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A Song To a Paradise ( Thought Loss )

To love’s adamantine, Please make particles of rain, Please grace your scene, With a garden so green, On the earth a bit shy, For the mind's so dry, Love please fall from the sky, Water your garden veggie, before they die! Today at two, tomorrow at noon, Just let it be soon, Your life is not the loom, Nor the power of soon, But may love’s command, Very well stand, Within the man, As love can! Will love’s paradise, Became a sacrifice, Or become an earthly vice, Will it suffices, From the highest, Succumb to the lowest, As love’s wind blowiest, The shifts away, As many play, As life ebbs away! The head, Has bled, For the body instead, Death has been fed, For bodies that fled, An eye for an eye, A tooth for a tooth, Just the mind’s goof, For love was cut loose, From death’s booth! As love will tell, All is well, For I am the swell, That built a well, I am the disperse, Of love’s reverse, Carnal mind is the curse, Of death’s disperse, Man’s very worse, Became man’s curse! My perfection in the man, Will very well stand, As the land, Is wet I stand, Love very well can, Be a man, As love in whom I command, In even forsaken land! Love like a hard clod, To whom normal toes give a nod, Love in the sod, Of God! Adamantine, So keen, I mean, To the heart, Love’s start! A paradise loss, To a winter frost, Only to a mind, up tight, With fright, In a winter’s night! Let us fly paradise, Kite!!! 7-1-09 johnmosesfreeman@yahoo.com

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Date: 6/3/2012 10:11:00 AM
Congrats on feature...Patrick
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Date: 8/22/2009 5:37:00 AM
Lines 6,7, and 8 very impressive. Keep writing. Sara
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Date: 7/21/2009 12:32:00 PM
Okay, in my well traveled 29 years, I have listened to the Morman missionaries, Jehovahs' witness, Dated, almost wed into a devout Catholic family, Friends that study Buddhism, and the Koran... My point is that you sound like one of gods holy crusaders on a mission to inspire... Poetry Soup is lucky you joined friend......:JP)
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Date: 7/9/2009 5:48:00 PM
great write! this is a very moving piece and very well written can't wait to read more... keep writing because it will take you far and beyond! Ciara =)
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Date: 7/6/2009 12:14:00 AM
thanks for your kind comments, a poweful wirte here I look forward to reading more of your work, God bless you from diane
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Date: 7/2/2009 9:17:00 AM
Look at me I wrote "thew!" LOL..and I almost never can remember how to spell succomb...even to tell you it took me 3 or 4 tries with babylon's spell checker. HUGS
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Date: 7/1/2009 4:01:00 PM
Thanks for thew new word! adamantine! sparkling like a diamond! Did you mean-succumb / when you wrote Sub come ?Light & Love
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