Jan Allison Poet Pantoum

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A Stable Friendship

Whilst I stand munching oats and fresh hay 
Kitty visits, she’s my special friend 
If she proffers a mouse I’ll say neigh 
as a mouser kitty’s a godsend!

Kitty visits, she’s my special friend 
I look forward to see her each day 
As a mouser kitty’s a godsend 
I enjoy watching my friend at play        

I look forward to see her each day
on my company she can depend 
I enjoy watching my friend at play        
Kitty chases mice right to the end 

On my company she can depend 
If she proffers a mouse I’ll say neigh 
Kitty chases mice right to the end 
whilst I stand munching oats and fresh hay 

Pantoum Rhyme - Personification Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Eve Roper

Checked with how many syllables - 9 per line, and rhymezone

Image 2 used

04/19/20

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Mike Gentile May 10, 2020 at 6:35 AM Congratulations Jan On your number 1 placement.' I really enjoyed you take on the Kitty gif especially the " if she proffers a mouse" line. I'd say neigh too! Happy Sunday xxoo Jan Allison May 10, 2020 at 12:18 PM Thanks Mike, that line was my first thought so i based the poem around it, couldn't resist a sprinkling of humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 9, 2020 at 10:20 PM Congratulations on your win, Jan , in the pantoum rhyme and personification contest. Great theme on the horses thought. I enjoyed reading. Hugs Eve Jan Allison May 10, 2020 at 5:46 AM thanks for my first place Eve I'm delighted you liked my poem I love writing this form which you introduced me to with your contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 9, 2020 at 9:55 PM you chose a sweet picture and wrote so sweetly on it, Jan. Congrats, my friend Jan Allison May 10, 2020 at 5:45 AM Thanks Andrea I love writing this form:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt May 9, 2020 at 5:51 PM Great to see your pantoum voted as #1, my friend. Your poetry really charms. Hugs ~ John Jan Allison May 9, 2020 at 5:59 PM Thanks so much John I'm delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Sarah Portrey April 26, 2020 at 8:07 PM Very clever Jan Allison April 26, 2020 at 8:14 PM Thanks Sarah, its a challenging form but I really enjoy writing it:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt April 23, 2020 at 10:39 AM Jan, such a lovely personification pantoum of the cute GIF. Love the title and the line "If she proffers a mouse I’ll say neigh". Your poetry always brings a smile ~ John Jan Allison April 26, 2020 at 8:13 PM Thanks John that was my starting point and I built the poem around it:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus April 21, 2020 at 4:35 PM This is a truly good entry, Jan, and I adore the title, too! Hugs // paul Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 5:57 PM thanks Paul I do enjoy writing this form and couldn't resist the title:-) hugs Jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos April 21, 2020 at 12:46 PM Jan this is excellent - good luck in the contest - love your poem. Blessings Jennifer. Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 1:14 PM Thanks Jennifer I do enjoy the challenge of this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Quoth Theraven April 21, 2020 at 12:07 AM Jan, Wonderful whiskers in this Pantoum. Oh to be a stable boy sitting in the corner taking it all in from a milking chair. -Richard Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:39 AM You have a wonderful way of creating a great image with your comments, thanks Richard:-) hugs Jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell April 20, 2020 at 3:13 PM Such a lovely piece Jan, love the video too really goes with the piece. Sorry to hear about your losses, may you know God's peace at this time, BLessings, Gordon Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:38 AM Thanks Gordon, been a better week so far except a care home is over run with the virus and 5 residents have died, its a tragedy on such a massive scale. we now have our own 'captain tom' at mum's care home since yesterday he has raised £10,000!:-) hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy April 20, 2020 at 9:19 AM Jan, this pantoum is excellent in every respect--skillfully-written and so appealing! Janice Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:37 AM I do enjoy the challenge of this form Janice:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian April 20, 2020 at 6:26 AM Oh Jan...what a sweet poem this is... I especially like your...I'll say neigh...clever one that! Thanks for your visit to my poem. Hope all is going well with you. We have adopted a stray cat, so this poem is especially meaningful to me. I hope she's a horrible mouser! ;) Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:36 AM I started with the neigh line:-) we have mice around at the moment, the neighbors have seen rats, probably because of lack of refuse collection for garden rubbish as our amenity sites are closed and people are fly tipping:-( hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie April 19, 2020 at 7:42 PM Hello Jan … it's good to read a heart warming verse in this time of safety first. Animals and Birds calm our souls - stay safe Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:34 AM Son asked me if we could get a cat but as I have an allergy to animal fur we can't... and they are such a tie too:-)thanks for dropping by Lindsay:-) hugs Jan xx

Tania Kitchin April 19, 2020 at 5:28 PM A sweet poem you wrote Jan, best of luck in the contest! hugs Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:33 AM thanks Tania:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May April 19, 2020 at 3:39 PM A wonderful write to this adorable photo Jan, Beat wishes.. Jan Allison April 21, 2020 at 4:32 AM It was a fun challenge:-) thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer April 19, 2020 at 3:27 PM that image is so tender and sweet and you've written a perfect accompaniment to it, jan! best of luck in the contest. ~ hope you're feeling better... Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 3:29 PM thanks Ilene I was under the weather and have had a lot of bad news this week which has taken it's toll:-( hope you and the family are all ok:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner April 19, 2020 at 3:24 PM That is my favorite picture on the contest - you have told an adorable story in an adorable way, this gives me warm and fuzzy feelings :) Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 3:29 PM aww thanks Michelle, its the only one of the three that 'spoke' to me and I wrote the neigh line but its taken over a week to finish it:-) I do love the pantoum form:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf April 19, 2020 at 2:43 PM SO CREATIVE AND CUTE! This one really takes the cake--and the oats and the hay, of course! Love it! ~ Yay! (Not Neigh!) Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 2:54 PM Thanks so much GW, the line about neigh was my initial thought so i built the poem around that:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham April 19, 2020 at 2:27 PM Nice to see you back Jan, sorry to hear of your losses, Well written pantoum( not my favourite form) Love the vid too. Good luck. Tom Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 2:31 PM I love the form its just taken me a week to finish it:-) been a tough week in many ways especially with being under the weather myself but I am fine now:-) take care and thanks for the wonderful pics:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta April 19, 2020 at 1:14 PM Wow! It took you a long time to find that video, but well done indeed! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 2:00 PM aww thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx Rico Leffanta April 19, 2020 at 1:32 PM We missed you - every day! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison April 19, 2020 at 1:31 PM Thanks Rico, it was one Eve provided to get our muse working but its taken over A week to finish it , I've been under the weather and sadly had a lot of bereavements this week -2 family and 3 friends but none to the virus. am hoping my muse will now come back:-) hugs Jan xx