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Suddenly, my world was a silent dark void of nothingness, and I wandered aimlessly lost and frightened; then, through the silence came the beating of a drum, so, I followed the sound into the corridors of my mind; that labyrinth and saw my life story play out. Soon, I was running the twisted passages weeping, and there was silence again, and I was in a misty place of stone; for a moment, the mist lifted and I saw my name deep engraved. I screamed and screamed and began to run lost, my hair full of shadows and then the beating drum began . . . A man with piercing blue eyes, blue like the sea was talking; 'do not be afraid, my dear, open your eyes and I did- She opened her eyes and I smiled with relief; I'd lost too many patients already that day, 'not another, Lord, please' no, this young one would live; she is strong and had left the shadow world with it's torturous labyrinth; the beating of Death's drum wasn't as powerful as her will to live . . . Again, I recalled my own brush with oblivion, said the surgeon with the piercing blue eyes, blue like the sea; and a doctor had told me, to open my eyes- ____________________________ July 27, 2017 Verse/A Silent Dark Void Copyright Protected, ID 923901 A Collaboration by Broken Wings and Jack Horne Not For Contest

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Date: 7/29/2017 11:18:00 AM
bw I too....have had consequences much like you....death recently wanted me....but the many Prayers from family and friends would not let it be....and honestly I would have been content either way....but it seems God Has Important Work for me to fulfill one day....great work bw....;)
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Date: 7/28/2017 11:04:00 AM
thanks for writing this with me, my friend - had great fun working on it x
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Date: 7/30/2017 10:09:00 AM
And thank you Jack, we made a great team and I love our creation, I would do a collab with you any time, just let me know dear friend
Date: 7/27/2017 9:39:00 PM
A deep and emotive collab my friends...very well crafted...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 7/27/2017 8:12:00 PM
Love the imagery and the deep emotion in your write, Broken Wings & Jack, nicely done. ~*
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Date: 7/27/2017 6:02:00 PM
You have written a stunning and fabulous write the both of you! What a grandiose poem, I loved reading it this evening! I most enjoyed this cleverly rendered piece, it made me feel the dismay and fear of the narrator! Great Work!!
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Date: 7/27/2017 5:50:00 PM
Your poetry is so real, BW. I so enjoyed reading this.
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