A Sense of Being

You smell the fishy atmosphere 
As a distant pounding draws you near.
You lick the salt from your hand.
Your feet find coolness in wet sand.

A delicious aroma hangs in the air.
The buzzing of bees tells you beware.
The sweetness of fruit picked from the vine
And the the prick of a finger, not by design.

Sweet sweat and powder rise to your nose.
You hear a giggle as you tickle little toes.
A milk-laced kiss lingers on your lip
While all softness and warmth rests on your hip.

The smell of clean sheets and soap all around.
Your synchronized breathing is the only sound.
Enjoy the taste of his lips as he kisses you goodnight 
And the touch of a loved one holding you tight.

Just a day in the life of one who is blind
And a look into an insightful mind.


Janece Terry
November 20, 2019

A poem written for a smell, sound, taste and touch challenge.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 3/22/2020 3:14:00 PM
Awesome write, Jan. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. ~Mark
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Date: 12/21/2019 10:39:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Jan
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Date: 12/21/2019 7:31:00 PM
Congratulations Jan for your honorable mention place in the smell sound taste touch contest. I loved your use of senses in this poem, they were really some of the best seen but the putting it all together needs work, but I enjoy it as it is. Thanks for entering.
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Jan Terry
Date: 3/8/2021 7:16:00 AM
If you're interested, I've added the tie in stanza to the end of the poem. I left it off previously due to the constraints of the contest. Please see my poem 'Twenty Lines' for my tongue-in-cheek frustration with 'tight' poetry contest rules. LOL.
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Date: 12/21/2019 8:55:00 PM
Thank you. I tried to describe how a blind person might 'see' things with their other senses. Maybe I needed a stanza to unify everything.
Date: 11/21/2019 5:01:00 PM
LOVE IT! Very well done and love the story of family and seasons all roles up into one. It was delightful! :-D
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Date: 11/21/2019 2:35:00 PM
You did this very well Jan..
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Date: 11/21/2019 12:02:00 AM
Hi Jan wonderful poem. Best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing
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