Andrea Dietrich Poet Monorhyme

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My last poem used the same end rhyme more than once, which I did not realize was disallowed, so I made a few changes to those lines!

For Hilo Poet's Complete Singular Monorhyme - Rhyming End Word Cannot Be Repeated - Revise If Necessary Poetry Contest

A Strange Phenomenon - Revised to fit rule

A tickling in the nose that likes to tease
is the strange phenomenon - the sneeze,
but sneezes in succession cause unease,
especially accompanying a wheeze.
Think of an ACHOO while on a trapeze,
reaching for two arms - hanging by your knees!

A sneeze has force of 80 miles an hour. Geez!
What viruses escape into the breeze?
So if one day a winter's cold should seize
possession of the chest 'neath your chemise -
when I visit, keep a hanky handy, please.
At least "God bless you" beats cutting the cheese!

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Line Gauthier December 18, 2025 at 5:25 AM Well done, Andrea ~ charming

Sara Kendrick December 15, 2025 at 1:29 PM Congrats on your work placing in this contest. Way to go. Sara K

Christine Watts December 13, 2025 at 1:18 PM Hi Andrea Ha ha this made me laugh. Well done and good use of the monorhymes Congrats in making the finals Cheers Chris

Speaks Volumes December 12, 2025 at 3:39 AM 80 miles an hour .. WOW ! Loved it Andrea. You used the rhyme wonderfully in context not just throwing words in because they rhymed, and it made me smile. All the components of a great poem. GL my friend. Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2025 at 9:09 AM Thanks so much. Yes I was surprised to discover the force if a sneeze!

sara Etgen-Baker December 10, 2025 at 5:25 PM funny monorhyme, especially at least "God bless you" beats cutting the cheese! Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2025 at 9:10 AM And to think that change came by having to eliminated my two extra sneeze words and then repost this

David Crandall December 10, 2025 at 3:32 PM Haha, great monorhyme exposition of the sneeze! Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2025 at 9:10 AM Thanks

Jay Narain December 10, 2025 at 10:42 AM Lol. Sneeze in winter is bothersome.

Ann Peck December 10, 2025 at 8:32 AM Wow! I didn't know a sneeze was so very powerful! What a cleaver and informative poem! Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2025 at 9:10 AM Thanks, Ann

Frederic Parker December 10, 2025 at 5:21 AM I agree with Kim, a poem that makes me smile!

Kim Rodrigues December 10, 2025 at 5:10 AM I love the rapid fire! God bless you! Made me smile. Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2025 at 9:11 AM Thanks

Karen Jones December 10, 2025 at 2:05 AM Wow! You are a poetry machine! There’s nothing you can’t write! Good job! Best wishes! Karen Jones December 10, 2025 at 2:06 AM Did you check soupmail?

Victor Buhagiar December 10, 2025 at 1:46 AM Great revision, Andrea. Best for a win.

Paige Hind December 9, 2025 at 6:26 PM HA!! I like your revision btw!! Paige Hind December 9, 2025 at 9:13 PM Hey Andrea. In regards to your comment on The Ocean Ghosts, I thought about leaving the soup, so I erased most poetry- but then, I couldn't go through with it- because I felt lost and unhappy and alone without this site- I am sorry if it hurt you to delete them. Thanks for all your support. <3