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A Survivor's Guilt

My God!My God! Why have you forsaken us? Even now the whisper of wheels On the track Convulses me with tears. What more could I have done? Where did I fail? You, the least selfish of men, Dedicated to your students and staff, Devoted to your family, Committed the most selfish of acts. By locking us out, You locked us Into a cycle of torment and pain And we never saw it coming. Worries you brought home But you chose not to share them Shrugging off my pleas You did not want to worry me, So you said You dulled your tortured mind by Taking solitary refuge in the bottle And you began slipping away from me. I tried to batter the door down With angry words and tears As my frustration mounted Did the children notice our bitter rows? Was it then the seeds were sown? You fled to your mother's house For the balm of her love More forgiving than a wife's And there I hoped you would find The peace your troubled heart craved. With your mother you returned And she soothingly said, "It will take time." I saw a faint tear in her eyes Though her faith was strong. That night you said the sofa would be your bed "Give me time"were the last words I heard Strangely I slept soundly But when I awoke I crept downstairs To find you And the car gone. Frantically I phoned And your mobile rang From the depths of the sofa. Then I saw your letter On the cleared coffee table Stark and white. You begged our forgiveness. You said this would spare us pain And you bade me Look after the children. Stunned and silent Your mum and I sat In dread Time froze When the constables came With their carefully composed compassion We knew it was just beginning You had ripped away the veil of the temple And the tomb was empty. You had shorn your lambs Of their innocence And inserted a sliver of ice In their hearts Now I am faced With the curse of Greek tragedy Since I must spend my time Trying to melt that ice Before it hardens Irrevocably

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 2/6/2025 9:56:00 PM
Dear denis, this made me tear up, sigh, its a very difficult and painful experience for loved ones too as nothing sometimes can stop them when they just feel done, your way with words here is truly moving and made my heart feel so much, as i read this! Pleasure reading this poignant poem! Congratulations on your win. Sending you light always
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Denis Bruce
Date: 2/7/2025 10:47:00 AM
Dear Ink Empress, The Martian Emperor salutes your emotionality with regard to his poem and bows his knee to your sensitivity as one royal highness should to another of equal rank. My reason for that remark stems from the fact that I have adopted that particular title as part of my email address to give the impression that I am studying my fellow earthlings from afar. I am so honoured that my poem had such a powerful impact upon you. Thank you for sharing that moment with me, Denis
Date: 2/5/2025 11:48:00 AM
Dear Denis, your poem is a heartrending portrait of hopelessness and helplessness. In the end, one's act of suicide brings more despair to the survivors than can ever be imagined. A potent, poignant intimate piece well deserving of your win. Congratulations for your success in Tom's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Denis Bruce
Date: 2/7/2025 10:49:00 AM
And for being so perceptive about the content of the oem
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Denis Bruce
Date: 2/5/2025 3:50:00 PM
Thank you ,Susan ,for your gracious comments on my poem
Date: 2/4/2025 8:11:00 AM
This poem actually reminds me of my favorite movie, in which an alcoholic takes his life at the end. The girl he loves tries to save him but it just goes to show that you can't save someone who either doesn't want to be saved or wants to be saved but doesn't make the effort to save themselves. At the same time, I understood the girl's perspective of loving someone so hard you just can't let them go, no matter how angry or disappointed one is. This poem captured that feeling perfectly. Beautiful.
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Denis Bruce
Date: 2/4/2025 1:00:00 PM
Thank you,Hiba,for sharing this with me. It is so good of you to do so and to make me feel that my poem rang true
Date: 2/3/2025 12:07:00 PM
All I can say is wow. Such a heartbreaking poem Denis. An alcoholic who chooses to end life rather than get help, leaving a mess that can never really be cleaned up. Congrats on your placement
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Tom Woody
Date: 2/3/2025 1:21:00 PM
I actually wondered if there was some minor abuse plaguing his conscience
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Denis Bruce
Date: 2/3/2025 12:37:00 PM
Thank you,Tom, for your heartfelt words on my contribution. I have the feeling that his worries in his work situation drove him to drink to assuage his conscience from which he just could not escape
Date: 5/10/2014 4:46:00 AM
Immense piece here. Thank you for sharing this poem! I love that last stanza... very powerful piece and thought provoking indeed. Always, Laura
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Denis Bruce
Date: 5/10/2014 5:41:00 AM
It is so good of you,Laura,to take the time to read my poetry
Date: 5/5/2014 5:46:00 AM
so tragic and so lonely .. :( it pulled my heartstring... thought provoker.. :), thanks for sharing this with us.. :) GOD bless you and always... , olive eloisa wish for more happiness.. :)
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Denis Bruce
Date: 5/5/2014 2:33:00 PM
You have such a beautiful name and I appreciate your kind comments very much
Date: 1/1/2014 10:58:00 AM
So much pain and sadness, it is hard to talk about your pain, talking makes it more real, and after a bit you get so down you feel 'better the devil you know?' Helping each other is all you can do. Light & Love
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Denis Bruce
Date: 1/1/2014 11:12:00 AM
This poem,Debbie, is, as you can see, one of a trilogy exploring suicide and its impact.All three need to be read to immerse yourself in the whole sad experience. Thank you for your kind words
Date: 12/26/2013 7:22:00 AM
Not my son and no,he is no longer with his family.Sadly he has left his family bereft and bereaved
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Date: 12/26/2013 5:20:00 AM
A paternal wondrous lyrical poem. Yor son is ok right? U wrote dis in a touchin awesome way. Im a witness to how drinkin can make people commit d unthinkable. Ah. Ok mery xmas. Do review my latest poem too.
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Date: 12/24/2013 4:57:00 AM
- A very well written poem, Denis ! - Happy Christmas - Have a great time with family and good friends! - Santa Claus huggs from // Anne-Lise :)
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Denis Bruce
Date: 12/25/2013 8:44:00 AM
Thank you,Anne Lise.Wishing you all the joy and warmth of the season
Date: 12/24/2013 4:43:00 AM
Denis, --Dropping by with SMILES and CHRISTMAS CHEERS. Thank You for making this a great year for ALL OF US. --- May magic fill your days and all your dreams come true this holiday season. MERRY CHRISTMAS <3 Love Linda -The Sweetest Poet Destroyer
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Denis Bruce
Date: 12/25/2013 8:45:00 AM
Let me reciprocate and wish you all the best and lots of love for the coming year

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