A Rattling Rhyme

Nervous Hands

	Did you know nervous hands can cause problems?
	Let me tell you, folks, I know they can!
	Hear my tale of a fidgety woman
	and her equally jittery man.

	At a conference, they became restless
	as the speaker just droned on and on.	
	Though they tried to give him their attention,
	they just couldn’t. Each stifled a yawn.

        He began to drum HARD on the table
	with his fingernails—thumpity-thump.
	The presenter and others shot daggers
	with their eyes at this troublesome chump.

	Then he popped EVERY one of his knuckles,
	dropped his papers all over the floor,
        rattled change in his pockets—jing-jingle.
	Sitting by them, I silently swore.

	She was busy with her own distractions,
	searching noisily through her huge purse
	for her Bic, which she clicked with great fervor.
	Could things possibly get any worse?

	Yes! She rattled a hard-candy wrapper
	in each hand on and on with true verve.
	Then she “combed” her long hair with her fingers.
	These two trounced on my very last nerve!

	You must wonder why nobody told them,
	“You can leave, or we’ll toss you head first.”
	You just can’t eject business owners
	even when they’re the absolute worst!

written in anapestic meter
							    
July 30, 2018, entered in Nina Parmenter's A Rattling Rhyme Contest

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Date: 8/31/2018 11:12:00 AM
Wonderful and beautiful piece,Janice..You are a dexterous writer..This shows class..Congrats on your well deserved win in this contest..Keep flying great poet..
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/31/2018 12:49:00 PM
Olusegun, your kind words have made my day! Janice
Date: 8/30/2018 1:36:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Ohh pure torture. Enjoyed.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/30/2018 2:17:00 PM
Thanks so much, Susan! Janice
Date: 8/29/2018 6:38:00 AM
Been there, suffered that, brought back memories. Congrats, Janice, well rattled! Viv x
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/29/2018 9:05:00 AM
Thanks so much, Viv! Janice
Date: 8/28/2018 7:15:00 PM
Superbly composed Janice. It is deserving of its high placement! Congratulations! : )
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/28/2018 8:18:00 PM
Thanks so much, Connie! Janice
Date: 8/28/2018 5:26:00 PM
Such fun, imaginative verse, Janice. Congrats on your win in the contest. Best wishes, Gershon
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/28/2018 7:07:00 PM
Thank you so much, Gershon! Janice
Date: 8/26/2018 5:38:00 AM
I enjoyed this, Janice - I love how you ended it and all the imagery leading up to the conclusion. GOOD job and best of luck in contest and all else. All the best ... CayCay
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/26/2018 7:31:00 AM
Reading this comment has been a wonderful way to start my day. Thank you so much, CayCay! Janice
Date: 8/12/2018 5:22:00 PM
Really enjoyed this, so refreshing to see a poem about the workplace for once, good luck in the contest!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/12/2018 7:05:00 PM
Thanks so much, Michelle! Janice
Date: 7/31/2018 7:19:00 AM
No you can't just eject business owners, but you can accidentally spill your glass of water on their lap...lol Love this, Janice...best wishes in the contest...Charlie
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 7/31/2018 9:47:00 AM
Hey, there's a thought!! Thanks so much, Charles. Janice
Date: 7/30/2018 3:17:00 PM
Another one of your talented writes, Janice..entertaining rhymes that keep going.. in words people can relate to..that's what makes a poem special.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 7/30/2018 5:49:00 PM
Vijay, your comment has made my day! Thanks so much! Janice
Date: 7/30/2018 2:39:00 PM
Patience is so important in these matters...and they do expect it...All the best Janice
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 7/30/2018 2:44:00 PM
Thanks, Arturo. Janice
Date: 7/30/2018 12:58:00 PM
So much fun, Janice! I could really see it, well done xxoo
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 7/30/2018 1:50:00 PM
Thanks so much, Mike! These people are composites of people I've actually encountered! Janice
Date: 7/30/2018 12:56:00 PM
fabulous fun rhyme Janice got to say those things would drive me mad lol:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 7/30/2018 1:51:00 PM
Thanks so much, Jan! Janice
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