A Sense of Emptiness

A SENSE OF EMPTINESS 

		Empty I feel inside,
		No emotions left within since you died,
		A black blankness that drains
		a hollow heart remains.
		Shackled to chasmic chains,
		Leftover is a shallow shadow, wide..

	A null void consumes me, 
	Sensations have been sucked out, all thoughts flee,
	Nothing lingers behind,
	Not a word in my mind.
	Stark vacuum I find,
	A zilch devoid of tender tendency..

		A vacancy that tugs
		these numb heartstrings, as unfeeling soul chugs.
		This life slowly goes on,
		But you are dead and gone.
		Alone and woebegone, 
		I struggle with silent shivers and shrugs..

	In this vague state, I choke,
	Ah! To join you! I await death's one stroke!
	To you, my dry tears plead,
	In grave's abyss, I bleed,
	You're free. I'm not yet freed.
	Nothingness envelopes me like a cloak.


01.09.18


Contest: Rhyme me a poem 
Sponsor: Broken Wings 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 3/5/2018 5:43:00 PM
I wanted to read this again. So very beautiful Jo. You will host some very creative contests some day ;)
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Date: 2/14/2018 9:02:00 PM
Outstanding Jo! It grabs the heart and flows beautifully.
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Date: 1/19/2018 11:52:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, Jo - blessings and keep up the wonderful work! :-)
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Date: 1/18/2018 5:18:00 PM
Sad indeed... well penned.
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Date: 1/18/2018 3:08:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this winning piece again Jo.
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Date: 1/18/2018 12:00:00 PM
Coming back to wish you congrats on your win in Skat's contest Jo!! Well deserved. ~Judy
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Date: 1/18/2018 9:44:00 AM
Congrats Jo on an awesome win, loved this sad poem even better second read!
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Date: 1/18/2018 12:12:00 AM
wow, what an emotive and powerful portrayal of that emptiness that can consume someone who has lost a loved one. So good, Jo. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 1/17/2018 8:23:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jo. Beautifully done.
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Date: 1/17/2018 7:41:00 PM
Jo, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 1/17/2018 4:09:00 PM
Returning with congrats Jo...well deserved!
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Date: 1/17/2018 3:49:00 PM
Jo, congratulations on your well-deserved 3rd Place podium win for your beautiful, but sad poem! Huges, Sandra
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Date: 1/17/2018 3:44:00 PM
Nice one Jo Daniel, thank you for entering my recent contest. Congratulations on your Awesome win. <3 SKAT
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Date: 1/14/2018 8:16:00 PM
Wow Jo! This is very emotional! So very sad :) Congratulations on your win with the amazing poem!!! ~Judy
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:27:00 AM
Congrats, this is an emotional write.
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:13:00 AM
Jo, congratulations on your win in my contest. Deep and dark and beautifully penned just the way I like it. Well done !
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Date: 1/12/2018 6:21:00 AM
Fine write and win Jo...Congrats
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Date: 1/12/2018 5:44:00 AM
wow great poem sweet Jo! congrats :)-luloo
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Date: 1/11/2018 11:15:00 PM
Very powerful write, Jo. Congrats on your win.,
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Date: 1/11/2018 10:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Jo, so very sad , but beautiful.. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 1/11/2018 8:14:00 AM
A truly impressive piece, one of the best I have read for the contest.
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Date: 1/9/2018 8:02:00 PM
So sad my heart is moved. Beautifully written, Jo, and good luck in the contest! Hugs and smiles :)
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Date: 1/9/2018 3:18:00 PM
Broken Wing's contest is inspiring some really lovely poems like this one. Well done, Jo, and beautifully sad.
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Date: 1/9/2018 12:44:00 PM
Jo, this is a very deep write, I do wish you the best of luck. LINDA
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Date: 1/9/2018 12:30:00 PM
So dark and sad, I feel this. Good luck in the contest. Love, Juli-Michelle
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