A Sense of Emptiness

A SENSE OF EMPTINESS 

		Empty I feel inside,
		No emotions left within since you died,
		A black blankness that drains
		a hollow heart remains.
		Shackled to chasmic chains,
		Leftover is a shallow shadow, wide..

	A null void consumes me, 
	Sensations have been sucked out, all thoughts flee,
	Nothing lingers behind,
	Not a word in my mind.
	Stark vacuum I find,
	A zilch devoid of tender tendency..

		A vacancy that tugs
		these numb heartstrings, as unfeeling soul chugs.
		This life slowly goes on,
		But you are dead and gone.
		Alone and woebegone, 
		I struggle with silent shivers and shrugs..

	In this vague state, I choke,
	Ah! To join you! I await death's one stroke!
	To you, my dry tears plead,
	In grave's abyss, I bleed,
	You're free. I'm not yet freed.
	Nothingness envelopes me like a cloak.


01.09.18


Contest: Rhyme me a poem 
Sponsor: Broken Wings 

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Thomas Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 5:43 PM
I wanted to read this again. So very beautiful Jo. You will host some very creative contests some day ;)
Thomas Avatar
February 14, 2018 at 9:02 PM
Outstanding Jo! It grabs the heart and flows beautifully.
Barden Avatar
January 19, 2018 at 11:52 PM
Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, Jo - blessings and keep up the wonderful work! :-)
Salehi Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 5:18 PM
Sad indeed... well penned.
Lamoureux Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 3:08 PM
I enjoyed reading this winning piece again Jo.
S     Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 12:00 PM
Coming back to wish you congrats on your win in Skat's contest Jo!! Well deserved. ~Judy
Hamilton Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 9:44 AM
Congrats Jo on an awesome win, loved this sad poem even better second read!
Dietrich Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 12:12 AM
wow, what an emotive and powerful portrayal of that emptiness that can consume someone who has lost a loved one. So good, Jo. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Gauthier Avatar
January 17, 2018 at 8:23 PM
Congrats on your win, Jo. Beautifully done.
Roper Avatar
January 17, 2018 at 7:41 PM
Jo, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
Pandit Avatar
January 17, 2018 at 4:09 PM
Returning with congrats Jo...well deserved!
Haight Avatar
January 17, 2018 at 3:49 PM
Jo, congratulations on your well-deserved 3rd Place podium win for your beautiful, but sad poem! Huges, Sandra
A  Avatar
January 17, 2018 at 3:44 PM
Nice one Jo Daniel, thank you for entering my recent contest. Congratulations on your Awesome win. <3 SKAT
S     Avatar
January 14, 2018 at 8:16 PM
Wow Jo! This is very emotional! So very sad :) Congratulations on your win with the amazing poem!!! ~Judy
Lamoureux Avatar
January 12, 2018 at 8:27 AM
Congrats, this is an emotional write.
La France Avatar
January 12, 2018 at 8:13 AM
Jo, congratulations on your win in my contest. Deep and dark and beautifully penned just the way I like it. Well done !
May Avatar
January 12, 2018 at 6:21 AM
Fine write and win Jo...Congrats
Scars Avatar
January 12, 2018 at 5:44 AM
wow great poem sweet Jo! congrats :)-luloo
Gauthier Avatar
January 11, 2018 at 11:15 PM
Very powerful write, Jo. Congrats on your win.,
Roper Avatar
January 11, 2018 at 10:56 PM
Congratulations on your win, Jo, so very sad , but beautiful.. Hugs Eve ~`*
Lamoureux Avatar
January 11, 2018 at 8:14 AM
A truly impressive piece, one of the best I have read for the contest.
Downing  Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 8:02 PM
So sad my heart is moved. Beautifully written, Jo, and good luck in the contest! Hugs and smiles :)
Dietrich Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 3:18 PM
Broken Wing's contest is inspiring some really lovely poems like this one. Well done, Jo, and beautifully sad.
A   Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 12:44 PM
Jo, this is a very deep write, I do wish you the best of luck. LINDA
Michelle Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 12:30 PM
So dark and sad, I feel this. Good luck in the contest. Love, Juli-Michelle
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