried though I think three times........... Your collaboration is a beautiful tapestry of romance.. I love the repeating lines ... vivid imagery! superb in every way! ~olive eloisa =')
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/4/2015 10:59:00 PM
I can see why you like this form, Olive. It is a very lovely form. Thank you for your visit to this poem. I was delighted when Paul wrote and asked me to collab with me. He sent me the first verse, and I responded and back and forth it went. I enjoyed it. Thanks for the visit. Your avatar is sweet.
Date: 6/3/2015 6:06:00 PM
Smooth and passionate poem, my congratulations to both writers for making this flow like a dream. Take care, Richard
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/4/2015 10:59:00 PM
This is our third collaboration, Richard....all long this sort of theme. It's my favorite. Thank you for your visit.
Date: 6/3/2015 2:34:00 PM
Passionate collaboration.. Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by my blog..Karter is four now so they have anywhere from fourteen to twenty three years to go to get this little fellow grown..Sara
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Date: 6/2/2015 3:57:00 PM
Hi Eileen! Stopping by to say hello and to thank you for your willingness to co-write this romantic poem with me. Once again, it has been a pleasure to mix ink together. Hugs // paul
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Date: 6/2/2015 10:20:00 AM
Hot and lovely! An excellent collab, there's not a trace of hesitation in the flow. I love the use of the form for the theme. Just perfect! Congrats to two lovely poets!
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Date: 6/2/2015 8:18:00 AM
I came accross this one while catching up on Paul's writes. It was a pleasant surprise. You took too the form very nicely. Of course the passionate encounter was ooh la la hot!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/2/2015 8:48:00 AM
:) Thanks, Richard. I'm glad Triolets can also get an OOH la la from you! :) I enjoyed the challenge. Now I can add this form to my list. I don't really have time to just dive head on in yet. Soon...I will be a free woman! Hugs
Date: 6/1/2015 2:45:00 PM
This is beautiful you two....The triolet form goes with the theme that the night is long...it draws the poem out a little longer holding back the passion just enough.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/1/2015 3:12:00 PM
Holding passion back is a skill not many are adept at, Tim. :) I'm glad it worked out well in the poem. Thanks for the visit. Hugs
Date: 6/1/2015 1:58:00 PM
wow wow wow I have never seen a collaboration penned in triolet form - such beautiful sensual imagery - this is outstanding Paul and Eileen:-) hugs jan xx 7 xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2015 2:53:00 PM
of course I will:-) Hugs jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/1/2015 2:49:00 PM
You are so fortunate, Dear. He's always been a fav of mine...from the time he first joined. :) When you meet him again....give me a hug from me, will ya?
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Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2015 2:39:00 PM
Paul is the most lovely charming man you could wish to meet Eileen - I am looking forward to meeting up with him and his family later on in the year:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/1/2015 2:39:00 PM
OH, Andrea and Rob have done one. I saw theirs and though how interesting. We had already started working on ours, but theirs is nice too. You should give it a read. Hugs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/1/2015 2:37:00 PM
Thanks, Jan. We've done two other collabs....The other one was also by the sea....It involved horses! ;) I'm glad Paul asked me to collab with him in this form. I've never written one in this form before. :) He helped edit some bits. He's great. Thanks for the visit. Hugs
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