Kelly Deschler Poet Sonnet

A Stone In the Cold - 5 Runner Up

The hunter hunted; the past comes stalking,
breath now visible, I quicken my pace,
dusk has fallen, nature is now talking,
autumn's chill causes my heart to race.

My eyes scan dense forest from left to right,
I stop, gain my footing in the thicket,
only branch and crimson leaves in my sight,
owls call out, and prey upon the cricket.

Voices seem to speak from the babbling brook,
cold stones, worn smooth, waters of countless days,
eyes are everywhere, yet nowhere I look,
something is near, I cannot get away.

Struggling, my arrow kept at the ready,
my once stealthy hand, is now unsteady.





This was my original entry for Debbie Guzzi's contest - "A Crown of Sonnets"

(This is also the first sonnet that I had ever written.)

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Debbie Guzzi February 28, 2015 at 8:40 AM Now Kelly - you are so skilled in end rhyme & your meter is better than average too, you need to explore more forms- you have done quatrain to death ;) move on and explore all the different sonnet forms- a sonnet is merely 3 quatrains & a couplet- you are really capable of doing Pantoum as well since they are merely quatrains with repeating lines- BIG hugs -GROW! Light & Love Kelly Deschler March 3, 2015 at 12:11 AM I truly appreciate your advice, Debbie. I do want to grow and learn new forms. I just wish that I had more time to do so... Big hugs :)

Andrea Dietrich April 2, 2014 at 11:04 PM It's hard to find poems of yours to comment to but I notice that I never congratulated you on this win. I finally read what you said to me about this being your first sonnet when I was at this poem a long time ago. Good on you, Kelly Kelly Deschler April 3, 2014 at 6:33 PM Thank you for stopping by to comment on this poem, once again, Andrea. I will be posting two new poems tomorrow! :)

Dr.Ram Mehta March 15, 2014 at 2:08 AM Congratulations on the fine with beautiful sonnet, kelly Kelly Deschler March 17, 2014 at 4:47 PM Thank you very much for your kind comments, Dr. Ram!

Skat A March 15, 2014 at 1:12 AM Hi Kelly, , Congratulations, on your Hunt for a Sonnet Gem. Awesomely done. ~SKAT~ Kelly Deschler March 17, 2014 at 4:46 PM Hi SKAT. Thank you so much! Your comments really meant a lot to me! :)

Roger Horsch February 27, 2014 at 7:47 AM Congrats Kelly, A wonderful poem...Hugs....Roger Kelly Deschler February 28, 2014 at 7:03 PM Thank you very much, Roger! I do appreciate you taking the time to stop by and read my poem. Glad you enjoyed it! :)

Joyce Johnson February 26, 2014 at 12:39 AM You did a magnificent job. congratulations. Kelly Deschler February 28, 2014 at 6:51 PM Thank you so much, Joyce! ! I do appreciate you taking the time to stop by and read my poem. Glad you enjoyed it! :)

Dr.Ram Mehta February 25, 2014 at 4:58 AM Congrats on the fine win. enjoyed the fine metrical composition,kelly Kelly Deschler February 28, 2014 at 6:14 PM Thank you so much, Dr. Ram! I am happy that you enjoyed this one. :)

Skat A February 25, 2014 at 4:03 AM Hi, Kelly , congratulations on your wonderful win - SKAT Kelly Deschler February 27, 2014 at 7:57 PM Hi, SKAT! Thank you very much for stopping by to read my poem. I do appreciate it! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen February 25, 2014 at 3:00 AM - Contest judged: 2/24/2014 - Impress me - V (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio A.V. - Congratulations on your winning poem - Pleased to read your poem, Kelly. - nice to join :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Kelly Deschler February 27, 2014 at 7:43 PM Thank you very much, Anne-Lise! I appreciate you stopping by to read my poem. Glad you enjoyed it! :)

Andrea Dietrich February 8, 2014 at 8:55 PM wow, it was your FIRST?? I am very impressed by how close your meter is to iambic. It's a great sonnet, and I think if you had put the climax for the story in this sonnet, it could have been a winner. You were still leading up to the climax and sonnet six needed to be resolving it. Other than that, this is awesome!! Kelly Deschler February 10, 2014 at 4:17 PM Thank you so much for the wonderful comments, Andrea! Yes, this was my first attempt at writing a sonnet. If you look through my poems, you will not find another sonnet! I think if we were given more time to write for the contest, I would have changed my poem, to fit the storyline a little better. But, I understand why my sonnet was not chosen for the crown, and I'm okay with it! Debbie mentioned that 6 other poets were writing there first sonnets for this contest, as well.

Sara Kendrick February 4, 2014 at 4:33 PM Enjoyed reading your sonnet for Debbie's contest..I like the way that you went with it.Great one for your first..Sara Kelly Deschler February 5, 2014 at 9:38 PM Thank you very much for the kind words, Sara! I am so glad that you enjoyed it. That really means a lot to me!