Alexis Y. Poet Rhyme

A Sad Sunset

You were my sunrise and sunset,
     I was so happy that we had met.

I loved the way you paid attention to me,
you made me feel loved, like a rare beauty 

     But somehow the tide changed,
we went from lovers to being estranged. 

         I went from being enough,
          to a place of not enough?

     When was it that you fell out of love?
You were my precious gift from up above.

      I wanted to know your new lady?
       Because you were acting shady.

I’ll eventually be ok with you not loving me anymore,
I need to know the reason you walked out of the door.

I wasn't prepared for your sobering explanation,
when you told me why you left I wanted it to be
my imagination.

You left because you didn't want me to watch you
dwindle away,
but I wanted you back no matter how dark the day.

It’s been two years now it was a sad sunset,
  and I’m forever grateful that we met.



2-21-18
Alexis Y 

* Fiction

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CayCay Godwin March 20, 2018 at 9:16 PM Wow, Alexis, does this ever have a punch! I'm hoping it is a fictional punch because it is emotionally laden with piercing sad feel. The poem tears at the reader who is at first of average break-up emotion, then whap, is slapped with sorrow. A terrific write, Alexis. Please don't be true, if so, I know you'll only grow your spirit towards more light, but it takes time. All the best ... CayCay CayCay Godwin March 20, 2018 at 9:17 PM now I see the footnote: fiction. phew.

Gary Bateman March 9, 2018 at 7:19 AM Hello Alexis, A very sad rhyme full of emotion and contemplative reflection on an intimate relationship between two people. You really enliven the reader's interest here in the innate preciousness that two people develop and meld into over time. This makes it all the more for tragic when the people eventually drift apart. Excellent Work!! A FAVE!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Freddie Robinson Jr. March 1, 2018 at 8:23 PM Very sad and profound truth expressed in the truly GREAT poem of self-awareness, Alexis. A fave to read again and again. It speaks to the heart of things that need to be spoken on. Excellent poetry, Love always.

Jan Allison February 23, 2018 at 11:50 AM Such sadness in your lines and a scene many can relate too, so glad it's fiction:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen February 22, 2018 at 11:49 AM - When we are in love, everything seems perfect - the years pass ... and the sunset is coming ... the sad sunset :( - Very well written, Alexis :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Heidi Sands February 21, 2018 at 11:09 AM Well written Alexis. This really reaches the reader :)

Tom Cunningham February 21, 2018 at 10:35 AM A sad story that I think we all can relate to at some point in our lives . You done this very well Alexis. Tom

Silent One February 21, 2018 at 10:14 AM Very deep and emotive write, it is important thought not to let the sun go down on us...

Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2018 at 8:57 AM I think it’s important to find closure. I’m glad in this case the poem is fiction. I’m sure you drew on some personal experience. I think for most people we can relate to this heartache in one way or another.

Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 8:43 AM You wrote this story of heartbreak with rhythmic discourse. As your ending suggests, love so powerful.. willing to ignore the glitches in life. It sounds so real, glad you said it is fiction. Well done, Alexis.