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June-6- 2025
Choose a Line Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Joseph May
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"The clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire". After many cold winters, they met again, Under the poplar tree on a starry moonlit night. Though they had planned it over many a time, It came to fruition after such long lapse of years. Once they loved as no lovers could ever love. In devotion, never they faltered, never once failed, But fate was sadly against this star-crossed pair, And the young lovers had to part ways in pain. Once again, the old classmates met at the rendezvous, Exactly the same place under the same tree. Though years have wrinkled its aged bark Still, it bears the indelible mark of a heart pierced by an arrow. To its cover they have been drawn once more Not to renew their bond or weave fresh dreams, But just to see and feel once and never more, For a fleeting second to be in love’s prison bound. Silence lingered and from sepulchered past, dead worlds awoke. The celestial bodies above stood in breathless anticipation. And "the clouds parted like the pursed lips of desire". They knew, separation had only accentuated their love. Once more they put their arms around. For the last time they looked at each other, With eyes blurred and moistened with tears, And billows of emotion rising sky high. Fearing they would lose their composure, Abruptly they turned their wan faces And without another word of goodbye, They walked away into the stillness of the night!

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Date: 6/8/2025 9:15:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful yet sad write/story again. Have a blessed day with your win.............
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Date: 6/8/2025 6:02:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your contest win with this nicely penned poem.
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Date: 6/7/2025 9:44:00 PM
Nice rendation of the theme. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/7/2025 6:43:00 PM
Congrats on your win Valsa, Very nicely penned
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Date: 6/7/2025 8:26:00 PM
Thank you Joseph for the high placement given for my poem. Feel quite delighted.
Date: 6/6/2025 12:45:00 PM
Dear Valsa, Your portrayal of love's resilience and the joy of reuniting after eons apart moved me strongly with your tenderness. Your words swirl on the wind, such as a full moon on weathered bark, a place where affection's imprint remains long after the sun has set. That is delightful!
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Date: 6/6/2025 11:31:00 AM
WOW!!! What a powerful and sad write/story you have here. Somethings are Not to be. "Good Luck" I also did this contest. Have a blessed day writing away.........
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Date: 6/6/2025 11:29:00 AM
It is like a true love story. The love is timeless and lives in hearts. Nice heartfelt sad poem.
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Date: 6/6/2025 6:09:00 AM
Dear Valsa, your touched me deeply with so much tenderness in the way you capture love’s endurance and the reunion after years apart. I could feel the weight of memory in every line, the bittersweet beauty of two souls meeting beneath that old poplar. Your words linger like moonlight on aged bark where love, even when parted, leaves an indelible mark. So lovely! Spring Blessings, My Dear Valsa, Daniel
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Date: 6/6/2025 3:28:00 AM
That’s so sad, yet lovely Valsa. Near or apart love never dies… Beryl
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