Gregory Richard Barden Poet Rhyme

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* This is a variation of a story I started in a previous poem ... I may turn it into a novella eventually, (as I'm doing with "The Ruby Spires"). *

A Snowy Evening Walk

While frozen teardrops seep
    And prick my face as the winter clouds weep
        They flutter, soft and white
            And on my tracks, alight ...
                To shroud me in the night
                    My will set firm to the promise I keep.

For days now, I've set pace
    On and on, while the bitter tempests race
        But now the winds have died
            So I increase my stride ...
                And pray the snow will hide
                    The remnants of my prints from those who chase.

Their plane crashed in the storm
    I found them, five survivors keeping warm
        I meant to lend a hand ...
            But drugs, you understand
                Their cargo contraband ...
                    And now they fear of who I might inform.

They've hunted me so long
    But vows made to my family keep me strong
        And these woods are my own
            I'm not in this alone ...
                The love that I have known
                    Will lead me safely home ... where I belong.




* SECOND PLACE in the "Rhyme Me A Poem" Poetry Contest, Broken Wings, Sponsor. Rhyme scheme AABBBA, etc, syllables 6-10-6-6-6-10. Syllables checked at "How Many Syllables" dot com. *

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian January 22, 2018 at 10:03 PM Greg...captivating ..."will the snow hide the remnants? "... I'm intrigued! I'm going to show my ignorance as a new writer by saying whatever a novellai is...go for it!! Cont. what you've started and contact me when it's finished.Congrats! bbn Gregory Richard Barden January 23, 2018 at 12:22 AM Oh, that's so sweet, Barbara, I'm so pleased you liked it! If this morphs into anything else, I will most certainly let you know ... blessings and many kind thanks to you, my friend! :-) <3

Judith S January 14, 2018 at 7:45 PM Back with Congrats Greg!!! Gregory Richard Barden January 16, 2018 at 1:49 AM Thank you so much, Judy - blessings to you, friend! :-) <3

Richard Lamoureux January 12, 2018 at 8:18 AM One of my favorites so far. Congrats. Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2018 at 6:56 PM Thanks so much, Richard ... I greatly appreciate it! :-)

Constance La France January 12, 2018 at 7:55 AM Greg, congratulations on your win in my contest. I so enjoyed your write I wanted more, and more. Well done ! And I like your image too! Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2018 at 6:58 PM Thanks so much, Constance - it is a rather unfinished story ... I may make something larger out of it - a short story or novella. I realize it was quite different from the usual fare, and I thank you for giving it a bit of visibility! :-) <3

Beautiful Scars January 12, 2018 at 5:29 AM beautiful rhythm and rhyme dear Gregory congrats :)-luloo Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2018 at 7:00 PM Thank you, Dear Luloo - you are always kind to me, my friend! :-) <3

Line Gauthier January 11, 2018 at 10:53 PM Back to congratulate you, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden January 11, 2018 at 11:10 PM Thank you very much, Line ... you're very good to me, friend. <3

Eve Roper January 11, 2018 at 9:58 PM Congratulations on your awesome win, Gregory, so very beautiful.. Hugs Eve ~`* Gregory Richard Barden January 11, 2018 at 10:35 PM Thank you very much, Eve ... I went in a different direction with this one, and I'm pleased you liked it! :-) <3

Geoffrey Brewer January 10, 2018 at 9:21 PM What a delight to read a poem that has form, rhyme, meter, as well as beautiful descriptive phrases (as do most or all of your poems).This is so much better than many poems of others in this medium that are heaped with praise but have none of these qualities. Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:35 PM Thank you SO very much, Geoffrey, that means a great deal to me ... I strive to keep improving, and to contain those elements in most of what I write, but I'm not always sure that I'm succeeding. It's very kind of you to say so, and to say so with such conviction ... your comment here made my day - seriously. Thank you VERY much, my friend - blessings! :-)

Andrea Dietrich January 10, 2018 at 5:46 PM wow, Gregory, how impressive, the way it turned into this story (and you want to make it a novel?) I think it would be quite exciting. I just love how you took this challenge!! Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:32 PM I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Andrea ... thank you so much! I've been contemplating a book of fiction for a while now, but honestly find the idea a bit overwhelming. I hope to be motivated enough one of these days, lol ... possibly science fiction, I'm not sure.

Beautiful Scars January 9, 2018 at 8:31 AM great rhythm and rhyme sweet poet, loved this one so will BW I just know it! good luck :) -luloo Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:30 PM That's very sweet and optimistic of you, Luloo - thank you very much! I hope you're right, though I'm very happy and blessed with the comments ... that makes it worthwhile enough! :-) <3

Line Gauthier January 8, 2018 at 9:03 PM A thriller! Well written, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:28 PM Thank you very much, Line! :-) <3

Jean Murray January 8, 2018 at 12:15 PM I love a good suspense Greg. Well done. Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:28 PM Many kind thanks to you, Jean! :-) <3

Frederic Parker January 8, 2018 at 9:42 AM novel concept, or a hint of truth, either way well done...good luck Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:28 PM Very kind of you, Frederic - thanks so much!

Judith S January 8, 2018 at 8:48 AM You've crafted a riveting story within the confines of this contest structure Greg!!! As always, a pleasure to read! Certainly a winner!! Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:26 PM I'm pleased you enjoyed it, Judy, thank you very much, Friend! :-) <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart January 8, 2018 at 7:56 AM Was not expecting that! Great original penning! I started thinking "...and miles to go before I sleep" My best to you my friend xomo! Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:26 PM Thanks so much, Maureen - I'm pleased you liked it! (Though I'm no Robert Frost!) ;-) <3

Heidi Sands January 8, 2018 at 5:39 AM Wow, an interesting and nicely written poem! :) Gregory Richard Barden January 10, 2018 at 9:25 PM Thank you very much, Heidi! :-)