A Sad Man

He is a sad man, badly flawed, but hardworking
He believes he is beyond reproach, just like many proud men do 
That face does not crack a smile; a sign of 'weakness' it is to him
His poor children starve for the affection of a busy and distant Father
But by now, they've learned to keep warm hugs only for Mother

With the mindset that he was the spindle of his fine home and firm
Delegation of tasks came easy, and was delivered with shouts and expleties 
Like a dark cloud he'd hover over his staff as they worked
And with no qualms, he'd claim credit for successes
And no one would stand up to him; no one ever dared

Most important in his life was work; he had no genuine friend
His warped mind assured him that no one was his equal in anyway
At home, he planned the weekly meals and dictated where they'd shop
And when a drink at dinner was accidentally spilled
Unforgiveness ruled the home for days 

Toys seized as punishment were never to be seen again
Whether a favorite doll or game, it mattered not; sobs wouldn't break his heart
Clueless was he that in the hours he was away 
His submissive family and servants come alive
And during times when he was at home, it had the feel of a tomb

One Friday night he delayed the staff by working extra late
Then when he called down for his car only to find the driver asleep
His rage overtook his senses and he threw the driver out!
In that instant he sat in the driver's seat hurling insults out loud 
In blinding rain, and fuming with anger, he took the exit ramp at high speed

He never saw the old, blown-out tire coming at him just ahead 
Fate that night made a devastating decision... it was taking back control
In his bedroom today, he lies motionles and sadly, visitors never sit for very long 
Though unable to speak, he's gracious to see, the frolicking birds through his tears 
At times he stares at the lonely hour glass upon the shelf below the window sill
~*~ 

2/20/13
For Jeremy's "Objectify Me Free Verse" Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 3/16/2013 12:39:00 PM
ANNALISE, this is a nice winning poem. CONGRATULATIONS!!! ;-) always~ PD
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Date: 3/15/2013 8:47:00 PM
a sad but well told story Annalise...congrats on your win
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Date: 3/15/2013 4:51:00 PM
You are a splendid storyteller poet, congratulations! -jeremy
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Date: 3/15/2013 2:59:00 PM
Wow, Annalise, powerful sad tale about justice coming about for bad attitudes, very creative use of the words. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/15/2013 2:06:00 PM
What a dramatic tale you have spun here. I so disliked this character then felt a tinge of pitty for his ending days, watching an hour glass with no friends. Excellent story telling !! Enjoyed the read !! Congrats on making the winners list !!
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Date: 3/15/2013 6:58:00 AM
Annalise congratulation on your win. I enjoyed your entry very much. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 3/13/2013 11:00:00 PM
Fantastic piece you have here, I am blown away by the very close attention to detail. I could really see the cold-heartedness of this man, supporting his family, yet destroying any real love or affection between them. And then came the last stanza that was just so overwhelmingly sad. Hope you do well on the contest!
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Date: 2/26/2013 1:48:00 AM
This poem is so sad.
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Date: 2/23/2013 12:30:00 PM
clever write here, my friend - a winner for sure
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Date: 2/21/2013 8:05:00 PM
VERY NICE POEM..OK ANNALISE SAW MY NAME ON FIFTH POSITION IN NETTE'S CONTEST..THNKS FOR TELLING ME..NEED YOUR COMMENTS ON MY POEMS..THANKS..
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Date: 2/21/2013 11:29:00 AM
So sad story in this very beautiful poem of yours my dear friend Annelise. I pity him. Perhaps he got many hurts in the past. i extremely enjoyed this outstanding write of yours tonight my dear friend. Thank you so much for sharing! Good luck and best wishes in the contest. love and big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 2/21/2013 7:09:00 AM
What a dynamic narration! Thought I was driving. Excellent writing! Hope you do well with the contest. I will do my part. Note on your comment made: My forefathers were philosophers, who knows if some DNA is still lingering.
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Date: 2/20/2013 6:44:00 PM
I love this story, Annelise.........it almost reads like a Twilight Zone episode, with such imagination and clever use of those three objects! I am stumped......but you have done a fantastic piece!!
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Date: 2/20/2013 1:38:00 PM
I like the direction you took with this one. A great piece of story telling. You may want to check the instructions for the contest, I started off writing mine in prose as well and then rewrote in verse. if you have a chance you can read both of the ones I wrote. I do however think this is an excellent poem.
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Date: 2/20/2013 10:10:00 AM
wow, this is powerful Poetry, Annalise, enjoyed
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Date: 2/20/2013 3:23:00 AM
Poor man, I feel for him. - I will give him a big hug. - A very sad but well written poem Annalise. - Have a nice day! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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