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September 23, 2023; Placed 1st: Mocking The Dead Contest; Sponsor: Silent One


 

All alone you sit there in grip of graveyard, hosting demonic thoughts, Listening to cries of tombstones, squalling from lovers’ somber epitaphs, Recounting how you chased prospects, innocent souls you courted, Celebrating your maleficence building bonfires on the burial grounds, Where you buried them one by one, watching the dance of demons, As your stony heart laughed aloud, mocking the dead in total disregard. You lured them with synthetic smiles, faux glamor of loveless stance, Never meaning a word uttered, attired in stares of spurious glance, As you prayed on them, then discarded; in landfills of broken-hearts. Relationships initiated in springs of life, often parched in summer heat, As passionless encounters burned in flame of hideous promiscuity; Got washed away by the feisty storms churning scurrilous intensity, Propelling hurricanes lovelorn, flooding realms of lovesome prairies, When aspirations of your lust subordinated inspirations of pure love. Old and fragile, you ruminate now, in frigid winters of your miserable life, Speechless, motionless, fearful of your pitiful world swiftly passing by, Haunting your eyes, as paranormal spirits, the silhouettes of the dead, Mock your decrepit existence, shouting insanities at your grimacing face. Remorseful beneath moon and stars, you inscribe your own epitaph: She was a gloom of stygian clouds, shrouding arc of love on sunlit dawns, She was a dubious counterfeit act; she was a vile curse on romance, A cooing dove of morn she was not; a phantom of love she sure was.

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Date: 10/2/2023 6:18:00 AM
Wow she sounds like a woman one should stay away from. Fascinating, with just a touch of macabre to keep your reader wanting more . For instance you could write a sequel about a lover she used then discarded carelessly. He's out to get revenge. LoL. I'm getting ahead of myself. Congratulations on your placement Vijay. Awesome write. Hugs
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Date: 10/1/2023 10:41:00 AM
No wonder you are a great poet who masters his quill, pen and brush.. and whose world of words of no restraints or limitations.. You reign the world of romance with your genuine sensitivity and soaring imagination and you impressively amaze your avid reader with your profound poetry and effective use of words, imagery and messages in displaying the turmoil of the soul and the gloomy side of Love.. the whole poem is an excellence! A fave to cherish.. Deserving the honour of top win! Congratulations dear Vijay on such a recognition.. God bless you. Best regards.
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Date: 9/29/2023 11:45:00 AM
This was an excellent poem for the contest.. you always seem to excel when it come to writing for my prompts.. so many wonderful lines.. Thank you for writing for my poem and congratulations on your placement..
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Date: 9/28/2023 2:59:00 PM
Excellent take on the theme. Imagery out of the ballpark!
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Date: 9/26/2023 10:11:00 PM
Engaging tale of fake love, and deceit. A tragic path to walk. Disgusting mockery of Love and life. A great entry for the contest, Vijay. You nailed it, my friend. A FAV for my list. Bill
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Date: 9/26/2023 8:45:00 AM
Wow! What an excellent poem for the contest. I hope it is a winner. The darkness to stay away from. The light we wish upon those going down dark roads. It's out there and true. You wrote this so well ! :)
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Date: 9/25/2023 8:58:00 PM
She was devious, deceitful and dangerous ! Qualities to stay away from, indeed. This is deep, powerful and filled with so many emotions. Someone like her, deserves to be all alone. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/26/2023 11:08:00 AM
Your thoughtful remarks are on mark, my friend. Much appreciate, as always, Brandy. Many thanks. Hugs to you as well.
Date: 9/24/2023 4:51:00 AM
wow she sure was Vijay, a shadow I wouldn't want to cross , thank you for sharing such riveting poetry, God bless
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/24/2023 9:10:00 AM
Much appreciate my friend, your kind remarks. Many thanks, Vienna.
Date: 9/24/2023 1:18:00 AM
You should get a POTD for this magnificent dark poem, a prelude to Halloween (?). Stupendous poem with alliteration, metaphors, imagery and play on words. Your poem deserves a top placing, the thoughts exude passionate emotions. So well done. Best for a win.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/24/2023 9:09:00 AM
Thank you Victor--your kind words resonate. Much appreciate your supportive comments.
Date: 9/23/2023 2:38:00 PM
It made me sit up and read. and think of the title "The Phantom" it 's fitting. And I thought of Eva Green in the movie "Sin City" Yes this discribes her. And I think this could be the aftermath of the love I seek. The love I write about. And looking back was I a phantom? or the victom of more than one. I don't write this much in the comment section.
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Date: 9/24/2023 9:08:00 AM
Thank for spending the time to write a detailed comment. Much appreciate your visit as always. Many thanks.
Date: 9/23/2023 2:15:00 PM
As passionless encounters burned in flame of hideous promiscuity… When aspirations of your lust subordinated inspirations of pure love.//To have a lifelong love develop true passion, one that holds you in their arms. God bless you, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 3:38:00 PM
Thank you my friend--I too liked that line you mentioned (When aspirations of your lust subordinated...). Much appreciate your visit and comments, Kim.
Date: 9/23/2023 12:33:00 PM
Your word choices were compelling. Your poem expresses the dark side of life and life's choices. So many outstanding lines and verses. I appreciate the alliterations; you have a unique voice that has addressed a powerful message. "She was a gloom of stygian clouds..." grabbed me.
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Date: 9/23/2023 3:36:00 PM
Thank you Sara--you are so very kind. Much appreciate your visit and thoughtful remarks. Nice to see you again on my page.
Date: 9/23/2023 12:06:00 PM
A dark and spellbinding, tragic and beautiful poem. You handled the topic so well, Vijay. Best of wishes for the contest. :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 3:35:00 PM
So nice to hear that from you my friend. Much appreciate your kind remarks, Evelyn. Many thanks for stopping by.
Date: 9/23/2023 8:15:00 AM
"You lured them with synthetic smiles, faux glamor of loveless stance, Never meaning a word uttered, attired in stares of spurious glance, As you prayed on them, then discarded; in landfills of broken-hearts." Brilliant, great poetry! Most horror-fiction, has real spiritual identity -- vampires are emotion-predators as you poignantly, poetically state. Blessings my friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 10:15:00 AM
So nice to hear that from someone who lives and breathes poetry. Much appreciate your kind thoughts my friend. Many thanks to you, Joe. Blessings!
Date: 9/23/2023 7:57:00 AM
Woah, this held my heart captivated throughout! What an impeccably dark write with melancholic shades of love.. Almost feeling like descriptions of an omen upon sweet sunshine tapestries and this stirs the soul in a very emotive way.. Your word choices are beyond impeccable and your rhymes as always are so meticulously crafted giving such an intriguing flow.. The ache, angst and gloom can be felt in the core of this write.. "Remorseful beneath moon and stars, you inscribe your own epitaph" Wow
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Date: 9/23/2023 10:17:00 AM
Yes Hiya, you describe it so very well. Tis why I added this shining gem to my fav list. God bless you//
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 10:13:00 AM
Glad to see you again my friend. Your thoughtful remarks are always inspiring, stemming from the heart. Enjoyed reading your poem, hoping it gets POTD. Many thanks, Hiya.
Date: 9/23/2023 7:01:00 AM
This new creation is undeniably captivating. The vivid imagery you have masterfully woven into the mocking dead theme has birthed a multitude of profound scenes that evoke both remorse and nostalgia for the men she once loved but ultimately left broken. Now aged, her regret comes too tardy, offering too little solace. It is a profoundly intricate and thought-provoking piece. Although dark, it reflects the unfortunate reality that life can sometimes be.
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Date: 9/23/2023 10:10:00 AM
Thank you my friend for your detailed remarks. You always speak from the rhythms of your heart. Dark is what the theme called for when it spoke of mocking the dead. Many thanks, Lasaad.
Date: 9/23/2023 6:55:00 AM
A vile curse on romance! Whoa what a soul hitting take on the prompt! I absolutely love this write and its so fitting for the theme, dark and moving! And the wordplay is brilliant here. Must i even say this! You are truly a gifted poet and your poems always leave me in awe! So creative and profound! I love those opening lines and also “ landfills of broken hearts” “ building bonfires.” Excellent alliterations and imagery. A fave from me! Silent one will love this one im sure!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 10:07:00 AM
Always a delight to read your thoughts my friend. A treat to dwell in your accolades and inspiring comments, Ink. Glad to have you on Soup--a welcome presence to so many. Much appreciate your FAVE. Many thanks.
Date: 9/23/2023 6:40:00 AM
WoW! Vijay, This is so well written, as I was reading it(I'm going to read it again) a ghost of some kind popped into my mind. The last made me think it was the ghost of a jilted lover. Nevertheless, like always you did a great job. I have missed your amazing pen. Have a great weekend my friend-Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 10:03:00 AM
Yes--its been while, for you have been away for quite some time. Glad you are back my friend. Much appreciate your kind thoughts, Alexis. Many thanks.
Date: 9/23/2023 6:31:00 AM
My good friend, this is indeed quite a gripping new creation. A very deep and interesting new creation. Quite dark but then again life can sometimes be that way to the unfortunates. A dark gem for me to add to my fav list.. God bless you ..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 10:01:00 AM
Thank you my friend for your visit and kind remarks. I am always honored when you visit, Robert. Many thanks for your kind remarks and your FAVE.
Date: 9/23/2023 5:43:00 AM
Ahhh, a killer of hearts. I had to reread this and I hope I got it right. She loves and leaves men shattered. Now old, her remorse is too little, too late. Poor phantom. Phenomenal entry
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/23/2023 6:19:00 AM
You got it my friend. That is the essence of my theme. Much appreciate your visit and kind remarks, Tom. Many thanks.

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