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A Triad of Haiku I

Last year's leaves long blown; Soon new leaves will fade and fall. Years fade...fall as leaves. -------------------------------------- A proposal made On Shiroyone's terraces; Rice is patient too. ------------------------------------- I awoke too late, You left before the dew came; The stars went with you.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/1/2025 2:06:00 PM

I like these. They remind me of some of those written in Japan that have been translated so I could read them. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

John Fleming
Date: 8/1/2025 2:35:00 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting, Sara. Glad you enjoyed them. A little harmless fun. :) john

Brenda Chiri

Date: 7/31/2025 7:49:00 AM

I must confess John I do not believe I’ve seen you write haiku’s before but no matter the form your writing is exceptional!;)

John Fleming
Date: 7/31/2025 8:11:00 AM

Thank you, Brenda Lee. If I was a betting man, I would strongly suspect, out of the three, the third one is probably your favourite. :) john

Ghairo Daniels

Date: 7/30/2025 10:40:00 PM

Beautiful depictions of natural life. Though the stars still shine on you. Blessings, John.

John Fleming
Date: 7/31/2025 3:17:00 AM

Thank you, Ghairo. Lovely remarks! Much appreciated. :) john

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/30/2025 2:30:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your creative/fun Haiku writes. All 3 are great but I like 3 the best. Have a lovely day writing away...............

John Fleming
Date: 7/31/2025 3:13:00 AM

I think I have to agree with you, Paula...I too find number three the most appealing. Many thanks! :) john

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/29/2025 7:38:00 PM

enjoyed your ku with their strong cuts...nice to kn9w you are around and still rockin' it good, john!

John Fleming
Date: 7/30/2025 8:10:00 AM

Thank you, Nette. I am very glad to see you are still here as well. As we all know...you are an absolute institution here on the great 'Soup'. My very best regards as ever. :) john

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 7/29/2025 4:22:00 PM

awww...the last verse was special to me with the first one being a close second. Nicely done, sir.

John Fleming
Date: 7/30/2025 8:07:00 AM

Thank you, Sara. Yes...it would seem, by popular vote, that the last is the most appealing. :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2025 11:57:00 AM

Nice! I especially liked the third one.

John Fleming
Date: 7/30/2025 8:03:00 AM

I preferred the first one myself when I first composed them...but I now think more like you, Andrea. :) john

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/29/2025 11:18:00 AM

- Three pearls... my favorite is the last one :) - hugs

John Fleming
Date: 7/30/2025 8:06:00 AM

Thanks, Anne-Lise. Like I mentioned to Kim...the first one is probably the best if you look at it from a structural point of view...but the third one is fast becoming my favourite. :) john

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/29/2025 9:45:00 AM

That first haiku is awesome!

John Fleming
Date: 7/29/2025 9:50:00 AM

Thank you, Kim. I have to confess...I think it is undoubtedly my best effort also. Probably ticks most of the boxes to very nearly qualify as a true haiku. Hopefully. :) john