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A Summer Sunset On a Beach

Oh, to watch the sunset, sitting with my guy, seeing the persimmon of a summer sky. Like apricot jam, it’s slathered out and glowing - glowing like the smile, which on my face is growing. Clouds as plush as pillows cavort, then fade away. Sea gulls call out cow-cow-cow at the end of day. Upon the beach we hear the rising of the tide. I cuddle even closer to my sweetheart’s side. He puts an arm around me as the cool breeze plays with the palm which underneath we’re sitting as it sways. Sun’s become a rose in bloom, sinking into sea. Eventide unfurls around us, so enchanting me. Slight wisps of twilight clouds will also soon be gone. Still I wish this loveliness would go on and on. Sun will be replaced by moon and shine for us no more after sunset’s final light has drenched this splendid shore.
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Ashley Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 11:04 AM
Dear Andrea, a beautiful romance unfurls in lush verse across the poetic page. A summer sunset, a splendid shore and a serene love enchanted. Congratulations for your excellent win in Ink Empress's contest. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Narain Avatar
December 8, 2023 at 8:41 AM
Beautiful poem. Congrats on win.
George Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 10:54 PM
This is breathtakingly beautiful. Love the seascape you have described. I am sure it was heaven watching the sunset and the night sky sitting by the side of your beloved. Congratulations on your win, dear Andrea.
One Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 4:22 AM
Lovely poem for this contest.. Congratulations on your placement..
Empress Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 1:40 AM
Dear Andrea wow looks like I’ve read this before, i have such bad memory, but well this poem, left me in awe for the imagery and the romantic energy thats flows throughout. I especially loved “ seeing the persimmon of a summer sky. Like apricot jam, it’s slathered out and glowing - glowing like the smile, which on my face is growing“ wow!!! That is breathtaking! And so artistic. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Thank you for entering my contest
Dietrich Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 1:15 PM
So glad you liked this. Thanks.
Volumes Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 12:51 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win in Empress's contest. Best wishes. Wen
Miller Avatar
September 27, 2023 at 7:43 AM
Beautiful, and so romantic; congratulations
Kingston Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 6:13 PM
I think your words, "splendid, enchanting and twilight," give your poem a fuzzy, twinkly, cuddly feel. My favorite line is, "Like apricot jam, it's slathered out and glowing" I used to live 5 minutes from the Atlantic Ocean beach in Ct. and I miss it so. Your poem makes me reminisce tonight. I wish to write as you do someday Andrea.
Downing  Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 8:13 PM
So beautiful and romantic, Andrea. Made me smile for you. :)
Empress Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 8:12 PM
“Suns become a rose in bloom” that line. Ahhh this is so gorgeous. Im sure a top winner. Loved the passionate imagery and ambience created so creatively
Hawley Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 6:40 PM
I love going to the beach to watch the sunset, and on Lake Michigan that is epic. On the flip side I've seen it rise on Lake Huron! And seeing the sunset while snuggling with your hubby, how awesome! Good job.
Lindley Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 6:14 PM
My good friend, this is a very fine romantic new creation. Your descriptive powers are very strong. A fav for this gem. God bless you.
Poet Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 5:00 PM
This poem is abundant with imaginative and enchanting descriptions, skillfully rhyming to portray the beautiful romance between two individuals, Andrea. The imagery is stunning, allowing the reader to effortlessly envision the breathtaking scene.
Situation Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 3:02 PM
POW! A masterpiece!!!! You must have been working on this. It's perfect. It's a fav.
Dietrich Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 3:14 PM
thanks so much!!
One Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 12:04 PM
Always nice to see your romantic side Andrea... this poems has such lovely romantic imagery of two people in love..
Dietrich Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 3:14 PM
Romance is probably my best "go to." thanks.
Bowring Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 11:19 AM
Absolutely terrific Andrea. Such gorgeous imagery. So beautifully depicted that you make it so easy to picture that gorgeous scene. Love the romance too. The poem flows so well with perfect rhyming.’Sun will be replaced by moon and shine for us no more/ after sunset’s final light has drenched this splendid shore’. Love it! Thank you for sharing. :):)
Dietrich Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 3:15 PM
thanks. It was fun to write.
Narain Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 11:09 AM
Beautiful poem. Splendid beauty of sunset described.
Dietrich Avatar
September 11, 2023 at 3:15 PM
Thank you, Jay
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